旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần rèn tính tự nhiên và mạch lạc: loại bỏ tiếng thừa (uh, like, kinda), sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn (1-2 câu) rồi thêm 1 câu chi tiết. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (watch/look at, scenery/view, while travelling). Ví dụ thực tế hoặc cảm xúc cụ thể sẽ làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I find it relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and small towns pass by, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và rút gọn, tránh diễn đạt lặp lại và lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu trực tiếp (No, I don't), giải thích ngắn gọn với lý do rõ ràng, dùng từ vựng chính xác (capture vs remember, memories). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể sẽ tăng tính thuyết phục.

示例: No, I don't usually take photos through the car window because I prefer to remember the view with my own eyes. For instance, when I travel through the countryside, I focus on the colours and details rather than trying to photograph them.

建议: Cần diễn đạt ngắn gọn, đúng thì và rõ ràng: dùng thì hiện tại để nói sở thích, tránh cụm từ lạ (“deep breath of the lips”). Thêm linking word để giải thích (because, for example) và chi tiết cụ thể (activities, sensations). Giữ 2-3 câu tối đa.

示例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because the natural environment feels calmer and fresher. For example, I enjoy hiking and listening to birdsong, which helps me relax and forget daily stress.

× Yes, I like to uh, look out the window and sightseeing the view around the car or the bus I travel link because I feel like it's kinda comfortable for me to look.

✓ Yes, I like to look out the window and sightsee the view around the car or the bus I travel in because I feel comfortable looking.

The student used 'sightseeing' incorrectly after 'and'; 'sightsee' is the verb form that pairs with 'to like' or can be used in base form after 'and'. Also 'I travel link' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for being inside a vehicle. Remove filler words like 'uh' and 'kinda' for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel verbs ('look' and 'sightsee') and correct preposition 'in'.

× No, I prefer looking at the scenery by my eyes because I feel the purity of the scenery of the spectacular landscape and it can bring many mem and it keeps many memory on my mind either that.

✓ No, I prefer to look at the scenery with my eyes because I can sense the purity of the spectacular landscape; it brings back many memories and keeps them in my mind.

Use 'prefer to + verb' or 'prefer + -ing' consistently; here 'prefer to look' is more natural. 'By my eyes' is incorrect preposition; use 'with my eyes'. 'Mem' and 'many memory' are incorrect; use 'memories' (plural). 'Keeps many memory on my mind' should be 'keeps them in my mind'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and plural form 'memories'.

× I prefer mountains more than the sea because when I go into the mountain I can feel the purity of the landscape, the background sounds such as bird singing or deep breath of the lips.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because when I go into the mountains I can feel the purity of the landscape and hear background sounds such as birds singing or deep breaths.

Inconsistent singular/plural: 'mountains' and 'the mountain' should match; use 'mountains' plural. 'Bird singing' should be 'birds singing' (plural) and 'deep breath of the lips' is incorrect and unclear; 'deep breaths' is appropriate. Also use 'prefer X to Y' structure. Suggestion: keep noun number consistent and use natural expressions for sounds.

× I feel like I'm very relaxed and comfortable when I went there.

✓ I feel very relaxed and comfortable when I go there.

Tense inconsistency: 'I feel' is present, but 'when I went there' is past. To describe a habitual or general feeling, use present tense 'when I go there'. Suggestion: match tenses for general statements (present present).