旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, word choice and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct verbs and nouns, and keep to 2–3 supporting sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly and provide a specific detail about what you like to see. Avoid repetition and aim for natural phrasing.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy watching the landscape. For example, I like seeing trees, houses and people going about their day, and watching the scenery helps me relax during long journeys.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason with correct tense and word order. Use one linking word (because/so) and a specific example to support your statement. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

示例: No, I rarely take photos from a moving car because I usually sleep during the trip. Also, I find it difficult to take clear pictures while the vehicle is moving.

建议: Give a direct preference sentence, then explain briefly with a specific reason and one supporting detail. Avoid repeating the same idea and correct word order. Use linking words like because or so to connect your reason.

示例: I prefer the sea because I have never been there and I really want to see it. For instance, I imagine walking on the beach and watching the waves, which sounds relaxing and exciting to me.

× Yes, I always request the scenery when I'm travelling by car because I am a painted person while I am get in a car.

✓ Yes, I always enjoy the scenery when I'm travelling by car because I am a pensive person when I get in a car.

Multiple errors: 'request the scenery' is incorrect verb choice; use 'enjoy the scenery' (verb usage). 'Painted person' likely wrong adjective; 'pensive' or 'calm' fits context (word choice/adjective). 'while I am get in a car' has incorrect tense and structure; correct is 'when I get in a car' (present simple for habitual action). Subject-verb agreement is handled by using 'I get'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for meaning (enjoy, like, prefer) and use 'when' + present simple for habitual actions.'

× So that's why I always sit the window and view the outside and I feel more calm.

✓ So that's why I always sit by the window and look outside, and I feel calmer.

Errors: 'sit the window' omits the preposition; correct is 'sit by the window' (preposition use). 'view the outside' is awkward; 'look outside' is natural (verb choice). 'I feel more calm' is grammatical but 'calmer' is the comparative adjective form that fits better (adjective form). Suggestion: use correct prepositions, choose natural verbs (look, watch), and use comparative adjectives when comparing states.'

× No, I I've never take that scenery outside of the curb because I I'm and sleeping while I'm in car so that's why I never take.

✓ No, I've never taken photos of the scenery outside the window because I usually fall asleep when I'm in the car, so I never take any photos.

Errors: 'I I've' has redundant pronoun/auxiliary; keep 'I've'. 'never take' should use present perfect 'never taken' with 'have' (past participle), so this is a past participle form error. 'outside of the curb' is incorrect preposition/phrase for car window; use 'outside the window' (preposition/word choice). 'I I'm and sleeping' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I usually fall asleep' (verb phrase). 'while I'm in car' needs article: 'in the car'. Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle for life experiences, correct prepositions, and clear verb phrases for habitual actions.'

× Do you prefer the mountains or the sea? Student: Currently I prefer travelling to sea because I have never seen the sea because before, that's why I really want to go to the sea.

✓ Currently I prefer travelling to the sea because I have never been to the sea before, so I really want to go there.

Errors: 'prefer travelling to sea' needs article 'the sea' (article error) and 'travelling to the sea' is acceptable but 'prefer the sea' is simpler. 'I have never seen the sea because before' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'have never been to the sea before' to express experience (verb form/past participle). Repetition 'to the sea' can be reduced using 'there'. Suggestion: use articles with geographical features ('the sea'), present perfect 'have never been' for experience, and avoid redundant phrasing by using pronouns like 'there'.