旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện: Giảm tiếng ừ và lặp từ, tổ chức câu rõ ràng với một câu chủ đề và 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ (for example, when, because) để mạch lạc. Lưu ý phát âm một số từ (ví dụ: "through", "landscape") và tránh cấu trúc lộn xộn.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I often notice trees, small parks and the changing city streets as we pass by, which helps me relax and observe local life.

建议: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng với cấu trúc: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Tránh nói lặp và filler (uh, um). Sử dụng động từ phù hợp (take photos, capture moments) và sửa ngữ pháp (take photos through the window / take photos from the window).

示例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I want to capture interesting scenes and memories. For instance, I usually photograph colorful buildings or fields when we pass rural areas.

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh lỗi nghiêm trọng về từ vựng ("suicide" là hoàn toàn không phù hợp). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the mountains). Giải thích ngắn gọn với lí do cụ thể và một ví dụ, dùng linking words (because, so). Chú ý phát âm và trật tự từ để câu mạch lạc.

示例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because the mountains make me feel relaxed and peaceful. For example, when I hike to a summit I enjoy fresh air and quiet views, which helps me forget daily stress.

× I have gone, uh, well gone through on the streets.

✓ I have been through these streets.

Incorrect use of past participle phrase and awkward wording. Use 'have been through' to indicate experience of passing through places; 'these streets' is clearer than 'on the streets'. Use present perfect for experience.

× I have gone through uh, such.

✓ I have been through them.

Awkward and incorrect past participle usage. Replace 'have gone through such' with 'have been through them' or 'have experienced them'. This uses present perfect correctly to express past experiences affecting the present.

× that is the really two thing about me.

✓ those are the two things about me.

Article and number agreement error. 'the really two thing' is incorrect; use plural 'things' and demonstrative 'those are' to refer to multiple items. Avoid 'really' in that position; use 'the two things' or 'two main things'.

× I often take a, some photo to the window.

✓ I often take some photos through the window.

Wrong preposition 'to' and singular/plural mismatch. Use 'through the window' to indicate viewpoint and plural 'photos' for general habit.

× I want to capture every moment I have, uh, go, I, I have gone through uh, such.

✓ I want to capture every moment I experience while traveling.

Unclear and repetitive structure. Simplify to a clear clause: 'capture every moment I experience while traveling.' Use present simple for habitual intention and present participle 'traveling' for ongoing action.

× I suicide, I prefer, uh, the, the mountain more than seas,

✓ I suppose I prefer the mountains to the sea,

Wrong word 'suicide' likely meant 'suppose' or 'actually'. Also use comparative phrasing 'prefer X to Y' and plural 'mountains' or singular 'the mountains' and singular 'the sea'.

× in the past I due to glam in the mountain and when I stay on top of the mountain,

✓ in the past I used to climb mountains, and when I stay on top of a mountain,

Multiple errors: 'due to glam' is incorrect; likely 'used to climb'. Preposition 'in the mountain' should be 'climb mountains' and 'on top of a mountain' is correct. Use 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× my feeling is relaxation and calm.

✓ I feel relaxed and calm.

Awkward noun phrase 'my feeling is relaxation and calm.' Use adjective form 'relaxed' and 'calm' to describe feelings. 'I feel relaxed and calm' is natural.

× Such kind of make me.

✓ That kind of thing makes me feel that way.

Ungrammatical fragment. Use complete clause 'That kind of thing makes me feel that way.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'that kind ... makes'.