旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời đã trả lời trực tiếp nhưng hơi dài dòng và lặp từ. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu khẳng định ngắn gọn, sau đó đưa vào 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể, dùng từ liên kết để mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ 'on the bus or car' -> 'on the bus or in the car'). Hạn chế số câu tối đa 4-5 câu và sửa cấu trúc để tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I find the changing scenery interesting, especially the local houses and fields. For example, on my last trip I enjoyed watching farmers working in the rice paddies and children playing by the road, which made the journey feel shorter.

建议: Trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra lí do hợp lý nhưng câu hơi lặp ý và ngữ pháp có thể tinh chỉnh (ví dụ 'making it difficult to check' không rõ nghĩa). Nên dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'therefore'), và thêm một cụ thể ví dụ hoặc thói quen để câu sinh động hơn.

示例: No, I usually don't. It's hard to get good shots through a moving window because of reflections and motion blur, so most photos turn out hazy. For instance, when I tried to photograph a sunset from a car last month the pictures were all blurred, so I don't bother anymore.

建议: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu có lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu mạch lạc ('my the sea', 'On the beach I can.' không hoàn chỉnh). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích vì sao với ví dụ cụ thể, và tránh câu vụn. Dùng từ nối để liên kết lý do và ví dụ.

示例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and exploring the beach. I haven't had many chances to visit the mountains, so the sea feels more familiar. For example, I often spend hours collecting seashells and paddling in the water, which I find very relaxing.

× Absolutely, because just sitting on the bus or car is so boring and the scenery when traveling is new to me, so it's really attractive.

✓ Absolutely, because just sitting on the bus or in the car is so boring, and the scenery when I travel is new to me, so it's really attractive.

Use present simple consistently for habitual actions and correct preposition use. Replace 'on the bus or car' with 'on the bus or in the car' (different vehicles use different prepositions). Change 'when traveling' to 'when I travel' to make the subject clear and keep present tense for habitual action. Also add a comma before 'and' to improve sentence clarity.

× No, I don't because it's difficult to do that. You have to take photos through the window so it is hard to catch beautiful angles.

✓ No, I don't because it's difficult to do that. You have to take photos through the window, so it is hard to capture beautiful angles.

Use 'capture' instead of 'catch' for collocation with 'angles' and maintain verb form. Also add a comma before 'so' linking two clauses. 'Catch beautiful angles' is unnatural; 'capture beautiful angles' is correct collocation in English.

× Besides, the car may run quickly making it difficult to check.

✓ Besides, the car may go quickly, making it difficult to capture good shots.

Use 'go quickly' instead of 'run quickly' when referring to vehicles in general. 'Check' is vague; use 'capture good shots' for taking photos. Keep modal 'may' and present participle 'making' to show result.

× I would choose my the sea because I haven't experienced mountains yet.

✓ I would choose the sea because I haven't experienced the mountains yet.

Remove the extra possessive 'my' and use the definite article 'the' with 'sea' and 'mountains' when speaking about general categories or specific known types. 'The mountains' is natural when referring to mountain environments in general.

× On the beach I can. I often play with water and find some seashells.

✓ On the beach I can: I often play in the water and find some seashells.

Fix sentence fragment 'On the beach I can.' by connecting it to the following clause or completing the verb. Use 'play in the water' rather than 'play with water' for natural collocation. Use a colon or combine into one sentence for clarity.