旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence: say whether you look out the window and why. Use one or two supporting reasons linked with connectors (because, while, so). Avoid irrelevant words and fix grammar (e.g., "comfortable" → "more comfortable"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I feel more comfortable there. For example, cars are less crowded than buses, so I can relax and enjoy the view. Also, the slower pace on some roads lets me notice details like parks and houses.

建议: Be direct and more specific. Begin with a clear statement whether you take photos. Then give one or two specific examples of what you photograph and why, using linking words (for example, because, such as). Correct word order and use plural/singular appropriately.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car window because I enjoy capturing beautiful scenes. For example, I like photographing green gardens, rolling hills and distant mountains, especially when the light is good. These photos help me remember the trip.

建议: Give a clear preference sentence and then add 1–2 concise reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar ("I prefer the mountains"; "I feel comfortable travelling in the mountains"). Add a brief example to make the answer specific.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and the green scenery. For instance, hiking on mountain trails lets me see forests and valleys up close, which I find more relaxing than crowded beaches.

× I look out the window at the scenery by car because I feel comfortable by car to see around us and I don't comfortable to traveling by bus because it is very crowded and. Pantry.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery when I travel by car because I feel comfortable seeing the surroundings by car, and I don't feel comfortable travelling by bus because it is very crowded.

Errors: 'comfortable' used without a linking verb (be) or verb phrase and misplaced phrase order; 'to traveling' is incorrect verb form; 'see around us' is unnatural. Suggestion: Use the adjective with a verb (feel comfortable), use the gerund after 'feel comfortable' (travelling), and reorder phrases for clarity. Also remove stray fragment 'Pantry'.

× I take the photos of the scenery to like greenery of the gardens and landscapes, to mountains and to other products I see in car to see is very beautiful.

✓ I take photos of the scenery, such as the greenery of gardens and landscapes, mountains, and other things I see from the car because they are very beautiful.

Errors: Unnecessary definite article 'the photos' and awkward prepositions. 'to like' is incorrect; 'other products' wrong word choice; missing 'from' before 'the car'; sentence structure unclear. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary articles, use 'such as' to list examples, use 'from the car' for viewpoint, and use plural noun 'things' and appropriate connectors.

× I prefer the mountains because I comfortable to travelling via mountain to see around as the greenery is very beautiful.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I feel comfortable travelling in the mountains and enjoying the beautiful greenery.

Errors: Missing verb 'feel' before 'comfortable'; incorrect preposition 'to travelling' and 'via mountain' should be 'in the mountains' or 'when travelling in the mountains'; word order awkward. Suggestion: Include the linking verb 'feel', use the gerund 'travelling', and correct prepositions and plural 'mountains' for natural English.