旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep your answer concise with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and precise vocabulary. Avoid repetition (e.g. “scenery”, “scenarios”) and correct errors in tense and word choice. Use one or two supporting details linked with a connector (e.g. “because” or “so”) and limit to 3–4 short sentences.

示例: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy discovering new places. For example, I notice unusual buildings and landscapes that make me curious, so I sometimes take photos to remember them.

建议: Answer directly and avoid fillers like “uh.” Use accurate collocations (e.g. “take photos of the scenery” not “scenarios”). Give a brief reason and one specific example using a linking word such as “because” or “for example.” Keep sentences brief and grammatically correct.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to keep memories of new places. For example, last month I photographed a colourful market I saw from the bus and later shared the pictures with my friends.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Correct vocabulary (e.g. “beach” or “seashore” instead of “stand”) and grammar (e.g. “relaxing” → “relaxing feeling” or “it relaxes me”). Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

示例: I prefer the sea because the sound and smell of the ocean relax me. For example, I enjoy walking along the beach and listening to the waves, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I do look out the window when I travel by car or bus, especially when I go to the new place, I see a spot the interesting things and scenarios which made me wandered and excited to watch them. I really love that scenarios and I clicked the photos also.

✓ Yes, I look out the window when I travel by car or bus, especially when I go to a new place. I spot interesting things and scenes that make me wonder and excite me to look at them. I really love those scenes and I also take photos.

Errors: inconsistent present simple usage and incorrect past tense forms (used 'do look' unnecessarily and 'made me wandered'), wrong article use ('the new place' -> 'a new place'), incorrect word order/choice ('spot the interesting things' -> 'spot interesting things'), plural/article agreement ('that scenarios' -> 'those scenes'), incorrect verb forms ('clicked' -> 'take' to match habitual present). Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions (I look, I spot, I take), use 'a' for nonspecific singular nouns, use plural demonstrative 'those' for plural nouns, use base verb or present tense rather than past participle when describing habitual actions, and choose correct lexical items ('scenes' instead of 'scenarios', 'wonder' as verb not 'wandered').

× Yes, I take photos of the scenarios outside the car window, especially when I go, uh, to the new place. I spot the interesting things that amazed me and uh, to keep hold of the memories. I capture the moments and keep it safe and share it with my friends.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when I go to a new place. I spot interesting things that amaze me and help me keep the memories. I capture the moments, keep them safe, and share them with my friends.

Errors: wrong noun ('scenarios' -> 'scenery'), tense mismatch ('amazed' past -> 'amaze' present for habitual), sentence fragment/infinitive misuse ('and uh, to keep hold of the memories' -> 'and help me keep the memories'), pronoun and agreement ('it' -> 'them' for plural 'moments'). Suggestions: use 'scenery' for views, keep verbs in simple present for habitual actions, convert infinitive fragments into complete clauses, and use plural pronouns to match plural nouns.

× I prefer the sea because I really love the sound and smell of the ocean and I like playing and walking along the stand and also I really love to spend time on the seashore which gives me very relaxing.

✓ I prefer the sea because I really love the sound and smell of the ocean, and I like playing and walking along the sand. I also really love spending time on the seashore because it makes me feel very relaxed.

Errors: wrong preposition/word choice ('along the stand' -> 'along the sand'), incorrect gerund/infinitive use ('love to spend' -> 'love spending' is more natural), incorrect clause ('which gives me very relaxing' -> 'because it makes me feel very relaxed'). Suggestions: use correct nouns ('sand'), use gerunds for enjoyment contexts, and build cause-result clauses with 'because' and an appropriate adjective ('relaxed').