建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use more natural grammar. Say “I have lived in Taipei” rather than “Since I lived in Taipei,” and use “Taipei 101” instead of “Taipei one hundred and one.” Avoid repeating “famous” and correct “traveling spot for the tourist” to “a popular tourist attraction.” The final sentence should be “Seeing this kind of skyscraper is one of the most exciting experiences” because “excited” describes people, while “exciting” describes experiences. Use linking words such as “For example” and give one specific detail about the building.

示例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Taipei, a very developed city. For example, Taipei 101 is only a short distance away and is one of the city’s most popular tourist attractions. I think seeing it lit up at night is particularly exciting.

建议: Your answer contains a clear opinion, but the second sentence is too long and has several grammatical problems. Use “Sometimes, I take photos when a building matches the color of the sky” instead of “Since sometimes I found...” Keep the response within three or four well-connected sentences, and avoid repeating “because.” Also, “not well cleaned” is more naturally expressed as “poorly maintained,” and “not fashionable” could be replaced with “unattractive” or “outdated.”

示例: It depends on the building and my mood. I sometimes take photos when a skyscraper contrasts beautifully with the sky, especially at sunset. However, I usually avoid photographing poorly maintained or unattractive buildings because they do not make very interesting pictures.

建议: State the building clearly at the beginning: “I would like to visit the observation deck of Taipei 101.” Avoid “In my opinion” because the question already asks for your preference, and replace “once in my life” with the more natural “at least once.” Correct “at eighty five floor” to “on the 85th floor” and say “the city view from the 85th floor.” Explain why you want to go and connect your ideas with “because” or “especially.”

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the observation deck of Taipei 101 at least once. It is located on the 85th floor, so I could enjoy a spectacular view of Taipei, especially at night. I think it would be a memorable experience, so I would definitely like to give it a try.

建议: Your position is clear, but improve the grammar and avoid repeating “if I lived in the tall building.” Use the present tense because you are discussing a general preference: “Taiwan experiences many earthquakes.” Say “It might be more difficult to evacuate” instead of “It could be harder for me to escape,” and “falling objects” instead of “things are fallen.” Organize the answer into a direct opinion, a reason, and one consequence.

示例: Not really. Taiwan experiences earthquakes quite frequently, so I would feel less safe living in a very tall building. Although modern skyscrapers are designed to withstand earthquakes, I might still worry about evacuating and being injured by falling objects. I would prefer to live in a shorter building instead.

× Since I lived in Taipei, which was the capital city of Taiwan, we have many tall buildings in my hometown.

✓ Since I live in Taipei, which is the capital city of Taiwan, we have many tall buildings in my hometown.

The answer describes Taipei’s current situation, so the present tense is more appropriate: live and is. Use the past tense only if you no longer live there or if you are describing a past situation.

× Since I lived in Taipei, which was the capital city of Taiwan, we have many tall buildings in my hometown.

✓ Since I live in Taipei, which is the capital city of Taiwan, there are many tall buildings in my hometown.

Use there are to introduce the existence of plural buildings. We have means that people possess something, so it is less suitable when describing what exists in a place.

× For example, the famous skyscraper is Taipei one hundred and one, which was the famous traveling spot for the tourist.

✓ For example, Taipei 101 is a famous tourist attraction.

Use a before a singular countable noun when mentioning one example for the first time: a famous tourist attraction. Taipei 101 is a proper name, so it does not need the article the before it. Tourist attraction is also the natural expression for a place that visitors enjoy.

× For example, the famous skyscraper is Taipei one hundred and one, which was the famous traveling spot for the tourist.

✓ For example, Taipei 101 is a famous tourist attraction.

Taipei 101 is still a tourist attraction, so use the present tense is rather than the past tense was. Use was only when discussing a past condition that is no longer true.

× And seeing that kind of skyscrapper is one of the most excited things.

✓ Seeing that kind of skyscraper is one of the most exciting things.

Excited describes how a person feels, while exciting describes something that causes the feeling. A skyscraper or an experience is exciting, but a person is excited.

× Since sometimes I found that the skyscraper and it matched well with the sky color, then I will take a picture of the sky and also the building.

✓ Sometimes, I find that a skyscraper matches the color of the sky, so I take a picture of both the sky and the building.

The answer describes a usual habit, so use the present tense find, matches, and take. Sometimes should normally begin the sentence here; since is unnecessary and makes the sentence structure incorrect.

× Since sometimes I found that the skyscraper and it matched well with the sky color, then I will take a picture of the sky and also the building.

✓ Sometimes, I find that a skyscraper matches the color of the sky, so I take a picture of both the sky and the building.

The subject a skyscraper is singular, so the present-tense verb must be matches, not match. Avoid using both the noun and it as the subject of the same clause.

× For some reasons I would not take pictures of the buildings because some of the buildings in Taipei would be kind of ugly.

✓ For some reason, I would not take pictures of the buildings because some of the buildings in Taipei would be kind of ugly.

The fixed expression is for some reason when giving one general explanation. Use for some reasons only when referring to several specific reasons.

× In my opinion I would like to visit Taipei one and one at the highest place once in my life.

✓ In my opinion, I would like to visit Taipei 101 at its highest observation deck once in my life.

Use at to refer to a location such as an observation deck, but the original phrase at the highest place is not a natural location expression. The phrase highest observation deck clearly identifies the place the speaker wants to visit.

× Because seeing the city view in at eighty five floor, especially at night is one kind of special experience that I might have in my life.

✓ Seeing the city view from the eighty-fifth floor, especially at night, would be a special experience that I might have in my life.

Use from when describing the location from which a view is seen. Do not use in and at together before a floor. The natural expression is from the eighty-fifth floor.

× Because seeing the city view in at eighty five floor, especially at night is one kind of special experience that I might have in my life.

✓ Seeing the city view from the eighty-fifth floor, especially at night, would be a special experience that I might have in my life.

A singular countable noun such as experience needs an article. Use a special experience rather than one kind of special experience in this sentence. Also, use the before an ordinal floor number: the eighty-fifth floor.

× Not really, since Taiwan had many earthquakes and when the earthquake it would be terrible and not safe on if I lived in the toll building.

✓ Not really, since Taiwan has many earthquakes, and when an earthquake occurs, it can be terrible and unsafe if I live in a tall building.

Taiwan’s earthquakes are a current and general fact, so use has instead of had. Use occurs for a general condition that may happen at any time. The present tense live is also suitable for a general opinion about living in tall buildings.

× Not really, since Taiwan had many earthquakes and when the earthquake it would be terrible and not safe on if I lived in the toll building.

✓ Not really, since Taiwan has many earthquakes, and when an earthquake occurs, it can be terrible and unsafe if I live in a tall building.

The clause when the earthquake is incomplete because earthquake needs a verb and an article. Use the complete clause when an earthquake occurs. Also, place the conditional clause directly after the main idea without the unnecessary preposition on.

× Not really, since Taiwan had many earthquakes and when the earthquake it would be terrible and not safe on if I lived in the toll building.

✓ Not really, since Taiwan has many earthquakes, and when an earthquake occurs, it can be terrible and unsafe if I live in a tall building.

The preposition on cannot be used before an if-clause in this structure. Say it can be terrible and unsafe if I live in a tall building. Use in a tall building, not on a tall building, when describing residence inside a building.

× It could be harder for me to escape and also have more risk if I lived in the toll building.

✓ It could be harder for me to escape and I could also face more risk if I lived in a tall building.

Use a before the singular countable noun building when referring to one building in general. The original article the incorrectly suggests a specific building already known to the listener.

× I could be hit by something if things are fallen during the earthquakes.

✓ I could be hit by something if things fall during an earthquake.

Things fall is an active clause because things perform the action. Are fallen is an incorrect passive construction here. Use fall after if to describe what may happen during an earthquake.

× I could be hit by something if things are fallen during the earthquakes.

✓ I could be hit by something if things fall during an earthquake.

Use the singular form an earthquake when referring to one possible event in a general situation. Use earthquakes only when discussing multiple earthquakes as events.