建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cümlenizi daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru kurun. Konuya doğrudan cevap verin, ardından bir bağlaçla detay verin. Örneğin çoğul/tekil uyumuna ve yer isimlerinin yazımına dikkat edin. Ayrıca ‘in the Izmir’ yerine ‘in Izmir’ ve yapı adını düzeltin.

示例: There aren’t many tall buildings near my home in Chile. However, when I visited Izmir I saw the Faluk Tower in Bayraklı, which was quite impressive.

建议: Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı yapın; gereksiz kelimeleri çıkarın. Konuya doğrudan ‘No’ diyip nedenini bağlaçla açıklayın. Ayrıca zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (‘I don’t take photos’ veya ‘I don’t usually take photos’).

示例: I don’t usually take photos of buildings, but when I see a large tower I often wonder how they were constructed and what materials were used.

建议: Daha resmi ve akıcı ifadeler kullanın; konuşma dilindeki dolgu sözcüklerini (‘uh’, ‘wanna’) azaltın. Kısa bir neden ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin ve iki veya üç cümleyi geçmemeye çalışın.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world and I am curious about its design and the view from the observation deck.

建议: Daha düzgün gramer kullanın ve fikirlerinizi mantıklı bir sırayla ifade edin. Kısa cümlelerle nedenini açıklayın; ‘I feel high’ yerine ‘I feel uncomfortable at heights’ ve ‘I cannot to get on plane’ yerine ‘I cannot get on a plane because I am afraid of heights.’ gibi doğru yapıları kullanın.

示例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I feel uncomfortable at heights. In fact, I am afraid of flying, so living high above the ground would make me anxious.

× In Chile there is no tall buildings, but in the Izmir there is a Falkut tower in Byrakler.

✓ In Chile there are no tall buildings, but in Izmir there is a Falkut Tower in Byrakler.

'There is' is used with singular nouns; for plural nouns use 'there are'. Also 'the Izmir' is incorrect because city names don't take 'the'. Capitalize proper nouns. Suggestion: use 'there are no tall buildings' and drop 'the' before city names.

× I'm not taking photo guy but when I see a big tower I'm thinking how they can make this building.

✓ I'm not a photographer, but when I see a big tower I wonder how they built this building.

'I'm not taking photo' incorrectly uses present continuous and misses an article; use a noun 'photographer' or 'I don't take photos'. 'I'm thinking' is awkward here; use 'I wonder' or 'I think about' to express curiosity. Also 'can make' should be past 'built' when referring to completed construction.

× Probably. I wanna go and see Burj Khalifa. Uh, Burj Khalifa is the tallest building on earth.

✓ Probably. I want to go and see the Burj Khalifa. Burj Khalifa is the tallest building on earth.

'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to' in a test. Use the definite article 'the' before famous building names like 'the Burj Khalifa'. Tense is fine; only register and article need correction.

× No, absolutely no. I'm feeling high. To be honest. I cannot to get on plane because of my fearing.

✓ No, absolutely not. I feel anxious about heights. To be honest, I cannot get on a plane because of my fear of flying.

'Absolutely no' is unnatural; use 'absolutely not'. 'I'm feeling high' is incorrect for fear of heights; use 'I feel anxious about heights'. 'I cannot to get' wrongly includes 'to' after 'cannot'; remove 'to'. 'Plane' needs 'a' article: 'a plane'. 'My fearing' is incorrect noun; use 'my fear of flying'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms and noun phrases and articles.