建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I live in a very urban area' not 'urge urban'), and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a very urban area. For example, there is a 30-storey apartment block two streets away and several office towers along the main road.

建议: Answer directly and then explain briefly with specific reasons. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I don't usually take photos of buildings because I find them uninteresting'). Use a linking word such as 'because' or 'however' and give a short example to support your opinion.

示例: Not usually, because I find photographing buildings less interesting than landscapes. For example, I prefer taking photos of the countryside where I can capture fields, rivers and changing light.

建议: Give a direct answer and then name specific buildings with reasons why you want to visit them. Use clearer phrasing ('different countries' not 'other different countries') and include a linking phrase like 'for example' or 'such as'.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit famous buildings in other countries. For example, I want to see the Eiffel Tower in Paris because of its history, and the Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao because of its modern architecture.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar ('live in a tall building', 'offer a wide view'). Avoid vague or incomplete phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect reasons to your main idea.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers wide, panoramic views of the city. For instance, from a high-floor balcony I could see parks, rivers and the skyline, which would be very enjoyable.

× Of course there are actually I would live in a tall building and I there are many tall buildings in my city because I live in a urge urban.

✓ Of course there are. Actually, I would live in a tall building, and there are many tall buildings in my city because I live in an urban area.

This sentence has plural/singular and article issues. 'urge urban' is incorrect; the correct noun phrase is 'an urban area.' Also the sentence run-on needed punctuation and 'I there are' is ungrammatical. Suggest splitting into shorter clauses, use 'an' before vowel sound words ('an urban area'), and remove redundant 'I' before 'there are.'

× Actually not because I think take photos of buildings was so boring and unmeaningful.

✓ Actually not, because I think taking photos of buildings is so boring and meaningless.

The verb form and tense are incorrect. After 'think' a gerund is needed: 'taking.' The clause should be present tense 'is' to match the opinion. 'Unmeaningful' is incorrect; use 'meaningless.' Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× Actually compare that I like to take photos of countryside.

✓ Actually, compared to that, I prefer to take photos of the countryside.

The phrase 'compare that' is incorrect. Use 'compared to that' or better 'compared to buildings, I prefer...' Also 'prefer' is a more natural verb for contrast. Include the definite article 'the' before 'countryside.'

× Of course there are and I want to visit some buildings in other different countries, just like Eiffel Tower and some special and modern building.

✓ Of course there are, and I want to visit some buildings in different countries, such as the Eiffel Tower and some special, modern buildings.

Number agreement and article use are incorrect. 'Eiffel Tower' requires the definite article 'the' in this context. 'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'some.' 'Other different countries' is redundant; use 'different countries.' Also add commas between adjectives 'special, modern.'

× Uh, of course, yes. I think living a tall building can make a wide size and see some different size in this place and I think it can shows my.

✓ Uh, of course. Yes, I think living in a tall building can give me more space and allow me to see different views in this place, and I think it can show my status.

Multiple errors: missing preposition 'in' before 'a tall building' (preposition error), incorrect noun phrase 'wide size' should be 'more space' or 'a larger space,' 'see some different size' should be 'see different views.' 'Shows' should be base form 'show' after 'can.' The final phrase 'show my' is incomplete; likely 'show my status' or 'show my success.' Suggestions: use 'living in,' replace awkward nouns with 'space' and 'views,' and ensure verbs after modal 'can' are base form.