建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Порада: Говоріть більш чітко та лаконічно, починаючи з прямої відповіді на запитання, потім додайте 1–2 конкретні деталі. Уникайте повторів, заповнювачів («uh», «like») та граматичних помилок (наприклад, узгодження чисел). Використовуйте зв’язки, наприклад: “for example” або “such as”, щоб зробити мову більш зв’язною.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a modern apartment block with many glass windows which is about thirteen storeys high. It stands out because of its contemporary design and large balconies.

建议: Порада: Починайте з короткої прямої відповіді («Yes» або «No»), потім поясніть причину з конкретним прикладом. Уникайте граматичних помилок у часах та числівниках, та робіть речення простими й зв’язними, використовуючи сполучники («but», «so», «because»).

示例: Not usually, but sometimes I take photos of buildings at night because the lighting makes them look spectacular. For instance, when I walk in the city centre I often photograph a certain tower because its illuminated facade creates a great contrast against the sky.

建议: Порада: Відповідайте прямо, надайте чітку причину та 1–2 деталі, чому ви хочете відвідати цю будівлю. Уникайте тавтології та неправильного порядку слів. Використовуйте прикметники помірно та правильно узгоджуйте їх із іменниками.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest skyscraper in the world. I am interested in its architecture and the observation deck views, which are said to be spectacular.

建议: Порада: Давайте коротку чітку відповідь, потім поясніть одну або дві причини з конкретними деталями. Уникайте незрозумілих чисел і фрагментованих фраз. Використовуйте зв’язки («because», «so», «for example») та правильну лексику для опису виду та зручностей.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views from high floors are amazing. For example, living on the 20th floor would give me a wide view of the city and more natural light in my apartment.

× Uh, yellow, of course, I live in, not, uh, in, in the center, but I also have here a lot of, uh, huge buildings, uh, for example, this one buildings, uh, in the modern style with all these windows, uh, and it's, uh, probably 13.

✓ Yes, of course. I don't live in the center, but there are a lot of huge buildings here. For example, this building is modern with many windows, and it's probably 13 stories high.

The sentence contained several issues: incorrect word choices and adjective placement ('yellow' is irrelevant and misplaced), plural/singular mismatch ('this one buildings' should be 'this building'), and awkward adverb/adjective use ('huge buildings' is fine but surrounding filler words disrupt meaning). Suggest removing filler words, use 'there are' for existence, match singular/plural, and use 'stories high' to describe height. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary fillers, restructure into clear sentences, ensure noun-adjective agreement and proper singular/plural forms.

× In a day note, but when I walk in the city center in the night and, uh, this building are always this perfect beautiful lights and it was uh, looking where No, it's amazing. So in this way, yeah, I will take this photo, but usually no really.

✓ Not usually during the day, but when I walk in the city center at night, this building always has perfect beautiful lights and looks amazing. In that case I will take a photo, but usually I do not.

Errors include subject-verb disagreement ('this building are' should be 'this building always has' or 'these buildings are'), incorrect tense usage ('it was uh, looking' is incorrect—use 'looks'), incorrect preposition ('in the night' should be 'at night'), and unclear adverb placement. Suggest simplifying sentences, use correct subject-verb agreement, present tense for habitual actions, and correct prepositions ('at night').

× In my city I have visited a tall building building, so they would prefer to visit. But in the whole world I would prefer visit Burj Khalifa in Dubai. Of course, it's a really huge, enormous sizes. It's look really perfect.

✓ In my city I have visited a tall building, so I would prefer to visit that one. But worldwide I would prefer to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai. Of course, it is really huge and enormous in size. It looks perfect.

Problems: doubled word ('building building'), incorrect pronoun use ('they would prefer' should match subject 'I'), missing article ('the Burj Khalifa'), incorrect adjective/adverb forms ('enormous sizes' -> 'enormous in size'), and verb form ('It's look' -> 'It looks'). Suggest removing duplicates, keep pronouns consistent with the subject, use articles for unique landmarks, and use correct verb forms and adjective constructions.

× Yeah, one of the reason why I want to live in a tall building, see, it's a view because when you live in a 5015, uh, 24 somewhere, uh, like that, you have enormous speed, uh, view and it's really beautiful to have.

✓ Yes, one of the reasons I want to live in a tall building is the view. When you live on the 24th floor or somewhere high like that, you have an amazing expansive view and it is really beautiful.

Errors: singular/plural mismatch ('one of the reason' -> 'one of the reasons'), unclear numeric expression ('5015, 24' is unclear—use '24th floor'), incorrect collocation ('enormous speed view' is incorrect—use 'expansive' or 'amazing view'), and article usage ('a view' vs 'the view'). Suggest use correct plural for 'reasons', clarify floor number with ordinal, choose proper adjectives for 'view', and use articles appropriately.