建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz dolgu sesleri (uh) ve tekrarlar azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede doğrudan cevap verin, sonra yer ve bir örnek vererek destekleyin. Örneğin "I live in central Istanbul, so there are many skyscrapers nearby, including the Trump Tower." gibi kısa ve net bir yapı kullanın. Ayrıca "majorly Aqua" ifadesi belirsiz; doğru yer adını veya daha genel bir tanımı kullanın.

示例: Yes. I live in central Istanbul, so there are many skyscrapers nearby. For example, the Trump Tower is one of the prominent buildings in my area.

建议: Cümle yapısı ve sözdizimi düzeltilmeli; fikirleri mantıklı bağlaçlarla organize et. Dolgu kelimelerini çıkarıp, tercih sırasını net ifade et. Örnek destekleyici ayrıntı verin (hangi tür doğal sahneler, neden tercih ediyorsunuz). Örneğin: "Sometimes I photograph buildings, but I usually prefer natural scenes like parks or the Bosphorus because they feel more relaxing."

示例: Sometimes I do photograph buildings, but I usually prefer natural scenes such as parks or the Bosphorus because they feel more relaxing and photogenic.

建议: Cevap doğrudan ama daha doğal ve akıcı olabilir. Kısa cevap verildikten sonra nedenini net bir şekilde bağlayıcı ifadelerle belirtin ve geçmiş deneyimi açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları düzeltilecek. Örnek: "No, because it is very close to my home and I have already visited it several times."

示例: No, I wouldn't, because that building is very close to my home and I have already visited it several times in the past.

建议: Duyguyu ve nedeni açık, doğal bir dilde ifade et. "Hurt me" ifadesi yerine daha uygun İngilizce ifadeler kullanın (e.g. "make me feel unsafe"). Depremle ilgili endişeyi net verin ve bir bağlantı cümlesi ekleyin. Örnek: "No, I wouldn't. Tall buildings make me feel unsafe because Istanbul is an earthquake-prone area and I have some trauma related to earthquakes."

示例: No, I wouldn't. Tall buildings make me feel unsafe because Istanbul is an earthquake-prone area and I have some trauma related to earthquakes.

× Yes, uh, there are some uh, tall buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home.

The sentence contains unnecessary filler words 'uh' and extra commas which do not affect grammar but reduce clarity. Remove filler words to make the 'there are' construction clear and natural. Use 'there are' correctly for plural 'buildings'.

× Uh, since I live in the center of Istanbul, uh, in majorly Aqua uh, there are many skyscrapers in here, uh, and one of these Trump Tower.

✓ Since I live in the center of Istanbul, in the major area of Ata?A, there are many skyscrapers here, and one of them is Trump Tower.

Problems: 'in here' is incorrect; use 'here' (no preposition) after 'are many skyscrapers'. 'one of these Trump Tower' is ungrammatical; use 'one of them is Trump Tower' or 'one of these is Trump Tower'. Also 'majorly Aqua' is unclear; replace with correct place name or phrase. Suggestions: remove fillers, use 'in the center of Istanbul' then 'there are many skyscrapers here' and 'one of them is Trump Tower'.

× Yes, sometimes I prefer taking these buildings photos, uh, but usually I prefer natural, uh, scenes, uh, buildings not always keep me.

✓ Yes, sometimes I prefer taking photos of buildings, but usually I prefer natural scenes; buildings do not always attract me.

Use the noun phrase 'photos of buildings' not 'buildings photos'. 'Prefer' can be followed by a gerund: 'taking photos of'. 'Buildings not always keep me' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'do not always attract me' or 'do not always appeal to me'. Suggestions: use correct noun order ('photos of buildings') and a clear verb ('attract' or 'appeal to').

× No, because. This building's very near my home and whenever I want to visit it, I can visit and I did it at the past time.

✓ No, because this building is very near my home, and whenever I want to visit it I can; I visited it in the past.

'No, because.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the next clause. 'This building's very near' is informal contraction; better 'this building is very near my home'. 'I did it at the past time' is incorrect: use 'I visited it in the past' or 'I have visited it before'. Suggestions: combine clauses, use proper past tense ('visited'), or present perfect ('I have visited it before') depending on emphasis.

× No, uh, the tall buildings hurt me. Uh, the tall buildings hurt me because Istanbulina uh, earthquake region and I have a trauma, uh, for earthquake.

✓ No, the tall buildings upset me. They make me anxious because Istanbul is in an earthquake zone and I have trauma from earthquakes.

'Hurt me' is literal and not the best choice for emotional distress; use 'upset me' or 'make me anxious'. 'Istanbulina earthquake region' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'Istanbul is in an earthquake zone'. 'I have a trauma for earthquake' is incorrect; use 'I have trauma from earthquakes' or 'I am traumatized by earthquakes'. Suggestions: use correct subject pronoun 'they' and clear prepositions 'in an earthquake zone' and 'trauma from'.