建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details. Correct plural and verb forms, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to connect details.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a seven‑storey apartment block close by, and I sometimes visit its ground‑floor shops for coffee and shopping.

建议: Respond directly, correct tense and verb forms, and give a clear reason with a linking word. Keep it brief and natural. Replace vague phrases like "everyone would feel not happy" with specific reasons (e.g. people nearby feel uncomfortable).

示例: I used to take photos of buildings, but I rarely do now because I feel awkward pointing my camera in crowded areas. Also, I worry that nearby people might feel uncomfortable when I take close shots.

建议: Clarify which building you mean and give specific reasons. Use a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add details using linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid confusing location phrases like "in my CD."

示例: Yes, I would like to visit an old shopping arcade near my city centre that I haven't been to for years. It has wide streets and many small arcades, and I want to return because there are interesting shops and food stalls to explore.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and explain reasons with correct grammar and natural vocabulary. Replace vague phrases like "a big relaxation and reflection" with concrete benefits (e.g. good view, quiet). Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a high‑rise apartment because it offers great views and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, from a high floor I could enjoy city panoramas and feel more private and relaxed.

× Yes, there are a lot of high rise building in my home, especially some building that is like have 7 floors which is very tall and sometimes I used to go to it and have some fun inside the building.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of high-rise buildings near my home, especially some buildings that have about seven floors, which are very tall, and sometimes I go there to have fun inside.

The sentence uses singular nouns where plural is required ('building' -> 'buildings') and mixes forms. Use 'a lot of' with plural countable nouns. 'High-rise' is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated. 'Some building that is like have 7 floors' is ungrammatical: change to 'some buildings that have about seven floors.' Also replace 'used to go to it' with 'go there' to match present habitual meaning. Suggestions: make nouns agree in number with determiners and verbs, and keep consistent tense.

× Yes, there are a lot of high rise building in my home, especially some building that is like have 7 floors which is very tall and sometimes I used to go to it and have some fun inside the building.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of high-rise buildings near my home, especially some buildings that have about seven floors, which are very tall, and sometimes I go there to have fun inside.

'High rise' should be 'high-rise' as a compound adjective. 'Very tall' correctly modifies buildings but punctuation and clause structure needed fixing. Avoid redundant 'inside the building' after 'there.' Suggestion: use hyphenated adjectives and concise phrasing.

× sometimes I used to go to it and have some fun inside the building.

✓ sometimes I go there to have fun inside.

'Used to' implies a past habit that no longer occurs; the context suggests a current occasional activity, so simple present 'go' is appropriate. Use 'there' for place reference instead of 'to it.'

× Yes, I used to take photo at the buildings but nowadays I rarely taking photos of them because I find it really awkward when facing my camera to the buildings so everyone would feel not happy.

✓ Yes, I used to take photos of buildings, but nowadays I rarely take photos of them because I find it really awkward to point my camera at the buildings, so people might feel uncomfortable.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when talking generally. 'Taking photos' requires correct verb form: 'I rarely take photos.' 'Facing my camera to the buildings' is incorrect prepositional phrasing; use 'point my camera at the buildings.' 'Everyone would feel not happy' is unnatural; use 'people might feel uncomfortable.'

× Yes, I used to take photo at the buildings but nowadays I rarely taking photos of them because I find it really awkward when facing my camera to the buildings so everyone would feel not happy.

✓ Yes, I used to take photos of buildings, but nowadays I rarely take photos of them because I find it really awkward to point my camera at the buildings, so people might feel uncomfortable.

Prepositions: use 'take photos of' (not 'take photo at') and 'point at' (not 'facing ... to'). Also change 'when facing my camera to the buildings' to an infinitive 'to point my camera at the buildings' for clarity.

× Yes, in my CD near a building that I haven't visited for a long time against the high rise building in my country and it had the street that is very wide and very big.

✓ Yes, in my city there is a building I haven't visited for a long time, unlike the high-rise buildings in my country, and it is on a street that is very wide.

'CD' is unclear; likely 'city.' Use 'a building' with 'there is' structure. 'Had the street' is incorrect—use 'is on a street.' 'Very big' with 'street' is odd; 'wide' suffices. Ensure noun-number agreement and correct verb 'is' rather than 'had.'

× Yes, in my CD near a building that I haven't visited for a long time against the high rise building in my country and it had the street that is very wide and very big.

✓ Yes, in my city there is a building I haven't visited for a long time, unlike the high-rise buildings in my country, and it is on a street that is very wide.

Use 'high-rise' as hyphenated adjective. 'Very wide and very big' is redundant; choose the appropriate adjective. Maintain adjective order and clarity.

× I want to visit it because there are lots of arcade inside.

✓ I want to visit it because there are lots of arcades inside.

'Arcade' as a countable noun should be plural 'arcades' when preceded by 'lots of.' Ensure noun number matches the quantifier.

× Yes, I really want to live in high rise building because a big relaxation and reflection.

✓ Yes, I really want to live in a high-rise building because it would be relaxing and a good place for reflection.

'High rise building' should be 'a high-rise building' (article + hyphen). 'A big relaxation and reflection' is ungrammatical; use adjectives ('relaxing') and clearer nouns ('a good place for reflection'). Ensure singular/plural and article use.

× When you're looking at outside in the building, you will see you are staying at the very high building and sometimes I will feel very majestic when looking down.

✓ When you look outside from the building, you can see that you are very high up, and sometimes I feel majestic when looking down.

Use 'look outside' or 'look outside from' rather than 'looking at outside in the building.' 'You are staying at the very high building' is awkward; express as 'you are very high up.' Tense consistency: simple present for general statements ('you can see', 'I feel'). Avoid 'will' for habitual feelings. Also remove unnecessary articles.

× When you're looking at outside in the building, you will see you are staying at the very high building and sometimes I will feel very majestic when looking down.

✓ When you look outside from the building, you can see that you are very high up, and sometimes I feel majestic when looking down.

Place adverbs and phrases in natural positions: 'look outside from the building' and 'feel majestic when looking down.' Use consistent tense and concise phrasing.