建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be brief and direct, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and finish the sentence logically. Add one concise supporting detail with a linking word.

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Instead, the neighborhood is peaceful and mostly made up of low houses and gardens, so it feels quiet and spacious.

建议: Good content and coherence. Improve by using a linking word to connect reason and habit and by giving a specific example to make it more vivid.

示例: Yes, I do sometimes. When a building catches my eye—especially if it’s famous—I’ll take a photo and usually post it on my Instagram; for example, I photographed a historic cathedral last year.

建议: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm) and give one or two specific examples with linking words to explain your preference.

示例: Not really—I’m not very interested in architecture. Instead, I prefer visiting natural places; for example, I enjoy going to national parks and nature reserves because I like hiking and observing wildlife.

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence, reduce hesitation, and link reasons clearly. Provide a specific detail about what you prefer in your current home to support your view.

示例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building. I prefer spacious homes because high-rise apartments often feel cramped; for example, I live in a large house with a backyard garden, which gives me plenty of space to relax.

× No, unfortunately not in the area where I live is quite peaceful and quiet.

✓ No, unfortunately not; the area where I live is quite peaceful and quiet.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper connectors or punctuation between the negation and the statement about the area. Combine or separate the ideas correctly. Use a semicolon or period to separate the clauses: 'No, unfortunately not; the area where I live is quite peaceful and quiet.' This clarifies that there are no tall buildings and then states a separate fact about the area.

× But yeah, I would say that there are no tall buildings around my.

✓ But yeah, I would say that there are no tall buildings around me.

The phrase 'around my' is incomplete and incorrect; the correct pronoun is 'me' to indicate location relative to the speaker. Use 'around me' to express vicinity.

× Yes, sometimes when the buildings really catch my attention and if they are extremely famous.

✓ Yes, sometimes when buildings really catch my attention or if they are extremely famous, I take photos.

Original sentence fragments and incorrect conjunction choice ('and if') make it ungrammatical. Also the response needs a main verb. Rephrase to include main clause 'I take photos' and use 'or' to link the conditions appropriately.

× This is when I usually take pictures of buildings and I often post them on my social media as well.

✓ This is when I usually take pictures of buildings, and I often post them on my social media as well.

Comma needed before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses. Adding the comma improves readability and follows punctuation rules for compound sentences.

× How? Well, not really.

✓ How? Well, not really;

The reply 'How?' is unnatural for the examiner's question 'Is there a building that you would like to visit?'. The student likely meant 'How about that?' or should simply respond 'Not really.' Keep responses concise: 'Not really.' The correction adds punctuation but better is to answer 'Not really.'

× I'm not very much fond of buildings or knowing more about them.

✓ I'm not very fond of buildings or of learning more about them.

Use 'very fond' (not 'very much fond') and pair 'fond of' with a noun or gerund. 'Knowing more about them' is awkward; 'learning more about them' is a more natural collocation.

× Instead, I am someone who is really into knowing nature more and uh.

✓ Instead, I'm someone who is really into learning more about nature.

Avoid ending with filler 'and uh.' Replace 'knowing nature more' with 'learning more about nature' and contract 'I am' to 'I'm' for natural spoken style. This yields a complete, grammatical sentence.

× So yeah, I am pretty interested in visiting places that tells me more about nature.

✓ So yeah, I am pretty interested in visiting places that tell me more about nature.

Subject-verb agreement: 'places' is plural so use 'tell' not 'tells.' This falls under adjective/adverb? It is subject-verb agreement (ID 27) but listed here as incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs; nonetheless correct to plural verb.

× For example, parks and, uh, conservative areas.

✓ For example, parks and conservation areas.

'Conservative areas' is incorrect word choice; 'conservation areas' (protected natural areas) is the appropriate noun phrase.

× I will definitely not because I'm someone who loves living in a spacious area rather than in a congested area.

✓ I definitely would not, because I'm someone who prefers living in a spacious area rather than a congested one.

Use a conditional or modal 'would' to answer preference questions, and improve collocation: 'prefer' fits better than 'love' in this comparative context. Also replace redundant 'in a congested area' with 'a congested one.'

× Because tall buildings, umm, contains very, uh, you know, narrow space.

✓ Because tall buildings, umm, contain very, uh, you know, narrow spaces.

Subject 'tall buildings' is plural, so verb must be 'contain' not 'contains.' Also 'space' should be plural or 'very narrow space' rephrased; 'narrow spaces' is more natural.

× So yeah, that is the reason.

✓ So yeah, that's the reason.

Contraction 'that's' is more natural in speech; sentence is short but acceptable. This is a style suggestion rather than grammatical necessity.

× In fact, right now I'm living in a huge house with a spacious area and a garden in the backyard, so I'm enjoying that a lot right now.

✓ In fact, right now I live in a huge house with a spacious yard and a garden in the backyard, so I'm enjoying it a lot.

Use simple present 'I live' for a current state rather than continuous 'I'm living' which implies temporary. Avoid repeating 'right now' and replace 'area' with 'yard' and 'that' with 'it' for clarity.