建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use clearer vocabulary and linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (locations, names) with a linking word. Avoid filler words like “uh” and repetitions.

示例: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. For example, District 1 and District 3 have several high-rises, such as Landmark 81 and the Texaco Tower. These buildings look very modern and luxurious, so they stand out in the city skyline.

建议: Give a clear direct response, reduce repetition, and use correct verb forms and collocations. Use one linking word to add a condition or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Not really; I'm not keen on photographing buildings. However, I do enjoy taking photos when I travel with friends, especially of landmarks or interesting streets.

建议: Be specific and correct names/phrases; avoid vague expressions and grammar errors. Start with a direct answer, then give two concrete reasons (how you saw it, what you want to do) using linking words like “because” or “so”.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Bitesku building on Street One because I have seen many photos of it online and it looks impressive. If I get the chance, I would go inside to see the observation deck and walk around outside to admire the architecture.

建议: Answer directly and correct sentence structure and word choice. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one or two specific benefits of living in a tall building. Remove repetitions and incorrect phrases.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building if I could afford it, because it would give me a great view of Ho Chi Minh City. For example, I could enjoy the skyline from my balcony and be close to shops and public transport.

× Umm, there are tall buildings near my house, but not so many.

✓ Umm, there are tall buildings near my house, but not many.

'Not so many' is informal and slightly awkward here; 'not many' is the standard expression for indicating a small number. No plural/singular change needed beyond wording.

× Uh, several tall buildings are located in the District 1 and 3 almost.

✓ Uh, several tall buildings are located in Districts 1 and 3.

Use plural 'Districts' when referring to more than one district. Remove 'the' before district names and 'almost' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct prepositional phrase is 'located in Districts 1 and 3.'

× We usually call them be Texaco or Landmark 81.

✓ We usually call them Texaco or Landmark 81.

The verb 'be' is extraneous after 'call.' The correct structure is 'call them Texaco' (call + object + name). Removing 'be' fixes the sentence structure error.

× Those tall buildings are very luxurious and magnificent.

✓ Those tall buildings are very luxurious and magnificent.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'luxurious' and 'magnificent' are appropriate adjectives. No correction necessary.

× Uh, actually I'm not the person who who is keen on taking photograph, so I don't have much uh, interested in taking photo of any things like uh, buildings or even other relevant things.

✓ Uh, actually I'm not the sort of person who is keen on taking photographs, so I'm not very interested in taking photos of things like buildings or other similar subjects.

Multiple issues: double 'who' is a typo; 'person who is' is preferable; 'photograph' should be plural 'photographs' or 'taking photos'; 'don't have much interested' is incorrect—use 'I'm not very interested.' 'Any things' should be 'things.' Also streamline 'relevant things' to 'similar subjects.' These fixes correct pronoun redundancy, noun number, verb choice, and collocation.

× Uh, I can enjoy taking photograph but with my friends only when I travel to somewhere else.

✓ Uh, I can enjoy taking photographs, but only with my friends when I travel somewhere else.

Use plural 'photographs' and place 'only' before the phrase it modifies ('only with my friends'). 'Travel to somewhere else' is unidiomatic; say 'travel somewhere else' or 'travel to another place.' Commas improve clarity.

× Absolutely, if you have a chance, I would like to visit a Bitesku building which is located in the street one.

✓ Absolutely, if I have the chance, I would like to visit the Bitesku building on Street One.

Pronoun should be 'I' not 'you' because the speaker talks about their desire. Use 'the chance' not 'a chance' when referring to a specific opportunity, and 'the Bitesku building' if it's a known building. Use 'on Street One' for idiomatic location. These fix modal/conditional reference and article usage.

× I've seen the building on the Internet so many times but I hardly have a chance to go there.

✓ I've seen the building on the internet many times, but I hardly ever have a chance to go there.

'So many times' is colloquial; 'many times' is fine. 'Hardly have a chance' is awkward; 'hardly ever have a chance' or 'have hardly had a chance' are better. Maintain present perfect 'I've seen' consistent with current relevance.

× Therefore, if I have a arrangement time, I will go there to visit and try the GO sightseeing view inside and outside that building.

✓ Therefore, if I have time to arrange a visit, I will go there to see the sights inside and outside the building.

'A arrangement time' is incorrect; use 'time to arrange a visit' or 'an arranged time.' 'Try the GO sightseeing view' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'see the sights.' Simplify wording for clarity and correct article use.

× Absolutely yes, If I am rich enough, I would like to buy a flat, a tall in the tall building in the urban area, so that I can have a chance to to build, to have the overview of the city and science, see all the beautiful landscape in Ho Chi Minh City.

✓ Absolutely. If I were rich enough, I would like to buy a flat in a tall building in the city center so that I could have a view over the city and see the beautiful landscapes of Ho Chi Minh City.

Use the subjunctive 'If I were rich' for unreal present. Remove repetitive and unclear phrases: 'a flat, a tall in the tall building' is incorrect—use 'a flat in a tall building.' 'Urban area' is better as 'city center.' 'I can have a chance to to build' is ungrammatical; express purpose: 'so that I could have a view over the city.' 'Science' is incorrect here and likely a false friend; replace with 'see.' Fix double 'to to.' These corrections fix modal verb mood, article use, word choice, and sentence clarity.

× We usually call them be Texaco or Landmark 81.

✓ We usually call them Texaco or Landmark 81.

(Additional note) The previous correction also resolves the mistaken insertion of 'be' which incorrectly affects verb form. Removing 'be' yields correct third-person structure 'call them Texaco.'