建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one or two specific details. Use linking words like 'instead' or 'mostly' to make it coherent.

示例: Not really. I live a little outside town, so there are mostly paddy fields and low-rise houses instead of tall buildings. There are a few small temples and shops, but no high-rises nearby.

建议: Answer directly and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct vocabulary and avoid repetition. Mention a brief reason and give one or two clear examples.

示例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. I prefer nature photography because I enjoy capturing waterfalls and coastal scenes; for example, I like taking pictures of rivers at sunrise and forest trails.

建议: Good enthusiasm and clear idea. Improve by removing casual slang, correcting grammar, and adding a concise reason with linking words. One sentence for topic and one for specific detail is enough.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. From the observation deck I could enjoy panoramic views of the city and learn about its architecture.

建议: Avoid colloquialisms and unclear remarks. Give a clear opinion first, then one or two concrete reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Remove filler phrases and personal asides that do not add content.

示例: No, I would prefer not to live in a tall building because I value peace and nature. I would rather live in a rural house surrounded by trees and fields so I can enjoy fresh air and quiet.

× Uh, not really because I'm living little bit away from the town.

✓ Uh, not really because I live a little bit away from the town.

Use simple present 'I live' for general facts/habits rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Also add the article 'a' before 'little' and include 'a' before 'town' if referring to a town in general: 'a little bit away from the town' or better 'a little bit away from town.'

× So in the place where I live, uh, there's no a lot of uh, tall buildings.

✓ So in the place where I live, there aren't a lot of tall buildings.

'There is/are' must match plural nouns: use 'there aren't' for plural 'tall buildings'. Also 'no a lot of' is ungrammatical; use 'not a lot of' or 'there aren't many'.

× It's always with Paddy fields, temples and uh, there are some buildings with small, uh, stairs.

✓ It's always surrounded by paddy fields and temples, and there are some buildings with small staircases.

Use 'surrounded by' to indicate what is around a place rather than 'with'. 'Paddy' should be lowercase and 'staircases' is the correct noun rather than 'stairs' when describing small built features of buildings in this context.

× There's no much of A taller building there.

✓ There aren't many tall buildings there.

'No much of a' is incorrect. Use 'many' with countable plural nouns: 'there aren't many tall buildings.' Also fix capitalization of 'A'.

× I don't like to take photos of buildings.

✓ I don't like taking photos of buildings.

After 'like' both forms are possible, but 'don't like' is commonly followed by the gerund 'taking' to express general preference. 'Don't like to take' is not ungrammatical but sounds less natural here.

× I would rather take photos of a waterfall, sea and also some rivers, lakes at wet lakes, jungles and those kind of uh, pictures that are involved with the nature out loud.

✓ I would rather take photos of waterfalls, the sea, rivers, lakes, jungles, and other kinds of nature scenes.

Use plural nouns for general categories (waterfalls, rivers). Use 'the sea' for that specific natural feature. 'Those kind of' should be 'other kinds of' or 'those kinds of'. Remove 'out loud' which is irrelevant. Simplify and parallel the list for clarity.

× I would love to take photos of them rather taking photos of building.

✓ I would love to take photos of them rather than take photos of buildings.

Use 'rather than' + base verb 'take' for comparison. Use plural 'buildings'. 'Rather taking' is incorrect.

× If I ever gonna get a chance to visit Burj Khalifa, that would be like so awesome.

✓ If I ever get a chance to visit the Burj Khalifa, that would be so awesome.

Use 'get' not colloquial 'gonna' in conditional clauses. Use 'the Burj Khalifa' with definite article. 'Like' in 'would be like so awesome' is filler and unnecessary.

× And I would really love to visit that place because it's the tallest building in the world.

✓ And I would really love to visit that place because it's the tallest building in the world.

Sentence is correct; no third person singular error. (No correction needed.)

× I would really want to go on the top and see the view, how it looks like from the top of the building.

✓ I would really want to go to the top and see the view, to see what it looks like from the top of the building.

Use 'go to the top' not 'go on the top'. Use 'see what it looks like' instead of 'see the view, how it looks like' for grammatical clarity; avoid 'how ... like' after 'see'.

× Not really. I mean, my girlfriend would like to live that live in a tall building, but I'm not a silly guy.

✓ Not really. I mean, my girlfriend would like to live in a tall building, but I'm not interested.

'Live that live in' is ungrammatical; correct to 'live in a tall building'. 'I'm not a silly guy' is colloquial and doesn't contrast clearly with girlfriend's preference; 'I'm not interested' or 'I wouldn't want that' is clearer and more neutral.

× I, I wanted to spend my time at a, at a, you know, at a house where it's located in a rural area with the nature and I want to smell those, uh, you know, greenery areas, you know, I, I really love living in.

✓ I want to spend my time in a house located in a rural area surrounded by nature, and I want to enjoy the smell of the greenery. I really love living like that.

Maintain consistent present tense 'want' for current preference instead of past 'wanted'. Use 'in a house located' not 'at a house where it's located'. 'Smell those... greenery areas' is awkward; use 'enjoy the smell of the greenery'. Finish the sentence with 'like that' for clarity.