建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear direct topic sentence, correct place names, avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in central Bangkok. For example, there are many high-rise condominiums and a few office towers within a five-minute walk, which makes the area feel busy and modern.

建议: Start with a direct answer, give a brief reason using linking words, and include a specific example or frequency phrase. Correct vocabulary and reduce filler words.

示例: I sometimes take photos of buildings, but not often because I prefer photographing natural scenery. For instance, I might take a picture of an interesting façade when I travel, but most of my photos are landscapes.

建议: Answer directly naming the building, correct the name and location, explain why using specific reasons and linking words, and avoid unclear phrasing. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit CopenHill in Copenhagen because it was designed by the architect Bjarke Ingels and combines a waste-to-energy plant with a ski slope. I admire its innovative design and sustainable features, so it would be inspiring for me as an architect.

建议: Give a short direct opinion, give 1–2 clear reasons with linking words, and correct phrases (low-rise). Avoid repetition and keep sentences concise.

示例: No, I wouldn't prefer living in a tall building because I like the quieter atmosphere of low-rise condos. For example, my current low-rise condominium feels more peaceful and has better access to outdoor space.

× Yes, definitely, because I am living in the Bangkok Central district or as known as Agamemnon.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I live in the Bangkok Central district, also known as Agamemnon.

Use simple present 'I live' for habitual or permanent situations instead of present continuous 'I am living'. Also 'as known as' is incorrect; use 'also known as'. Suggestion: Use simple present for permanent residence and the phrase 'also known as'.

× So there's a lot of highlights condominium around my area and also little and some office building are the highlights building too.

✓ So there are a lot of highlight condominiums around my area, and some small office buildings are highlights too.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'a lot of' requires plural noun 'condominiums', and 'there are' for plural. 'Office building' should be plural 'office buildings'. Adjective order and word choice adjusted: 'little and some' is incorrect; use 'small' and place adjectives before nouns. Suggestion: Make nouns plural when referring to multiple items and use 'there are' for plural existences.

× So there's.

✓ (Sentence is incomplete; remove or complete it as) 'So that's all.' or delete the fragment.

Fragment 'So there's.' lacks a noun or clause after 'there's' and is incomplete. Sentences must have a subject and verb and, if using 'there is/are', a following noun phrase. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with the intended noun phrase or remove the fragment.

× Yes, but not that much 'cause I prefer taking the photos of natural environment rather than the urban district area.

✓ Yes, but not that much, because I prefer taking photos of natural environments rather than of urban areas.

Word choice and plurality: 'natural environment' should be plural or uncountable 'natural environments' or 'nature'. 'The urban district area' is redundant; use 'urban areas'. Also place 'not that much' with commas and use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause'. Suggestion: Use 'nature' or 'natural environments' and 'urban areas' for clarity.

× So I could say that sometime I take a Porto photos of building, but like not that much in comparison to nature will.

✓ So I could say that sometimes I take photos of buildings, but not as much compared to nature.

Use adverb 'sometimes' not 'sometime'. 'Porto' is unclear and removed. 'photos of building' needs plural 'buildings'. 'in comparison to nature will' is ungrammatical; use 'compared to nature' or 'compared with nature'. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' and plural nouns when appropriate; avoid unclear words.

× There's one building that I would like to visit like Guillemots, but it's not in Thailand.

✓ There's one building that I would like to visit, called CopenHill, but it's not in Thailand.

Clarity and word choice: 'like Guillemots' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'called' to name a building. Keep 'there's' acceptable for one building. Suggestion: Use 'called' or 'named' to introduce proper names.

× This building is the Copenhagen in Copenhagen and it's designed by big architect because I am also the architect.

✓ This building, CopenHill in Copenhagen, was designed by a famous architect, and I am training to be an architect.

Article and word choice: 'the Copenhagen in Copenhagen' is wrong; use the building name plus city. Use past tense 'was designed' for completed action. 'big architect' should be 'a famous architect'. 'I am also the architect' is unclear; likely mean 'I am training to be an architect' or 'I am also an architect'. Suggestion: Use precise nouns and correct tense for design (past).

× So I really like the famous building design and Copenhill is kind.

✓ So I really like famous building designs, and CopenHill is one I admire.

Original sentence is fragmented and 'is kind' is inappropriate. Use plural 'designs' for general preference and clarify admiration of CopenHill. Suggestion: Express preferences with clear objects and avoid vague adjectives like 'kind'.

× I don't think so 'cause I prefer living in the low lies hotel or condo as well as like my current condominiums are so a low rise condo so I rather prefer the low rise lifestyle and highlights.

✓ I don't think so, because I prefer living in low-rise hotels or condominiums. My current condominium is low-rise, so I prefer the low-rise lifestyle.

Many errors: 'low lies' should be 'low-rise'. Use plural 'hotels or condominiums' or singular consistently. Remove redundant phrases 'as well as like' and 'so a'. Use 'prefer' without modal here. Maintain present simple for preferences. Suggestion: Use correct compound adjective 'low-rise', consistent noun number, and concise phrasing to express preference.