建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear. Begin with a straightforward response to the question, avoid contradicting phrases ("No, there are" is confusing), use correct vocabulary ("floors" not "the first floors"), and keep it concise (1–2 sentences). Add one brief specific detail if needed, using a linking word.

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Most houses here are two-storey buildings, and the tallest structures are only about three floors.

建议: Answer naturally with a full sentence, avoid numeric fragments like "7 times" unless explaining frequency clearly. Use linking words (e.g. "for example", "when") correctly and give a specific, coherent reason or habit. Limit to 2–3 sentences and correct collocations ("around my local" → "around my neighborhood").

示例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I go out. For example, when I walk around West Lake or my local park I like to photograph interesting buildings and then save the pictures on my computer.

建议: Be concise and avoid fillers ("you know", "umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words ("because", "for example"). Correct grammar and collocations ("central shopping" → "a shopping centre/district", "find some my jewelry" → "shop for jewelry").

示例: Yes, I’d like to visit Lots and More, a popular shopping centre in my district. I want to go because it has many shops and I enjoy browsing for jewelry and accessories there.

建议: Give a direct, relevant answer. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases ("I don't cry because you love"). Start with a clear statement ("No, I don’t") and then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words ("because", "so"). Use correct expressions ("I was born and raised"; "two-storey house"), and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I don’t want to live in a tall building. I was born and raised in a two-storey house and I’m used to the neighbourhood and its conveniences, so I prefer to stay in a similar home.

× No, there are.

✓ No, there aren't any.

The examiner asked if there are tall buildings near the student's home. The student answered 'No, there are.' which is incomplete and incorrect for negation. Use the negative form 'there aren't' (there are not) and add 'any' for countable plural nouns. Suggestion: say 'No, there aren't any.' or 'No, there are no tall buildings.'

× There are several accommodations with the second or the first floors around my house.

✓ There are several buildings with first- or second-floor apartments around my house.

The phrase 'with the second or the first floors' is awkward and uses incorrect word order. Use 'first- or second-floor apartments' to describe the floors and 'around my house' is fine. Also 'accommodations' is unnatural; 'buildings' or 'apartments' is better. Suggestion: reorder noun compounds as 'first- or second-floor apartments.'

× Yes, 7 times.

✓ Yes, about seven times.

Answering 'Do you take photos of buildings?' with a bare numeral '7 times' is abrupt. Use a quantifier and words: 'about seven times' or 'yes, I have taken photos about seven times.' Also spell out numbers in speech. Suggestion: 'Yes, about seven times.'

× For example when I walk around my local and for example when I go walk around in the West lake or around in my park.

✓ For example, when I walk around my neighborhood, or when I walk around West Lake or the park.

The original sentence repeats 'for example' and uses awkward phrases 'my local' and 'go walk around in the West lake.' Correct structure needs clear subjects and prepositions: 'walk around my neighborhood' and 'walk around West Lake or the park.' Remove repetition. Suggestion: speak in shorter clauses: 'For example, when I walk around my neighborhood, or when I walk around West Lake or the park.'

× I always take some photos with some wonderful buildings and I always save it in my own room.

✓ I always take photos of interesting buildings and save them in my room.

Use preposition 'of' with 'take photos of' not 'with.' 'Some wonderful buildings' can be simplified to 'interesting buildings.' 'Photos' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it.' 'In my own room' is wordy; 'in my room' is natural. Suggestion: 'I always take photos of interesting buildings and save them in my room.'

× Yet, you know, Lots and More is located in their district.

✓ Well, you know, Lots and More is located in that district.

Using 'their' is incorrect because the district is being referred to by the speaker; 'that' is the proper demonstrative. Also 'Yet' is unnatural here; 'Well' fits spoken English. Suggestion: use 'that district.'

× It's one of the most, umm, favorite, uh, buildings.

✓ It's one of my favorite buildings.

'Most favorite' is incorrect; 'favorite' already implies the superlative. Also include possessive 'my' to indicate whose favorite. Remove hesitations. Suggestion: 'It's one of my favorite buildings.'

× I always want to visit when I have some spare time because at that time it's like a central shopping and I always go around and visit to find some my jewelry.

✓ I always want to visit when I have some spare time because it's a central shopping area, and I go there to buy some jewelry.

The original has multiple issues: 'at that time it's like a central shopping' is ungrammatical—use 'it's a central shopping area.' 'I always go around and visit to find some my jewelry' is incorrect: use 'I go there to buy some jewelry' or 'to look for jewelry.' Remove redundant 'always.' Suggestion: simplify and use clear verbs: 'go there to buy some jewelry.'

× No, I don't cry because you love.

✓ No, I don't want to.

The student's reply makes no sense: 'I don't cry because you love' is not an answer to 'Do you want to live in a tall building?' probably due to confusion. The intended negative answer is likely 'No, I don't want to.' Use the verb 'want' to express desire. Suggestion: reply directly: 'No, I don't want to.'

× I was born and live in an accommodation, just have the first floor and the second floor so I got familiar with every functions and everything around my house.

✓ I was born and raised in a two-story house, so I am familiar with its layout and everything around my home.

'An accommodation' is unnatural; use 'a two-story house' or 'a house with two floors.' 'Just have the first floor and the second floor' is awkward. 'Got familiar' is incorrect; use 'am familiar.' 'Every functions' should be 'its layout' or 'the functions' and possessive 'its' for the house. Suggestion: 'I was born and raised in a two-story house, so I am familiar with its layout and the area around my home.'

× So even in the near future I don't want to live there.

✓ So even in the near future, I don't want to live in a tall building.

The pronoun 'there' is vague; clarify 'in a tall building' to match the question. Tense 'don't want' is fine for present/future preference; add comma for clarity. Suggestion: 'So even in the near future, I don't want to live in a tall building.'