建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present tense and plural agreement), and add one specific supporting detail. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes. I live in Sukti City, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, several residential towers nearby include shops, gyms and cafés, which makes the area very convenient.

建议: Clarify your meaning and use simple, correct sentences. Answer directly, then give one clear reason and example. Avoid confusing phrasing and contradictory statements in the same answer.

示例: Not usually. I prefer photographing nature rather than buildings because I find landscapes more relaxing. For instance, I often take photos of parks and rivers when I go for a walk.

建议: Be accurate and concise. State the building clearly, correct factual errors (Burj Khalifa is in Dubai, United Arab Emirates), and give one reason or detail about why you want to visit. Reduce hesitations and filler words.

示例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai, United Arab Emirates, because it is the tallest building in the world and offers amazing views from the observation deck.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a brief example. Fix grammar (singular/plural, article use) and remove filler sounds. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

示例: No, I would not like to live in a tall building. I prefer a two-storey house with a front garden because I value outdoor space and privacy.

× I lived in Sukti city so there are a lot of tall buildings near my room and the area is much more developed and has many buildings that has lot of facilities inside of it.

✓ I live in Sukti city, so there are a lot of tall buildings near my room. The area is much more developed and has many buildings that have a lot of facilities inside them.

The student used 'lived' (past) while describing a current situation; use present simple 'live'. Also 'has many buildings that has' shows subject-verb agreement and plural problems: 'buildings' requires 'have'. 'A lot' needs the article 'a'. Replace 'inside of it' with 'inside them' to match plural noun. Suggestions: use present tense for current facts, ensure verb agrees with plural nouns, and match pronouns to number. Grammar Problem Type ID:5

× If the feelings are designed in our words that it attracts me to my attractful to my eyes, then I definitely delete the photos of it.

✓ If something about a building appeals to me, I will definitely keep the photos; otherwise I delete them. I prefer taking pictures of the environment or natural landscapes.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Attractful' is not a word; use 'appeals to me'. Conditional meaning requires clear structure: use 'If... then...' with correct tense. 'Delete the photos of it' is awkward—use 'delete them' for photos. Also match tense and clarity: 'I will definitely keep' or 'I delete' depending on habit. Suggestions: simplify conditionals, use common verbs such as 'appeal', and use correct pronouns for photos. Grammar Problem Type ID:8 Note: This correction also addresses sentence structure issues (ID 26).

× If but rather I'd like to take the picture of the environment or natural landscapes.

✓ Rather, I would like to take pictures of the environment or natural landscapes.

'If but rather' is an incorrect combination; use 'Rather' to contrast. 'Take the picture of' is too specific; general preference uses plural 'pictures' and 'of' is acceptable. Suggestions: remove conflicting conjunctions and use plural when speaking generally. Grammar Problem Type ID:11

× I heard, I heard a lot about the Burj Khalifa, which is located in the uh, Dubai, Qatar and the, it is the highest building in the world.

✓ I have heard a lot about the Burj Khalifa, which is located in Dubai in the United Arab Emirates; it is the tallest building in the world.

Use present perfect 'have heard' for life experiences. Burj Khalifa is in Dubai, which is in the United Arab Emirates, not Qatar—this is factual correction. Use 'tallest' rather than 'highest' when comparing buildings. Remove extra articles and filler words. Suggestions: use present perfect for experiences, check factual prepositions and country names, and use correct comparative forms ('tallest'). Grammar Problem Type ID:11

× So I definitely like to visit it on if I have time and money to go there.

✓ So I would definitely like to visit it if I have the time and money to go there.

Use conditional 'would like' to express desire, not simple 'like'. Remove extra 'on'. 'If I have the time and money' is the correct conditional phrase. Suggestions: use 'would like' for hypothetical desires and place conditional clause correctly. Grammar Problem Type ID:4

× Oil, uh, specifically, I do not like to live in a tall buildings uh, but I would like to have a 2 storeys house has a has a, a garden in front of it, umm uh, spec uh, particularly I do not like the tall buildings per my permanent residency.

✓ Specifically, I do not like to live in tall buildings, but I would like to have a two-storey house with a garden in front of it. In particular, I do not want to live in tall buildings permanently.

Remove filler 'Oil'. Use 'tall buildings' (plural) without 'a'. 'A 2 storeys house' is wrong: use 'a two-storey house' (singular) or 'a two-storey house with a garden'. Use 'with' instead of repeated 'has a'. 'Permanent residency' used incorrectly—use 'permanently' to describe preference. Suggestions: avoid fillers, use correct articles and singular/plural forms, spell out numbers in speech, and use 'with' for features of a house. Grammar Problem Type ID:22