建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngắn gọn và rõ ràng: tránh lặp từ, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về kích thước hoặc kiểu nhà. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý (for example, because, so). Hạn chế câu quá dài và sai ngữ pháp (ví dụ: subject-verb agreement).

示例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small town in Nian province. Most houses here are only one or two storeys high, and there are about ten of them clustered around my street.

建议: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và độ chính xác từ vựng: sửa thì động từ (past tense cho hành động trong quá khứ), tránh từ sai chính tả (skyscrapers), và bỏ những cụm vô nghĩa (‘now online’). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về loại công trình chụp để câu sinh động hơn. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

示例: Yes, I do. Last week I visited Tokyo, and I took many photos of modern skyscrapers and traditional temples. I especially enjoyed capturing the contrast between glass towers and old wooden buildings, then I shared my favourite shots on my social media.

建议: Giảm tiếng 'umm/uh' và nói rõ hơn: nêu tên cụ thể một toà nhà hoặc loại công trình ở Thổ Nhĩ Kỳ, dùng miêu tả cụ thể (ví dụ: kiểu kiến trúc, màu sắc). Tránh câu không hoàn chỉnh và giải thích lý do rõ ràng hơn về việc muốn tới thăm. Sử dụng thì đúng và từ vựng chính xác.

示例: Yes. I would love to visit the Hagia Sophia in Turkey because of its unique blend of Byzantine and Ottoman architecture. Its massive dome and intricate mosaics fascinate me, and I would like to photograph the interior details to share online.

建议: Sửa ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên: chú ý subject-verb agreement (it often feels), rút gọn ý lặp và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: vườn, không gian riêng). Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (however, because). Giữ 3-4 câu rõ ràng.

示例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because it often feels cold and impersonal. I prefer a small house with a garden where my family can relax together, as it provides more privacy and a homely atmosphere.

× To be honest, not really because I reside in a small town in Nian province so there are not any high rise buildings nearby.

✓ To be honest, not really, because I reside in a small town in Nian Province, so there are no high-rise buildings nearby.

Use 'no' + plural noun instead of 'not any' after 'there are' for natural negation; 'high-rise' is a compound adjective and needs a hyphen; 'Province' is a proper noun here and should be capitalized; add commas for clarity.

× There are only about 10 or so small houses around my home.

✓ There are only about ten or so small houses around my home.

Use words or digits consistently; in formal speech or writing, spell out small numbers like 'ten'. The plural 'houses' is correct; this correction is stylistic not grammatical but aligns with standard usage.

× You know, last week I went to the Tokyo, the capital city of Japan, and I take many photos of buildings because it has many towering skycroppers and now online, which makes me feel enjoyable and happy.

✓ You know, last week I went to Tokyo, the capital city of Japan, and I took many photos of buildings because it has many towering skyscrapers, and I uploaded them online, which made me feel very happy.

Do not use 'the' before most city names like Tokyo; maintain past tense ('went' -> 'took', 'made') to match 'last week'; 'skycroppers' is misspelled — correct is 'skyscrapers'; 'now online' is unclear, change to 'uploaded them online'; 'enjoyable' is incorrect here — use 'happy' or 'felt happy'.

× Yes, uh, of course. A building in Turkey that I would like to visit, you know, umm, it has many towering skycroppers with fascinating designs.

✓ Yes, of course. There is a building in Turkey that I would like to visit; it has many towering skyscrapers with fascinating designs.

Sentence fragment fixed by adding 'There is' for completeness; 'skycroppers' corrected to 'skyscrapers'; ensure coherence and present simple for general truth about the building.

× I also enjoy selling the pictures online because, uh, it is in.

✓ I also enjoy selling the pictures online because they are popular there.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear ('it is in' has no clear subject or meaning). Replace with a complete clause explaining why the speaker sells pictures online. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'pictures'.

× To be honest, I don't really want to live in a tall building because it often feel cold and impersonal.

✓ To be honest, I don't really want to live in a tall building because it often feels cold and impersonal.

With singular subject 'it' the verb requires third person singular form 'feels' not 'feel'.

× I prefer living in a small house.

✓ I prefer living in a small house.

This sentence is acceptable; 'prefer' can be followed by gerund 'living'. No grammatical change needed. Keeping it for completeness.

× Although it is small, it has enough space for everyone in my family and I feel very comfortable to live with.

✓ Although it is small, it has enough space for everyone in my family, and I feel very comfortable living there with them.

The phrase 'comfortable to live with' is incorrect for expressing personal comfort; use 'comfortable living there' and 'with them' to indicate family members. Also add comma before coordinating conjunction for clarity.