建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good opinion. To improve, make the structure more concise and correct small grammar inaccuracies (e.g., say “high-rise buildings” and avoid repeating words like “actually”). Add a brief specific example or contrast to enrich content and use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, there are many high-rise buildings near my home. However, they often bother me because I prefer older architecture with more character, such as historic brick houses or ornate facades. For example, I would rather live in a neighborhood with Victorian-style buildings because they feel more charming and unique.

建议: Your answer communicates enthusiasm and reason but contains grammar errors and repetition. Improve by using correct noun forms (“photos of buildings”), avoiding redundant phrases, and organizing with one linking sentence explaining purpose and one concrete example of when/what you photograph.

示例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I work as a photographer. I like capturing architectural details and the light at different times of day; for example, I recently photographed an old cathedral at sunset to show how the warm light highlights its stone carvings.

建议: Good personal motivation and a clear target. Improve by correcting articles and phrasing (“the Eiffel Tower”, “connected to” → “connected with” or “related to”), and add one concise reason or image of what you expect to see. Use linking words to connect fandom and cultural interest to the desire to visit.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower. Because I'm a fan of French culture and shows like Miraculous Ladybug, I want to see Paris from above and experience the cityscape and landmarks such as the Seine and Notre-Dame in person.

建议: Your answer is honest and direct but has several phrasing and grammar issues (“a living an adult building” unclear). Improve by stating the main idea clearly, giving a concise reason, and adding a brief specific detail about the kind of house you prefer. Use a linking word to connect reason and preference.

示例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights. Instead, I would prefer a single-family house on the ground with a garden, where I feel safer and can relax outdoors.

× Yes, there are a lot of high rise buildings near my home and actually they often bother me because I prefer architecture with character, so I'd like to live somewhere with that kind of story.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of high-rise buildings near my home, and actually they often bother me because I prefer architecture with character, so I'd like to live somewhere with that kind of story.

The main issue was formatting 'high rise' which should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This is a punctuation/word-formation issue related to plural noun 'buildings' which is correct. Suggestion: use hyphen for compound adjectives (high-rise buildings) and add a comma before 'and' to improve sentence flow.

× Yes, I do take photos of building and actually a lot because I'm a photographer and it's very important for me to see the moment that I've been in.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of buildings, and actually a lot because I'm a photographer and it's very important for me to capture the moments I've experienced.

'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'photos of'. Also 'see the moment that I've been in' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'capture the moments I've experienced' to convey photographing memories. Suggestion: ensure noun following 'photos of' is plural when referring to multiple items and use 'capture' for photographing moments.

× And that's very important for me to just remember this moment and remember how magnificent was this building.

✓ And that's very important for me to remember this moment and to remember how magnificent this building was.

The clause 'how magnificent was this building' uses question word order; in statements the verb should follow the subject: 'this building was'. Also keep tense consistent by placing 'was' after the subject. Suggestion: use declarative word order in subordinate clauses and maintain consistent tense.

× Yes, there is a building that I would like to visit and I guess it would be an Eiffel Tower.

✓ Yes, there is a building that I would like to visit and I guess it would be the Eiffel Tower.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before specific landmark names like 'Eiffel Tower' when referring to the famous monument. 'An' is incorrect because the Eiffel Tower is a unique, definite item. Suggestion: use 'the' for well-known singular landmarks.

× I'm such a fan of Miraculous Ladybug and Cat Noir and I love everything that connected to French culture, so I'd like to see the Paris from above.

✓ I'm such a fan of Miraculous Ladybug and Cat Noir and I love everything connected to French culture, so I'd like to see Paris from above.

'that connected to' is incorrect; use 'connected to' or 'related to' without 'that'. Also 'the Paris' is incorrect; city names generally do not take 'the' unless part of the name. Suggestion: remove unnecessary relative pronoun and omit 'the' before city names.

× Actually, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I find a living an adult building really terrifying and it is because I'm scared of heights and I'd like to live in a more grounded house.

✓ Actually, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I find living in a high-rise really terrifying, and it is because I'm scared of heights, so I'd like to live in a more grounded house.

Multiple issues: 'wouldn't like' is acceptable but 'a living an adult building' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'living in a high-rise' (noun phrase) to express residence in a tall building. Add commas for clarity and use 'so' to connect cause and preference. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases for types of buildings and clearer connectors.

× So I'd prefer to live in a private house where I feel safer and more relaxed.

✓ So I'd prefer to live in a private house where I would feel safer and more relaxed.

Original sentence is grammatical, but changing to 'would feel' better matches the conditional preference 'I'd prefer' and keeps modal consistency. Suggestion: when expressing hypothetical preferences, align verb modality ('I'd prefer' with 'I would feel').