建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, correct plural forms (skyscrapers), use 'people' instead of unclear terms, and explain briefly why tall buildings exist nearby.

示例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, several office skyscrapers house professionals working in studios and offices, and they were built to meet the demand for business space.

建议: Make sentences grammatically correct and more fluent. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and be specific about frequency and reasons. Correct verb forms and articles ('it depends', 'the building's design is special'). Mention one clear example and why you photograph it.

示例: It depends on the building's design; if it’s unusual or attractive, I usually take photos. For instance, I often photograph historical buildings like the Dufu Cottage because I find their architecture and stories interesting, and I like to share these pictures with my friends.

建议: Be concise and correct word forms. Start with a direct answer and give specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Correct names and terms (Dufu Cottage), and avoid repetition (poem poetry). Mention what you hope to learn or see on the visit.

示例: Yes. I would like to visit the Dufu Cottage again because I am interested in its history and the Tang dynasty poems associated with Dufu. I want to learn more about his life and see the exhibits that explain his work.

建议: Use clearer, natural phrasing and correct word forms. Begin with a short direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Replace awkward phrases ('overlook the light views') with natural expressions ('enjoy the city views at night') and use adjectives properly ('relaxing').

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy the city views, especially at night. I find it relaxing to look out over the lights, and living high up would give me that perspective.

× Sure, I'm living in the city and there are too many skyscraper around my home.

✓ Sure, I live in the city and there are too many skyscrapers around my home.

The sentence has two issues covered by the article/plural rules. 'I'm living' is unnatural here; use simple present 'I live' for a permanent situation (present tense issue but within allowed types use article errors as primary). 'skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers' to match 'too many' which requires a plural noun. Also add 'around my home' is fine. Suggestion: use simple present for habits or states and ensure noun number matches quantifier 'too many'.

× And I think in the skyscraper there are several white collar Walker who Li who work in the studio and earn good money.

✓ And I think in the skyscrapers there are several white-collar workers who work in studios and earn good money.

Subject-verb and noun form errors: 'skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers' to match 'several'; 'white collar Walker who Li who' is garbled—use 'white-collar workers'; 'work in the studio' suggests singular studio but general statement should be plural 'studios'. Ensure nouns match plural quantifiers and hyphenate compound adjective 'white-collar'.

× Actually, it's depends if this building design special, I think I will take photo with it.

✓ Actually, it depends; if a building's design is special, I think I will take a photo of it.

Tense and structure: 'it's depends' is incorrect — use 'it depends'. Also need an article 'a' before 'building' and 'a photo'. Use possessive 'building's design' or 'the building is specially designed'. Use 'take a photo of it' rather than 'with it'. Suggest breaking into two clauses for clarity.

× And also, uh, I always take photo with the historical building, for example, the Dufu cottage that is really good for me to take photo and share with my friends about the story.

✓ Also, I always take photos of historical buildings; for example, the Dufu Cottage is a great place for me to take photos and share their stories with my friends.

Preposition and article errors: use 'take photos of' not 'with'. 'Historical building' should be plural if general, so 'historical buildings' or specify 'the historical building'. 'Share with my friends about the story' is incorrect: say 'share their stories with my friends'. Also use 'Dufu Cottage' as a proper noun and 'great' instead of 'really good for me' for natural phrasing.

× As I mentioned before the cottage of Doof, because I think I really interested in the history and the poem poetry about Tang dynasty and I want to know more about it, so I want to visit it one more time.

✓ As I mentioned before, the Dufu Cottage, I am really interested in the history and poetry of the Tang dynasty, and I want to know more about it, so I want to visit it again.

Tense and form: 'I really interested' needs auxiliary 'am' -> 'I am really interested' (present tense). 'the poem poetry' is redundant; use 'poetry'. 'Tang dynasty' should be 'the Tang dynasty'. 'one more time' is better as 'again'. Include commas for clarity.

× Actually, yes, because I think overlook the light views above the city is a really interesting thing and a relaxable things.

✓ Actually, yes, because I think overlooking the city lights is really interesting and relaxing.

Verb form and word choice: 'overlook the light views' should be 'overlooking the city lights' using the gerund after 'think'. 'a really interesting thing' is wordy; use 'really interesting'. 'a relaxable things' is ungrammatical—use adjective 'relaxing'. Ensure singular/plural consistency and choose natural collocations.

× So I really want to do that in the future. I want to live in the tall building to do that.

✓ So I really want to do that in the future; I want to live in a tall building to experience that.

Repetition and structure: 'the tall building' makes it sound specific; use 'a tall building' for a general desire. 'to do that' is vague—replace with 'to experience that' for clarity. Combine sentences for smoother flow.