建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và tự nhiên nhưng hơi thiếu chi tiết hỗ trợ. Để đạt điểm cao hơn, bạn nên mở rộng bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: số lượng ước chừng, khoảng cách, loại toà nhà) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several apartment towers and office blocks within a ten-minute walk, which makes the neighbourhood feel quite urban.

建议: Ý chính có nhưng câu dài và lặp từ ‘a lot’. Nên dùng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh lặp từ bằng cách dùng từ đồng nghĩa.

示例: Yes, I often photograph buildings. I especially take pictures from my balcony because it overlooks several iconic skyscrapers, so I can capture different angles at sunrise and sunset.

建议: Câu trả lời bị ngắt quãng, có tiếng 'uh' và chưa kết thúc ý. Cần một cấu trúc rõ: câu chủ đề nêu toà nhà, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể (như quan cảnh, tiện ích, trải nghiệm) và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng. Hãy hoàn thiện câu mô tả.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is the tallest building in Vietnam. I want to go up to its observation deck to enjoy panoramic views of the city and visit the restaurants at the top.

建议: Câu có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp ý và kết thúc dang dở. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: view, tiện ích, yên tĩnh) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc; đồng thời sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I enjoy' và tránh lặp 'because'.

示例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views are fantastic. For instance, from a high-floor apartment I could see the whole city and enjoy peaceful evenings away from street noise.

× It is known as the tallest building of Vietnam and it has a very.

✓ It is known as the tallest building in Vietnam, and it has a very impressive design.

The original sentence ends abruptly and uses 'of Vietnam' which is less natural than 'in Vietnam' for location. Also 'a very' is incomplete; a noun is required after 'a very'. Use 'impressive design' to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure nouns follow quantifiers and prepositions indicate location correctly.

× if I have a chance to visit, uh, Ho Chi Minh City, I would like to visit the landmark 81 building.

✓ If I have a chance to visit Ho Chi Minh City, I would like to visit Landmark 81.

The sentence uses a conditional modal 'would like' which is fine, but punctuation and word order were awkward. Remove the extra comma before the city and capitalize the landmark name. Suggestion: in real or likely conditions 'If I have a chance' + 'I would like' is acceptable; streamline clauses and proper nouns.

× I really want to live in a tall building because I I'm very enjoy the view of the tall buildings because it is so clear that I can see the whole city and if I want to be.

✓ I really want to live in a tall building because I enjoy the view; it is so clear that I can see the whole city.

Problems: duplicate pronoun fragment 'I I'm' and incorrect verb 'very enjoy' (extra adverb). The clause 'and if I want to be' is incomplete. Correct pronoun use removes duplication, use 'enjoy' without 'very' before the verb, and remove the unfinished clause. Suggestion: avoid repeating pronouns, place adverbs correctly (e.g., 'really enjoy'), and ensure clauses are complete.

× Yes, there are plenty of tall buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are plenty of tall buildings near my home.

This sentence correctly uses 'there are' for plural existence. No correction needed; keep as is.

× Of course, I have a lot of photos of buildings around my city, especially from my house because my house has a view of a lot of tall buildings in the city.

✓ Of course, I have a lot of photos of buildings around my city, especially from my house, because my house has a view of many tall buildings in the city.

Grammar is mostly fine; change 'a lot of tall buildings' to 'many tall buildings' for formality and avoid repetition of 'a lot'. Also add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: vary vocabulary and punctuate complex sentences for clarity.

× It is known as the tallest building of Vietnam and it has a very.

✓ It is known as the tallest building in Vietnam, and it has a very striking appearance.

Original sentence is incomplete and has awkward preposition 'of'. Complete the thought by adding a noun phrase after 'very' and use 'in Vietnam' for location. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete with both subject and predicate and avoid dangling modifiers.