建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response clear and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct word order and articles. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences.

示例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the eastern suburbs. For example, a cluster of apartment towers and office blocks stands about five minutes from my house, so the skyline is quite prominent.

建议: Be more natural and specific: use present simple for habits, correct verb forms, and a linking phrase to explain why. Mention what you like about the photos to enrich the answer.

示例: Yes, I do. I usually take photos of buildings at sunset because the warm light makes the architecture look beautiful. For example, I often photograph the glass facades that reflect the orange sky.

建议: Clarify your meaning and avoid incorrect verb forms. Begin with a direct statement about the building you want to visit, name or describe it, and give a specific reason using a linking word. Remove irrelevant or confusing phrases.

示例: Yes. I would like to visit the Landmark Tower in my city because it is very famous and offers spectacular panoramic views. For example, people say you can see the whole city from its observation deck.

建议: Polish grammar and shorten fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Mention a particular convenience or view to make it more concrete.

示例: Yes, I do. I currently live in a high-rise condominium because it is very convenient and offers beautiful views. For example, I can see the river from my balcony and I am close to public transport and shops.

× Yes there are uh I near my nearby my house is had a lot of tall buildings because I live in suburb east it.

✓ Yes, there are. Near my house, there are a lot of tall buildings because I live in the eastern suburbs.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: missing punctuation, incorrect word order ('I near my nearby my house is had'), wrong tense 'is had', and awkward location phrase 'in suburb east it'. Correction restructures the sentence into two clear clauses, uses 'there are' for existence, places the location 'near my house' at the start, uses plural 'suburbs' with adjective 'eastern', and corrects verb usage. Suggestion: break long thoughts into shorter sentences, ensure subject-verb structure, and place modifiers (like 'near my house' and 'in the eastern suburbs') in proper positions.

× Yes, I do. Uh, when I saw the building around sunset, I usually take photo in my smartphone. It's very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I do. When I see buildings around sunset, I usually take photos with my smartphone. They are very beautiful.

Tense inconsistency: 'saw' is past while 'usually' suggests habitual present. Use present simple 'see'. 'Take photo' needs plural 'take photos' for repeated action, and 'in my smartphone' is incorrect preposition; use 'with my smartphone'. 'It's' referring to buildings should be plural 'They are'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual actions (present simple), match noun number to action frequency, and use correct prepositions ('with' for devices).

× I should to buy your building because it's quite popular in my country. Is have signal signally view very beautiful.

✓ I would like to visit that building because it's quite popular in my country. It has a very impressive view.

'Should to buy' is incorrect modal/verb pattern; 'should' isn't followed by 'to' and 'buy your building' doesn't fit context (visiting a building). Replaced with 'would like to visit' to match the Examiner's question. Second sentence has incorrect structure 'Is have signal signally view very beautiful'—incorrect verbs and word order. Corrected to 'It has a very impressive view' to express possession and adjective use. Suggestion: choose an appropriate modal for willingness ('would like'), avoid 'to' after modal auxiliaries like 'should', and use subject + verb + object order with correct verbs ('has' for possession).

× Yes I do uh, actually I currently live in high rise condominium because it's very convenient and view beautiful scenery. I really love it.

✓ Yes, I do. Actually, I currently live in a high-rise condominium because it's very convenient and the view is beautiful. I really love it.

Missing articles: 'a high-rise condominium' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'High rise' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'high-rise'. 'View beautiful scenery' has wrong word order and missing verb; corrected to 'the view is beautiful'. Also added punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: use articles with singular countable nouns, hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, and ensure complete clauses with subject and verb when describing nouns ('the view is beautiful').