建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar, and give specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and fix verb forms and articles (e.g., 'an academic centre' or 'language schools').

示例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my apartment. For example, several of them house language schools and a large academic centre, so they attract many students and visitors every day.

建议: State your preference clearly and explain why with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'instead' to connect ideas, and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

示例: No, I usually don't photograph modern buildings because I prefer older, historical sites. For example, I enjoy photographing old temples and parks because they have more interesting details and character.

建议: Answer the question directly and keep tense consistent. If you already visited it, say so clearly and give one or two specific impressions. Use linking words such as 'when' or 'because' to connect ideas and correct prepositions (e.g., 'in Korea' and 'with my lab members').

示例: Yes. A few months ago I visited a famous tower in Korea with my lab members and my professor. When I reached the top, I enjoyed a fantastic panoramic view of the city because the observation deck is very high and offers 360-degree views.

建议: Be direct and use correct grammar to explain your feelings and reasons. Replace casual slang ('wanna') and unclear phrases with standard English, and give a specific reason (e.g., fear of heights, convenience). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I am afraid of heights. Therefore, I prefer an apartment on a low floor since it feels safer and is easier for me to leave quickly in an emergency.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my apartment where many people used to visit there because there are academic center or languages school.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my apartment, where many people used to visit, because there are academic centers and language schools.

Problems: incorrect or redundant preposition 'there' after 'visit' and wrong prepositions/word forms for institutions. Also singular/plural mismatch 'academic center' and 'languages school'. Suggestion: Remove the redundant 'there' after 'visit' ('visit' already takes an object or location), use plural nouns for multiple institutions ('centers', 'language schools'), and add commas for clarity.

× No, actually I don't prefer taking a photo of modern architecture.

✓ No, actually I don't prefer taking photos of modern architecture.

Problem: modality/usage with countable noun and verb form. When speaking generally about the activity, use the plural 'photos' rather than singular 'a photo'. Suggestion: Use plural to indicate the activity in general: 'taking photos'.

× Uh, I just enjoy the view of older art historical sites or nature.

✓ Uh, I just enjoy the views of older art-historical sites or nature.

Problems: 'view' should be plural when speaking generally and 'art historical' is better hyphenated as a compound adjective 'art-historical'. Suggestion: Use 'views' for general enjoyment and hyphenate compound adjective.

× Yes, actually, a few months ago I visited a famous tower in Korean with my laboratory members and professor, so on the top I could enjoy the fantastic panoramic views of the city.

✓ Yes, actually, a few months ago I visited a famous tower in Korea with my lab members and my professor, so at the top I could enjoy fantastic panoramic views of the city.

Problems: wrong preposition 'in Korean' (language vs place) — use 'in Korea'; 'laboratory members' is natural as 'lab members'; missing article 'my professor'; incorrect preposition 'on the top' should be 'at the top'; unnecessary article before 'fantastic panoramic views'. Suggestion: Use correct place preposition, include possessive where needed, and use 'at the top' to indicate position.

× No actually I don't like the live in tall buildings.

✓ No, actually I don't like living in tall buildings.

Problems: incorrect verb form 'the live in' — should use gerund 'living' after 'like' and omit the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'don't like living in...' for general preference.

× I have a lot of scary in hate so I just wanna live in low floor in apartment.

✓ I am very afraid of them, so I just want to live on a low floor in an apartment.

Multiple issues: 'I have a lot of scary in hate' is ungrammatical — use 'I am afraid of them' or 'I am very scared of heights'; 'wanna' is informal; preposition and article use: 'live on a low floor' and 'in an apartment' require articles. Suggestion: Use a clear expression of fear ('I am very afraid of heights' or 'afraid of tall buildings') and formal 'want to', plus correct prepositions and articles.