建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời nên trực tiếp, rõ ràng và ngắn gọn hơn; sửa lỗi từ và ngữ pháp (build → built/building, bargaining → balcony/bargain?), tránh câu dài vắn vỏi không chính xác. Sử dụng một câu chủ đề rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (khoảng cách, ảnh hưởng) với liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, so).

示例: Yes, there are two or three tall office buildings about one kilometre from my house. They aren't visible from my balcony, but they make the area feel busy on weekdays because of the heavy traffic and many commuters.

建议: Sửa từ sai (beatings → buildings) và gộp câu ngắn lẻ để tự nhiên hơn. Nên có câu chủ đề rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể; dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ (image/them).

示例: Yes, I do, especially at dawn because the soft morning light makes buildings look dramatic and peaceful. For example, I often photograph the old train station at sunrise and post the best shots on my social media to capture the atmosphere.

建议: Sửa lỗi từ (prison → person/place?), giữ cấu trúc: nêu tên tòa nhà, lý do, và một chi tiết bổ sung. Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (because, so). Tránh lỗi ngữ nghĩa và chính tả, mô tả cụ thể lý do khiến bạn muốn đến thăm.

示例: I'd like to visit Tokyo Tower in Japan because I saw it in an episode of the anime Detective Conan and it looked impressive. It has a large observation deck, so I hope to go there to enjoy the spectacular panoramic view of Tokyo.

建议: Nội dung mâu thuẫn và nhiều lỗi từ (muốn sống ở tòa nhà cao nhưng nói sợ độ cao; bargaining → balcony; 'one story' vs 'stairs' mâu thuẫn). Cần trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No), giải thích hợp lý và bổ sung ví dụ cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp (prefer living in a low house / a single-storey house), tránh mâu thuẫn trong ý.

示例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I get motion sickness and feel dizzy when I look down from high places. For example, standing on a high balcony makes me feel nauseous, so I prefer a single-storey house which is easier to move around.

× Yes, there are two or three tall build office buildings within about 1 kilometer of my house and I can't see them directly from my bargaining, so I suppose it can be considered nearby.

✓ Yes, there are two or three tall office buildings within about 1 kilometer of my house, and I can't see them directly from my building, so I suppose they can be considered nearby.

The sentence has plural/singular mismatches and word choice errors: 'build office buildings' is redundant and incorrectly ordered; use 'tall office buildings'. 'bargaining' is incorrect word choice for 'building'. 'it can be considered nearby' uses singular 'it' but refers to multiple buildings, so use 'they can be considered nearby'. Suggestion: simplify phrase order, ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number, and use the correct word 'building'.

× Yes, I do. Sometimes. I especially photograph beatings at dawn because the soft morning light makes them look dramatic and peaceful, and I often shoot this image just to capture the atmosphere and share them on my social media.

✓ Yes, I do sometimes. I especially photograph buildings at dawn because the soft morning light makes them look dramatic and peaceful, and I often shoot these images just to capture the atmosphere and share them on my social media.

Errors: 'beatings' is a wrong word; should be 'buildings'. 'I do. Sometimes.' is better combined into 'I do sometimes.' 'this image' is singular but refers to multiple photos, so use 'these images'. Also 'share them' refers to images (plural) so ensure consistency. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and keep number agreement between pronouns and their antecedents.

× I would like to visit Tokyo Tower in Japan because I saw it in an episode of the famous anime Detective Conan. The tower has a large observation deck that offers a spectacular panoramic view of the city, which inspired me to see it in prison.

✓ I would like to visit Tokyo Tower in Japan because I saw it in an episode of the famous anime Detective Conan. The tower has a large observation deck that offers a spectacular panoramic view of the city, which inspired me to see it in person.

The word 'prison' is a wrong word choice and changes meaning; the intended phrase is 'in person'. This is a vocabulary/pronoun issue causing confusion. Suggestion: use 'in person' to indicate visiting personally.

× I would like living in a tall building because I suffer from motion sickness and often feel nauseous when I'm at great height.

✓ I would like to live in a tall building because I suffer from motion sickness and often feel nauseous when I'm at great heights.

After 'would like' use the base verb 'to' + infinitive ('to live'), not the gerund 'living'. Also 'at great height' is unidiomatic; use 'at great heights' or 'when I'm high up'. Suggestion: use correct verb form after 'would like' and use plural 'heights' or a clearer phrase.

× For example, looking down on a high bargaining makes me feel dizzy.

✓ For example, looking down from a high building makes me feel dizzy.

'on a high bargaining' is incorrect: 'bargaining' is wrong word and preposition 'on' is not idiomatic here. Use 'looking down from a high building'. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'building' and the preposition 'from' to indicate position.

× I prefer a large one story house because I feel more comfortable there and it's easier to move around with our stairs.

✓ I prefer a large one-story house because I feel more comfortable there and it's easier to move around without stairs.

'one story' should be hyphenated as 'one-story' as a compound adjective. 'with our stairs' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'without stairs' meaning single-level house. Pronoun 'our' is incorrect reference. Suggestion: use 'without stairs' or 'with no stairs' to express ease of movement, and ensure possessive pronouns correctly match the speaker's meaning.