建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, clarity and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article use and plural/singular forms, and avoid unclear phrases. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g. “for example” or “which”).

示例: Yes. There are several modern tall buildings about a five-minute walk from my home. For example, one of them dominates the skyline with blue-tinted glass and many office floors, so it is very noticeable from my street.

建议: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a direct answer, give a clear reason, and include a brief example or exception. Correct verb forms and avoid filler words like “I mean.”

示例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very interested in architectural photography. However, I did take a few pictures of the city cathedral last year when I visited the old town.

建议: This answer is generally clear and relevant but can be improved by tightening language and adding a specific reason and linking word. Correct small grammar issues and avoid vague phrases like “once in my life.”

示例: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam. In particular, I want to try the restaurants and see the observation deck for panoramic city views.

建议: Provide a clear direct answer, give two concise reasons with linking words, and fix grammar and word order. Use specific comparisons (e.g. convenience, space, privacy).

示例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. Firstly, I think apartments in high-rises are less convenient for families because they have limited outdoor space. Secondly, I prefer a private house with a garden for more privacy and freedom.

× Yes, there's a lot modern building near about a 5 minute walk from my home.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of modern buildings about a five-minute walk from my home.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'there's' (there is) is singular but refers to plural 'a lot of modern buildings' so subject-verb agreement (use 'there are'); 'a lot' requires plural noun 'buildings'; missing hyphens in 'five-minute' when used as a compound adjective; 'near about' is incorrect collocation — use 'about' or 'near' (choose 'about'). Suggestion: use 'There are' + plural noun and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× It's one of the tallest in the area with a blue tied class fiscal that tested now on the skyline.

✓ It's one of the tallest in the area with a blue-tinted glass facade that stands out on the skyline.

Several vocabulary and adjective errors: 'blue tied class fiscal' is incorrect word choices; 'blue-tinted glass' is the correct adjective-noun structure, hyphenate 'blue-tinted' as a compound adjective; 'facade' (spelled correctly) is the correct noun; 'that tested now on the skyline' is ungrammatical — use 'that stands out on the skyline' or 'that is visible on the skyline'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and verbs and use hyphens for compound adjectives.

× No I don't since I'm not really keen on taking photo of MMM buildings so I have no photo with some of the famous building near my house or in my city I mean.

✓ No, I don't, since I'm not really keen on taking photos of modern buildings, so I don't have photos of some of the famous buildings near my house or in my city.

Tense and number issues: 'taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'; 'MMM' likely intended 'modern' — replace with correct adjective; 'I have no photo with' is incorrect preposition and article use — say 'I don't have photos of'; 'famous building' should be plural 'famous buildings'. Also add commas for clarity and keep present simple tense consistent. Suggestion: use plural nouns for countable items and correct prepositions ('photos of').

× Oh, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City, which is one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam and it has a lot of luxury service and food here too, so I want to try it once in my life.

✓ Oh, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City, which is one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam and has many luxury services and restaurants, so I want to try them at least once in my life.

Present tense and countable noun issues: 'it has a lot of luxury service and food here too' is awkward — use 'has many luxury services and restaurants' or 'a lot of luxury services and restaurants'; 'try it once in my life' is better as 'try them at least once in my life' to refer to services/food. Suggestion: use plural nouns for countable services and match pronouns ('them') to plural antecedents.

× No I don't since tall beauty like well I think it would be an apartment in my imagination but isn't.

✓ No, I don't. Tall buildings are not very appealing to me; I imagine living in an apartment, but that's not what I prefer.

Sentence structure and coherence: 'since tall beauty like well' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'I think it would be an apartment in my imagination but isn't' is fragmented and missing subjects/verbs. Reconstruct sentences to express the intended meaning: state dislike, imagine apartment, then contrast preference. Suggestion: break into clear sentences, use full subjects and verbs, and replace vague phrases with precise ones.

× I don't think it's has convenient as the land house so I prefer the house without in the building.

✓ I don't think it's as convenient as a house on the ground, so I prefer a house that is not in a building.

Preposition and article errors: 'it's has' combines two verbs — use 'it is' or 'it's' without 'has'; 'as convenient as the land house' is incorrect — use 'as convenient as a house on the ground' or 'as convenient as a house on land'; 'prefer the house without in the building' is ungrammatical — use 'prefer a house that is not in a building'. Suggestion: avoid double verbs, use proper comparative structure 'as ... as', and choose correct prepositions ('in a building' vs 'on the ground').