食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答の主旨は明確で、寿司の種類にも触れられている点は良いです。ただし、「eat my sushi, eat sushi」のような繰り返しを避け、「sushi store」より自然な「sushi restaurant」を使いましょう。また、「summon」は「salmon」の発音・語彙の誤りです。最初に好物を直接述べ、その後に家族と食べることや好きな具材を、つながりのある文で説明すると、より自然で効果的になります。

示例: My favourite food is sushi, especially tuna and salmon. I often go to a sushi restaurant with my parents because we all enjoy it. I particularly like the fresh taste of the fish.

建议: 過去の質問なので、動詞を過去形に統一してください。「write」は文脈に合わず、「humbug」は「hamburger」が適切です。また、「enjoy to eat」は「enjoyed eating」、「happy and enjoyable」は意味が重複するため、どちらか一つにしましょう。最初に好きだった食べ物を述べ、両親が作ってくれたことや、その理由を具体的に加えると、内容が明確になります。

示例: When I was young, I loved hamburgers. My parents often made them for me at home, and I really enjoyed eating them. I especially liked the cheese and the crispy buns.

建议: 季節ごとの食べ物を比較して答えている点は良いですが、「abshaed ice」は「shaved ice」、「ordinary」は文脈上おそらく「oden」など、正確な単語を使う必要があります。「In winter, I usually it's hot things」は文法的に不自然なので、「In winter, I usually eat hot foods」としましょう。「For example」や「whereas」を使って、夏と冬の違いを明確につなげると効果的です。

示例: Yes, I do. In summer, I usually eat cold desserts such as ice cream and shaved ice. In winter, I prefer hot food, such as oden and hot pot, because it helps me keep warm.

建议: 子どもの頃と現在を比較しようとしている点は良いですが、時制と文の構造を大幅に整理する必要があります。「I liked」「I hated」を過去形で使い、現在は「I have started to like vegetables」のように表現しましょう。「liked only the meat」は「only liked meat」、「write the betables」は「eat vegetables」または「enjoy vegetables」の誤りと考えられます。「but now」を使って、過去と現在の対比を明確にしてください。

示例: Yes, it has changed. When I was a child, I only liked meat and hated vegetables. However, I have gradually started to enjoy vegetables because I understand that they are healthy and add more variety to my meals.

× My favorite food is sushi and I usually go to the sushi store with my parents to eat my sushi, eat sushi. In particular, I prefer the tuna and the summon.

✓ My favorite food is sushi, and I usually go to a sushi restaurant with my parents to eat sushi. In particular, I prefer tuna and salmon.

The phrase 'eat my sushi, eat sushi' is unnecessarily repeated and makes the sentence structure incorrect. Use one clear verb phrase. The generic nouns 'tuna' and 'salmon' do not normally need 'the'.

× When I was young I write the humbug and my parents usually made me the humbug and I enjoy to eat eat which makes me very happy and enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers. My parents usually made hamburgers for me, and I enjoyed eating them, which made me very happy.

The time expression 'when I was young' refers to the past, so use past-tense verbs such as 'liked,' 'made,' and 'enjoyed,' not 'write' or 'enjoy.' Also, 'makes' must become 'made' because the whole experience happened in the past.

× When I was young I write the humbug and my parents usually made me the humbug and I enjoy to eat eat which makes me very happy and enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers. My parents usually made hamburgers for me, and I enjoyed eating them, which made me very happy.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund with -ing, not by 'to' plus the base verb. Therefore, say 'enjoyed eating,' not 'enjoy to eat.'

× When I was young I write the humbug and my parents usually made me the humbug and I enjoy to eat eat which makes me very happy and enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers. My parents usually made hamburgers for me, and I enjoyed eating them, which made me very happy.

When someone prepares food for another person, use 'make something for someone.' Therefore, 'made me the hamburger' should be 'made hamburgers for me.'

× When I was young I write the humbug and my parents usually made me the humbug and I enjoy to eat eat which makes me very happy and enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers. My parents usually made hamburgers for me, and I enjoyed eating them, which made me very happy.

You are talking about hamburgers in general, so the plural form 'hamburgers' is more appropriate than the singular form 'hamburger.'

× When I was young I write the humbug and my parents usually made me the humbug and I enjoy to eat eat which makes me very happy and enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I liked hamburgers. My parents usually made hamburgers for me, and I enjoyed eating them, which made me very happy.

'Happy' describes a person's feeling, while 'enjoyable' describes something that gives pleasure. In this sentence, the speaker's feeling is being described, so use 'very happy,' not 'very enjoyable.'

× In winter, I usually it's hot things such as ordinary.

✓ In winter, I usually eat hot foods such as oden.

The sentence needs the main verb 'eat.' The structure should be subject + adverb + verb + object: 'I usually eat hot foods.' Do not use 'it's' in this structure because 'it's' means 'it is.'

× Yes when I was a child I liked I like only the meat and I hate the vegetables but now I can became preferred far I can begin to write the betables.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked only meat and hated vegetables, but now I prefer vegetables.

The phrase 'when I was a child' describes the past, so use 'liked' and 'hated.' The present-time contrast is introduced by 'now,' so 'prefer' is used for the current situation.

× Yes when I was a child I liked I like only the meat and I hate the vegetables but now I can became preferred far I can begin to write the betables.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked only meat and hated vegetables, but now I prefer vegetables.

For a current preference, use the simple present: 'I prefer vegetables.' The forms 'became preferred' and 'can begin to write' do not express the intended present meaning.

× Yes when I was a child I liked I like only the meat and I hate the vegetables but now I can became preferred far I can begin to write the betables.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked only meat and hated vegetables, but now I prefer vegetables.

After the modal verb 'can,' use the base form of a verb, such as 'can become' or 'can begin.' However, neither expression fits the intended meaning here. To express a current preference, simply say 'now I prefer vegetables.'

× Yes when I was a child I liked I like only the meat and I hate the vegetables but now I can became preferred far I can begin to write the betables.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked only meat and hated vegetables, but now I prefer vegetables.

When referring to meat and vegetables in general, do not use 'the.' Use the uncountable noun 'meat' and the plural noun 'vegetables' without an article.

× Yes when I was a child I liked I like only the meat and I hate the vegetables but now I can became preferred far I can begin to write the betables.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked only meat and hated vegetables, but now I prefer vegetables.

The original sentence contains repeated verbs, incorrect verb combinations, and several ideas joined without clear punctuation. Divide the answer into two clauses and connect them with 'but' to show the contrast between the past and the present.