食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases (e.g. “I see. I would see”), and add one specific detail or reason. Use linking words if adding details.

示例: My favourite food is ice cream because I love its variety of flavours and cold, creamy texture. For example, I often choose mango or chocolate when I want a sweet treat, and I usually have it after dinner as a dessert.

建议: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail and a linking word. Avoid listing without structure.

示例: When I was young, I mainly enjoyed sweet snacks like chocolates, gummies and ice cream. For instance, I would have a chocolate bar after school every day, which made sweets a big part of my childhood diet.

建议: Give a clearer topic sentence, correct minor word choices, and organise details with linking words. Be specific about timing and a few representative items rather than a long list.

示例: Yes, I do eat different foods at certain times of year. For example, at Christmas we celebrate Noche Buena: we usually eat sweet ham (jamón), roast meats, pasta and special cakes, and these dishes are enjoyed throughout the holiday season until January.

建议: Answer with a clear topic sentence, use consistent tense and add a specific example or reason showing the change. Use a linking word to connect cause and effect.

示例: Yes, my tastes have changed. When I was a child I disliked spicy food, but over time I developed a taste for it; for example, I now enjoy spicy Mexican dishes like tacos al pastor because I like the flavour and heat.

× I would say my favorite food would be ice cream.

✓ I would say my favorite food is ice cream.

The original uses 'would be' twice which is unnecessary and awkward. Use simple present 'is' to state a general preference. Suggestion: use 'is' for facts or preferences (I would say my favorite food is ice cream).

× I see. I would see myself eat it all the time even though not a lot of people would consider it as real food.

✓ I guess I would eat it all the time even though not a lot of people consider it real food.

Problems: 'I see' is inappropriate here; 'I would see myself eat' is incorrect verb pattern. Use 'I would eat' or 'I would find myself eating' for habitual hypothetical actions. Also 'consider it as real food' should be 'consider it real food' (no 'as'). Suggestion: use 'I guess' or 'I suppose', and use 'consider it real food'.

× When I was young, I usually enjoy sweets, particularly chocolates, gummies, ice cream, anything that is sweet.

✓ When I was young, I usually enjoyed sweets, particularly chocolates, gummies, and ice cream, anything that was sweet.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present tense 'enjoy'. Change verbs to past tense 'enjoyed' and 'was' for consistency. Also add 'and' before the last item in the list for clarity.

× Yes, For example, Christmas, we usually do our tradition that is called Nacho Buena where we have Ramon, which is sweet ham, we have cakes, we have meats, pastas and desserts where we eat it throughout the celebration until January.

✓ Yes. For example, at Christmas we usually observe a tradition called Noche Buena where we have jamon, which is sweet ham; we have cakes, meats, pastas, and desserts that we eat throughout the celebration until January.

Multiple issues: 'For example, Christmas' needs preposition 'at Christmas'. 'Do our tradition' should be 'observe a tradition' or 'celebrate a tradition'. 'Nacho Buena' is likely 'Noche Buena' and 'Ramon' should be 'jamon' or 'ham'. Use commas and semicolons to avoid run-on sentence; use 'that we eat' instead of 'where we eat'. Also include 'and' before last list item. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and clearer noun phrases.

× Yes, because when I was younger I really don't like spicy foods, but now that I'm older I like it very much and I enjoy eating food that are spicy.

✓ Yes, because when I was younger I really didn't like spicy food, but now that I'm older I like it very much and I enjoy eating spicy food.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was younger' requires past tense 'didn't like' not 'don't like'. 'Spicy foods' can be 'spicy food' (uncountable) and later use 'spicy food' rather than 'food that are spicy' which has subject-verb disagreement. Suggestion: keep past tense for the past clause and use correct noun form and adjective order for the present clause.