食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (taste, preparation, or memory). Avoid repeating phrases and correct verb forms and articles.

示例: My favourite food is my mum’s oxtail stew. It has a rich, beefy flavour and takes several hours to cook so the meat becomes tender. I especially enjoy it because my mother uses a special blend of spices that reminds me of family dinners.

建议: Answer directly and stay on topic. Use one topic sentence naming the childhood favourite, then give brief, coherent supporting details (why you liked it, how it was made or accessed). Avoid unrelated or unclear statements, fix grammar and repetitions.

示例: When I was young, my favourite food was a simple traditional pizza made at home. We couldn’t always afford store-bought ingredients, so my grandmother grew tomatoes and beans in her small garden and we used those fresh toppings. I liked it because it tasted homemade and reminded me of family time.

建议: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence and then provide a specific seasonal example and a reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘seasonal’ not ‘developing’) and avoid listing unrelated items. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

示例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. In summer I prefer light meals like grilled fish and salads, while in winter I eat heartier dishes such as oxtail stew and roasted chicken because I want something warming.

建议: Answer directly and explain reasons for the change. Use correct tense and pronouns, and give one or two clear reasons (taste, health, availability) with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'love her oxtail' and redundancy.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. As I grew older I began to prefer oxtail stew because I appreciate richer flavours and my family cooks it well; also occasionally my food choices are influenced by health concerns, so I now choose healthier options at times.

× My favorite food is oxtail meat, however, it is strong.

✓ My favorite food is oxtail, but it has a strong flavor.

The original uses 'strong' without specifying what is strong; 'oxtail meat' is wordy so 'oxtail' is preferred. Use 'but' to join contrasting ideas and 'has a strong flavor' correctly modifies the noun. Suggestion: use precise adjectives and linkers to clarify meaning.

× It requires a lot of time to prepare it, but it remains one of my favorite meal.

✓ It requires a lot of time to prepare, but it remains one of my favorite meals.

'One of my favorite meal' is incorrect because 'one of' requires a plural noun 'meals'. Also repeating the pronoun 'it' after 'prepare' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use plural with 'one of' and avoid redundant pronouns.

× I like how my mom prepare it.

✓ I like how my mom prepares it.

Subject 'my mom' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'prepares' (third person singular -s). Suggestion: add -s for present simple with he/she/it subjects.

× It is so nice for me.

✓ It is very nice to me.

'So nice for me' is unnatural; use 'very nice to me' or better 'I really enjoy it' to express personal preference. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations like 'nice to me' or use an active construction.

× It is so nice, I like it.

✓ It is so nice that I like it.

Comma splice connects two independent clauses incorrectly. Use 'that' to show result or split into two sentences: 'It is so nice. I like it.' Suggestion: avoid comma splices; use conjunctions or sentence breaks.

× My favorite food when I was young it was a traditional pizza.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was traditional pizza.

There is an extra pronoun 'it' causing redundancy. Also article 'a' is unnecessary with uncountable or generic food; 'traditional pizza' is fine. Suggestion: remove redundant subjects and keep verb agreement.

× The reason why I lack a traditional beans is because I grew up in a poor family where we didn't have enough money to buy expensive food.

✓ The reason I lacked traditional beans is that I grew up in a poor family where we didn't have enough money to buy expensive food.

Use past 'lacked' to match 'grew up'. 'The reason why' plus 'is because' is redundant; use 'the reason is that' or 'the reason I lacked... is that'. Also 'beans' after 'traditional' does not need 'a'. Suggestion: avoid redundant constructions and match tense.

× But when it comes to traditional beans, we have to garden it.

✓ But when it comes to traditional beans, we have to grow them in a garden.

'Have to garden it' is ungrammatical; 'garden' as a verb can be used but better 'grow them in a garden'. Also use plural pronoun 'them' for 'beans'. Suggestion: choose correct verb and agreement for cultivation.

× My grandmother used to have a small garden where we we we farm trades.

✓ My grandmother used to have a small garden where we farmed and traded.

Remove repeated 'we'. Use past 'farmed' to match 'used to have'. 'Farm trades' is unclear; 'farmed and traded' conveys activities. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear verbs for past habitual actions.

× Of course, I eat developing food at different times a year.

✓ Of course, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

'Developing food' is inappropriate; likely intended 'different food'. Use plural 'foods' and phrase 'at different times of the year'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective and pluralize when speaking generally.

× For example, last week I ate fish, oxtail and chicken.

✓ For example, last week I ate fish, oxtail, and chicken.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only punctuation adjusted by adding Oxford comma optionally. Tense 'ate' correctly indicates past. Suggestion: keep past tense for specific past events.

× However, my eat variety depends on my appetite.

✓ However, my choice of food depends on my appetite.

'My eat variety' is ungrammatical. Use 'choice of food' or 'variety of food' and the verb 'depends' is fine. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases like 'choice of food'.

× Indeed, my favorite food change since I was a child.

✓ Indeed, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

When an action started in the past and continues to present, use present perfect 'has changed'. Also 'food' is singular but fine; ensure verb form 'has changed'. Suggestion: use present perfect for changes over time.

× For example, when I grew up, I discovered that I love her oxtail more than the food that I used to eat when I was young.

✓ For example, when I grew up, I discovered that I love my mother's oxtail more than the food I used to eat when I was young.

'Her oxtail' is unclear; use 'my mother's' to show possession. 'That' in 'the food that I used to eat' is optional; removed for concision. Tense and meaning preserved. Suggestion: use clear possessive forms.

× And sometimes the love of food that I eat depends on the my health issues.

✓ And sometimes my liking for certain foods depends on my health issues.

'The love of food that I eat' is awkward; 'my liking for certain foods' is natural. Remove extra 'the'. Use 'depends on my health issues' is fine. Suggestion: use concise noun phrases and eliminate redundant articles.