食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific reason with a linking word. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘vegetables’, ‘greens’, ‘fresh produce’). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: My favourite food is vegetables because they are fresh and nutritious. For example, leafy greens like spinach and kale give me energy and help me stay healthy, so I eat them regularly.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear specific detail. Avoid hesitation sounds and contradictions (saying you couldn’t afford it then you ate it). Use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

示例: When I was young, I often ate malunggay (moringa) because my family believed it was very nutritious. Because it grows locally and is affordable, we used it in soups and stews almost every week.

建议: Answer directly then give one brief reason with a linking phrase. Avoid repeating words and grammatical errors (e.g., ‘those who those are affordable’). Use clearer phrasing about affordability and availability.

示例: No, I usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year because of my budget. Since vegetables are affordable and widely available in my province, I rely on them most of the time.

建议: Start with a clear statement and give a concise contrast using linking words like ‘however’ or ‘now’. Mention one or two specific examples to support the change and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I mainly ate vegetables, but now I enjoy dishes like spaghetti and chicken lasagna because I can afford more variety and I like the richer flavours.

× You can gain a lot of benefits unlike those processed food.

✓ You can gain a lot of benefits unlike those processed foods.

'Processed food' refers to the general category but here it is compared with 'those', implying countable items; use the plural 'processed foods'. Use consistent number when using demonstratives like 'those'. Suggestion: say 'those processed foods' or 'processed food' without 'those'.

× It will not be good to your health, so I prefer veggies.

✓ It will not be good for your health, so I prefer veggies.

The correct preposition with 'good' describing effect on health is 'for', not 'to'. This sentence also uses future 'will' unnecessarily; consider 'It is not good for your health'. Suggestion: 'It is not good for your health, so I prefer vegetables.'

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? / When I was young, I often ate malungay because I believed they were very nutritious and uh, there's a lot of benefits eating malongai and I cannot afford to eat it.

✓ When I was young, I often ate malunggay because I believed it was very nutritious, and there were a lot of benefits to eating malunggay, but I could not always afford to eat it.

Multiple issues: 'malungay/malongai' is inconsistent — use one spelling 'malunggay'. 'They were' implies plural but malunggay (the plant or leaves) should be treated as singular/uncountable 'it'. 'There's' (there is) should be 'there were' to match past tense. 'A lot of benefits eating' needs preposition 'to' ('benefits to eating'). 'I cannot afford' should match past context 'could not afford'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in past narratives and use correct pronoun number for the food item.

× So we will. We prefer to eat veggies.

✓ So we preferred to eat veggies.

In the past narrative the speaker switches tenses and uses future 'will' unnecessarily and present 'prefer'. Use past 'preferred' to match 'When I was young' context. Also 'So we will.' is incomplete and unclear — remove it. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and complete sentences.

× No, I don't eat different foods at different times of the year because I don't have work and I cannot afford buying those expensive food.

✓ No, I don't eat different foods at different times of the year because I don't have work and I cannot afford to buy those expensive foods.

Two issues: use infinitive 'to buy' after 'afford' and plural 'foods' to match 'those expensive'. 'Afford buying' is nonstandard in this context. Suggestion: 'I cannot afford to buy those expensive foods.'

× All I can afford is those who those are affordable, just like vegetables and there are many more of them in my province so I prefer.

✓ All I can afford is those that are affordable, like vegetables, and there are many of them in my province, so I prefer them.

Problems: 'those who those are affordable' is ungrammatical — use 'those that are affordable'. 'All I can afford is those' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'those'; better: 'All I can afford are those that are affordable' or rephrase as corrected. Also add object 'them' after 'prefer' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify sentence and ensure subject-verb number agreement and correct relative pronoun.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? / I believe so. Since I was young I only ate vegetables, but now growing up I can afford eating spaghetti, chicken lasagna which are my favorite food right now.

✓ I believe so. When I was young I only ate vegetables, but now, as I've grown up, I can afford to eat spaghetti and chicken lasagna, which are my favorite foods right now.

Use 'When' instead of 'Since' for single point in past; maintain tense consistency: 'I've grown up' (present perfect) fits 'now'. Use infinitive 'to eat' after 'afford'. 'Chicken lasagna which are my favorite food' has number mismatch — 'lasagna' and 'spaghetti' plural idea: use 'favorite foods'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and match plural/singular forms.