食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更直接并控制长度（不超过5句），减少犹豫词（uh）、重复表达，并用连词使列举更流畅。可以先给出总览句，然后用短句举例并稍作描述以显得具体自然。

示例: I’m a real foodie, so it’s hard to pick one favourite. Generally I prefer Asian dishes; for example, I love sushi for its fresh flavours, Chinese hot pot for its variety and sociable atmosphere, and barbecue for the smoky taste.

建议: 注意时态一致（过去时），避免重复与口误（I am I was），并提供具体原因或例子以丰富内容。保持句子简短清晰。

示例: When I was a child I preferred going to McDonald’s and cafés because I loved the taste of fried foods and the fun atmosphere. For example, I often ordered chicken nuggets and fries as a treat.

建议: 答案需更清晰、语法正确并补全未说完的内容。用具体食物与原因解释季节差异，避免生造词（Chinese poppers）和语法错误（prefer to eating, you put me energy）。用连词连接句子使逻辑连贯。

示例: Yes, it depends on the season. In winter I prefer warm, hearty foods like hot pot and baked goods because they keep me warm and energised. In summer I eat lighter dishes such as sushi and salads to stay cool.

建议: 句子要分开并使用正确时态，避免不明词汇或错用短语（not hassle to research, frightful）。直接回答并解释为何喜好保持或改变，给出具体例子并简短总结。

示例: Not much has changed; I still enjoy the same fast foods I liked as a child. Although I know they aren’t very healthy, I still love the taste of hamburgers and chips, so I eat them occasionally as a treat.

× Student: Actually, I am a foodie. It is so difficult for me to choose what is my most favorite food. I love eating sushi, uh Chinese hot pot and uh BBQ.

✓ Actually, I am a foodie. It is so difficult for me to choose what my most favorite food is. I love eating sushi, Chinese hot pot and BBQ.

句子中“what is my most favorite food”语序不正确。宾语从句中陈述语序应为主语在前、动词在后，正确形式是“what my most favorite food is”。另外去掉重复的填充词“uh”，使表达更自然。建议多练习宾语从句的语序：疑问词+主语+谓语。

× Student: When I was a child, I prefer to go to McDonald's and cafe because I am I was a big fan of fast food and fried food.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred to go to McDonald's and cafés because I was a big fan of fast food and fried food.

句子描述过去的习惯，应使用过去时，所以“prefer”需改为过去式“preferred”。另外句中有重复的“I am I was”，应保留过去时“was”。“cafe”复数或泛指时用“cafés”或“cafes”。建议注意时间状语（when I was a child）决定动词时态一致性。

× Student: Thus, it really depends on the season. In winter I prefer to eating some Chinese poppers and bakery because they will make you feel warm and you put me energy. But during summers I chose to replace some sushi because.

✓ Thus, it really depends on the season. In winter I prefer to eat some Chinese dumplings and baked goods because they make you feel warm and give me energy. But during summer I choose to eat more sushi.

“prefer to”后应接动词原形，故“prefer to eating”改为“prefer to eat”。“poppers and bakery”用词不当，改为“dumplings and baked goods（饺子和烘焙食品）”。“they will make you feel warm and you put me energy”结构混乱，改为“they make you feel warm and give me energy”。“during summers I chose”应与陈述现在习惯匹配，使用现在时“choose”，并改为“during summer”或“in summer”。建议注意动词不定式和主谓一致以及词汇搭配。

× Student: Not too much when I was a child I prefer McDonald's and Cafe, but now I still love them. I know it is not hassle to research fast food and frightful, but I really love hamburgers and chips.

✓ Not too much. When I was a child I preferred McDonald's and cafés, but now I still love them. I know it is not healthy to regard fast food as harmful, but I really love hamburgers and chips.

第一句需要断句为两个句子以改善结构。“When I was a child”引导的从句应使用过去时“preferred”。原句“it is not hassle to research fast food and frightful”词不当且语序错误，可能想表达“把快餐当成不健康/有害”，因此改为“it is not healthy to regard fast food as harmful”仍需注意表意——如果本意是“虽然不健康但我仍喜欢”，可改为“I know fast food is unhealthy, but I really love hamburgers and chips.” 建议理清想表达的意思并使用常见搭配如“fast food is unhealthy”。