食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答を主題文で簡潔に始め、不要な語や矛盾を避けて明確に述べること。具体的な例（好きなデザート名）を挙げ、理由を短くつなげる練習をする。文法と語順の誤り（冠詞・複数形・語の順）に注意し、最大5文以内に収めること。例えば“Japanese traditional crafts”は文脈に合わないため削除または説明を追加すること。

示例: My favourite foods are sweet desserts, especially chocolate cake and sugar cookies. I enjoy baking them at home because it relaxes me and lets me be creative. For example, I often try new cookie recipes on weekends.

建议: 過去の習慣は過去形で一貫して表現すること（例: I used to eat）。具体的な食べ物を列挙する場合は自然な語順と正しい単語（potatoes, fries, foods）を使う。健康に関する評価は理由や比較（今との違い）を添えて簡潔に述べる。文をつなぐ際は接続詞を使い流れを良くすること。

示例: When I was young, I used to eat a lot of fatty foods, such as ramen, steak and hamburgers. I also often ate fried chicken and fries. Now I try to eat more vegetables because I realized those foods are unhealthy.

建议: まず簡潔に「はい／いいえ」で応答し、その後に具体例を一つか二つ挙げること。季節の食材や祭事に関連する料理を具体的に述べ、文法（冠詞・主語と動詞の一致）に注意すること。冗長な表現や重複（the the）を避ける。

示例: Yes. In Japan we often eat seasonal dishes; for example, I enjoy eating cherry-blossom flavored sweets in spring and grilled matsutake mushrooms in autumn. These foods are linked to festivals and family gatherings.

建议: 過去から現在への変化は明確な時制と理由で説明すること。冗長なフレーズ（repeated because, when I after）を避け、自然な表現（changed year by year / changed after I graduated）を使う。理由を一つに絞り、短い具体例を加えると説得力が増す。

示例: Yes, it has changed over the years. After I graduated from school, my lifestyle became less active, so I stopped playing sports and started preferring sweeter and easier-to-make foods like cakes and cookies.

× My favorite food is largely very sweet things, the dessert cake, cooking cookies and sugar cookie that is better.

✓ My favorite foods are mostly very sweet things: desserts, cakes, cookies, and sugar cookies.

This sentence has multiple adjective/noun use issues and number agreement. 'My favorite food is largely very sweet things' mixes singular 'food' with plural 'things' and uses 'largely' awkwardly; use 'mostly' and plural 'foods'. 'the dessert cake, cooking cookies and sugar cookie' is ungrammatical list; use plural nouns and parallel structure. Also 'that is better' is unclear and unnecessary. Suggestion: list items in parallel plural form and use 'mostly' to indicate preference for sweet foods. (Grammar problem type ID:13)

× Japanese traditional crafts I prioritize, I think because it changes my motivation.

✓ I also prioritize Japanese traditional sweets because they change my motivation.

The original mixes 'Japanese traditional crafts' (wrong noun) with 'prioritize' and 'changes my motivation'. The intended meaning likely refers to traditional Japanese sweets or confectionery; 'crafts' is incorrect. The sentence structure is awkward; combine ideas: 'I also prioritize Japanese traditional sweets because they change my motivation.' Use 'sweets' or 'confectionery' to match context. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× In my childhood I tend to eat more fatty things, including ramen, steak, hamburger and.

✓ In my childhood I tended to eat fattier foods, including ramen, steak, and hamburgers.

Tense mismatch: 'In my childhood' requires past tense 'tended' not present 'tend'. Use comparative 'fattier' and plural 'hamburgers'. Remove trailing 'and'. Also use 'foods' rather than 'things' for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× The fried chicken and potato I found recently.

✓ I recently discovered fried chicken and potatoes.

Original fragments lack clear subject-verb order. 'The fried chicken and potato I found recently' is awkward; rephrase to active 'I recently discovered fried chicken and potatoes.' Use plural 'potatoes' and place adverb 'recently' before main verb. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× I found that these stuffs are relatively unhealthy.

✓ I found that these foods are relatively unhealthy.

'Stuffs' is nonstandard; use 'things' or better 'foods'. Maintain plural agreement and use 'relatively unhealthy' correctly. (Grammar problem type ID:13)

× Yes, I am considering the season or timing of the dishes that connects to the ritual and culture of Japanese.

✓ Yes, I consider the season or timing of dishes that are connected to Japanese rituals and culture.

Preposition and noun order issues: 'of Japanese' is incorrect; use 'Japanese rituals and culture'. 'Considering' can be simplified to 'consider' for habitual action. Use 'connected to' rather than 'connects to' to agree with plural 'dishes'. (Grammar problem type ID:11)

× Not only that but also the the foods in Japan has the same.

✓ Not only that, but the foods in Japan are the same.

Double 'the' is an error; subject 'the foods' is plural so verb should be 'are' not 'has'. Remove redundant phrase 'but also' or use correct punctuation: 'Not only that, but the foods in Japan are the same.' (Grammar problem type ID:27)

× Yes, it has. My favorite has been changed a year by year because when I after I graduated from school, my taste has been completely changed because I stopped to doing sports so.

✓ Yes, it has. My favorites have changed year by year. After I graduated from school, my tastes changed completely because I stopped doing sports.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'has been changed a year by year' is ungrammatical; use 'have changed year by year' or 'changed year by year'. 'When I after I graduated' is redundant; choose 'After I graduated from school'. 'Has been completely changed' should be simple past 'changed' for a completed change. 'Stopped to doing sports' is incorrect; use 'stopped doing sports'. Also pluralize 'favorites/tastes' for consistency. (Grammar problem type ID:5)