食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct tense and grammar, and remove irrelevant or confusing details (mentioning a parrot and contradictory phrase “So I would say not”). Use one or two supporting details with linking words.

示例: My favourite food is beef noodles. They are very popular in my country and easy to find everywhere. For example, I used to eat them at local noodle shops when I was a child, and I still enjoy their rich broth and tender beef.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, use consistent tense, reduce hesitations, and add a specific reason with a linking word. Replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., where you ate them and how they made you feel).

示例: When I was young, I liked beef noodles. Whenever I felt upset, my parents would take me to a nearby noodle shop, and the warm broth always cheered me up, so I became very fond of them.

建议: Structure your answer: start with a direct yes/no + reason, use linking words (for example, however), correct grammar (use present simple or modal verbs properly), and be specific about how seasons affect your choices.

示例: Yes. In winter I prefer beef noodles because the hot broth is comforting. However, in summer I usually choose ice cream since Taiwan is very hot and heavy soups feel too warm.

建议: Give a clear statement about whether it changed, use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'disgusting' instead of 'Grossy'), avoid repetition and hesitations, and provide a concise reason with a linking word.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to love beef noodles, but now I prefer fried chicken because after eating beef noodles so often as a child I became a bit tired of them.

× It's really popular in my country because umm you can eat everywhere.

✓ It's really popular in my country because you can eat it everywhere.

Missing object 'it' after 'eat' makes the sentence ungrammatical; also 'eat everywhere' is acceptable but 'eat it everywhere' is clearer. Suggest always include the object when referring to a specific food.

× For example, when I was young I always eat beef noodles with my parrot.

✓ For example, when I was young I always ate beef noodles with my partner.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was young' requires past tense 'ate' not present 'eat' (Past tense issue as well). Also 'parrot' is likely wrong in context; if meant 'parent' or 'partner', correct the noun. Use past tense verbs to match a past time frame.

× So I would say not.

✓ So I would say no.

Incorrect word choice and structure: 'say not' is unnatural in this context; the idiomatic response is 'say no'. Use the standard negative reply 'no' rather than 'not'.

× I liked beef noodles as the the previous question because, uh, whenever I feel uncomfortable, my parents will always bring me to eat the, uh, beef noodles.

✓ I liked beef noodles, as I said in the previous question, because whenever I felt uncomfortable my parents would always take me to eat beef noodles.

Mixed tense problems: 'liked' and 'whenever I feel' mismatch; when describing past habitual events use past tense 'felt' and 'would' or 'used to'. Also 'bring me to eat' is awkward; 'take me to eat' or 'take me to get' is better. Remove extra 'the'.

× So I like beef noodles very much.

✓ So I liked beef noodles very much.

Context refers to childhood so past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Maintain consistent tense when discussing past preferences.

× Yes, uh, when it's winter, I would eat the beef noodles.

✓ Yes, when it's winter, I eat beef noodles.

Use present simple for habitual actions in general/current habits: 'When it's winter, I eat...' Using 'would' is acceptable for past habitual actions; here speaker describes current seasonal habit so present simple is preferred. Also 'the' before 'beef noodles' is unnecessary.

× When it's in the summer, I would eat the ice creams because uh, in Taiwan it's very hot in summer, it's uh, it's not good to eat beef noodles.

✓ When it's summer, I eat ice cream because in Taiwan it's very hot in summer; it's not good to eat beef noodles then.

Use present simple for habitual actions. 'Ice cream' is uncountable in general, so 'ice creams' is incorrect. Remove extra 'in' before 'the summer' and avoid repeated filler words. Add 'then' to clarify timing.

× If made me feel very uncomfortable, but if I eat in the winter, it make me feel like really comfortable.

✓ It made me feel very uncomfortable, but if I eat it in the winter, it makes me feel really comfortable.

Sentence fragments and tense/subject-verb agreement errors: 'If made me' lacks subject — change to 'It made me'. Maintain consistent structure: 'it makes me' for general truth, and include object 'it'. Use singular verb 'makes' to agree with subject 'it'. Remove unnecessary 'like'.

× Yeah, when I was young I like to eat beef noodle very much, but right now I like to eat the fried chickens much because, umm, when I was like 12, I always eat beef noodles.

✓ When I was young I liked to eat beef noodles very much, but now I like eating fried chicken because when I was about 12 I always ate beef noodles.

Mix of past and present tenses: 'when I was young' requires past 'liked'. 'Right now' uses present 'like' — keep that. Use 'fried chicken' (uncountable) not 'fried chickens'. Use past tense 'ate' for habits at age 12 and 'about' instead of 'like' as a filler.

× So it's kind of makes me feel like Grossy when I see the food.

✓ So it kind of makes me feel gross when I see that food.

Incorrect word form: 'grossy' is not a correct adjective; use 'gross'. 'Kind of makes' is acceptable but combine properly: 'it kind of makes me feel gross'. Use 'that food' or 'it' rather than 'the food' for clarity. Remove unnecessary 'like'.

× So now I change to like to eat the fried chicken.

✓ So now I prefer to eat fried chicken.

Awkward phrasing: 'change to like to eat' is unidiomatic. Use 'prefer to eat' or 'now I eat fried chicken' to express current preference. Remove the article 'the' before uncountable 'fried chicken'.