食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and filler words.

示例: My favourite food is sushi. I especially enjoy salmon sushi and the sharp taste of wasabi because it balances the flavours. For example, I often go to a local Japanese restaurant where the rice is well seasoned, which makes the meal more enjoyable.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and one specific example with a linking word to make it coherent. Reduce repetition and use correct tense and quantifiers.

示例: When I was young, I loved sweet foods. For instance, I often ate ice cream and candy after school, and I especially liked chocolate ice cream because it was a special treat.

建议: Answer the seasonal aspect directly, then give specific examples and use linking words. Correct articles and plural forms, and avoid overlong sentences.

示例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer cold dishes like salads and cold noodles, whereas in winter I choose hot soups and stews because they are warming.

建议: State clearly whether your favourite changed, then explain briefly with one or two reasons using linking words. Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid hesitation sounds.

示例: My favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to prefer sweets, but as I got older I grew to prefer sushi because I appreciate the subtle flavours and healthier ingredients.

× I really love to say that my favorite food web sushi.

✓ I really want to say that my favorite food is sushi.

Incorrect word choice and missing preposition/linking verb. 'web' is incorrect; likely intended 'is'. Use the copula 'is' to link subject and predicate. Also 'want to say' is more natural than 'love to say' here. Suggestion: use 'is' after 'food' to form a correct noun phrase.

× I realized Japanese food, especially sushi and salmon, wasabi like that

✓ I really like Japanese food, especially sushi, salmon, and wasabi.

Word order and verb are incorrect. 'I realized' is unnatural here; 'I really like' correctly expresses preference. 'Wasabi like that' is ungrammatical—place items in a list with commas and use 'and' before last item.

× When I eat the food, I really happy and I really love to enjoy it.

✓ When I eat that food, I am really happy and I really enjoy it.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for the adjective 'happy'. 'Love to enjoy it' is redundant; simply 'enjoy it' or 'love it' is natural. Maintain consistent tense and concise verbs.

× I don't exactly remember but maybe the sweet things.

✓ I don't exactly remember, but maybe sweets.

Awkward noun phrase 'the sweet things'. Use the plural noun 'sweets' for general preference. Keep present tense; add a comma for clarity.

× I really love sweets, so kind of ice cream candy like this.

✓ I really love sweets, like ice cream and candy.

Awkward phrase 'so kind of' and word order 'ice cream candy'. Use 'like' to introduce examples and list items with 'and'.

× I don't exactly remember that.

✓ I don't exactly remember.

Redundant pronoun 'that' is unnecessary after 'remember' in this context. Removing it produces a natural sentence.

× Maybe the exactly 1 was the sweet ones.

✓ Maybe the first one was the sweet one.

Confusing use of 'exactly 1' and mismatch between singular and plural. Use 'first one' and 'sweet one' to refer to a single item. Also 'exactly' misplacement—'maybe exactly the first one' could work but 'maybe the first one' is clearer.

× I love everything that was sweet.

✓ I love everything that is sweet.

Tense mismatch: general preferences use present tense 'is sweet' rather than past 'was sweet'. Use present to indicate ongoing preference.

× Exactly, I do really love to try new food and every time I explore many restaurants and on the Internet there are a lot of food Blogger that recommends and new food so I can go there and try another one.

✓ Exactly, I really love trying new foods, and I often explore many restaurants. On the Internet there are a lot of food bloggers who recommend new dishes, so I can go and try them.

Multiple issues: gerund vs infinitive ('love trying' is natural), plural 'foods', sentence run-on. 'Food Blogger' capitalization and singular/plural issues; use 'bloggers' and relative clause 'who recommend'. Use 'dishes' or 'foods' and pronoun 'them' to refer back. Break into clearer sentences.

× Of course I change my favorite food every day when I was young, but when I get older, umm, a little bit change with my mind so I'm be a little bit loyal person.

✓ Of course I changed my favorite food every day when I was young, but as I got older I changed my mind a little and became more loyal.

Tense consistency: events in the past require past tense 'changed' and 'got'. 'Get older' should be 'got older' here. 'Change with my mind' is incorrect phrasing; use 'changed my mind'. 'I'm be' is ungrammatical; use 'became'. Keep past tense for past habits.

× So my most favorite food is sushi.

✓ So my favorite food is sushi.

Redundant superlative 'most favorite'—'favorite' already expresses superlative. Use simple present 'is' to state a current preference.