食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer a clear, grammatical statement about your favourite food (topic sentence), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and word order) and avoid repetition. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: My favourite foods are traditional dishes from my culture. For example, I love a spicy rice stew called X that my grandmother cooks, because it uses local herbs and reminds me of family gatherings.

建议: Answer directly in past tense with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and a reason. Fix verb tense and clarity, use linking words (because, so, when). Avoid rambling and repeated words.

示例: When I was young, I preferred fast food. I often went with my father to different restaurants because I loved burgers and fries, and as a result I gained weight and felt hungry all the time.

建议: Keep your answer concise and coherent: start with a direct statement, then give specific seasonal examples linked by words like 'for example' and 'because'. Remove irrelevant remarks ("I eat drinks") and correct grammar (articles, plurals, prepositions).

示例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I usually eat lighter, quicker options like sandwiches and salads, whereas in winter I prefer hot traditional dishes such as stew because they are comforting and warming.

建议: Give a clear direct answer (No/Yes) then briefly explain using correct tense and one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers (uh) and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make the explanation coherent.

示例: No, it hasn't changed. When I was a child I liked fast food, and now at 20 I still enjoy it because I find it convenient and tasty, although I sometimes try healthier options.

× Find me my favorite food are the traditional food I love the eat traditional food, especially old food that represent my culture for example, we have a different kind of food and.

✓ My favorite foods are traditional dishes; I love eating traditional foods, especially old dishes that represent my culture. For example, we have different kinds of food.

Original sentence misuses pronouns and determiners ('Find me' is incorrect; should be 'My favorite foods'); mixes singular/plural nouns and contains extra verbs. Use 'my favorite foods' for plurality, 'are' for plural subject, 'love eating' (verb + -ing) to express enjoyment, and plural forms 'dishes'/'foods' for consistency. Also split into clear clauses and remove filler words to improve clarity.

× When I was young, I prefer fast food, I want with my father to different places for eating for eat fast food and I was very fat this way I feel I feel every day I'm I'm very hungry this.

✓ When I was young, I preferred fast food. I went with my father to different places to eat fast food, and I was very fat because I felt hungry every day.

The student used present tense 'prefer' with a past-time marker 'When I was young'; change to past tense 'preferred'. 'I want with my father' is incorrect; use past 'went'. Use infinitive 'to eat' after 'to' and correct clause order. Replace 'this way I feel I feel every day I'm I'm very hungry this' with 'because I felt hungry every day' for logical cause and correct tense.

× Yes, of course. I totally eat a different kinds of food for different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer fast food, in winter I prefer traditional food. It depends in my mood if I'm happy. Also I eat drinks.

✓ Yes, of course. I eat different kinds of food at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer fast food, and in winter I prefer traditional food. It depends on my mood. I also drink beverages.

Use 'different kinds of' (no 'a') and correct preposition 'at different times of the year'. 'Depends in my mood' should be 'depends on my mood'. 'Also I eat drinks' is incorrect collocation; use 'I also drink beverages' or 'I also have drinks'. These corrections fix quantifier and preposition misuse and improve word choice.

× No, uh, when I was a child, I like, uh, fast food. And now I'm 20 years old, I still like fast food and I eat them everywhere and every time I think that my favorite food didn't change since, uh, I was child.

✓ No. When I was a child, I liked fast food. Now I'm 20 years old; I still like fast food and I eat it everywhere and at any time. I think that my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child.

Use past tense 'liked' for childhood preference. Use 'it' for 'fast food' as an uncountable noun, not 'them'. Use present perfect 'hasn't changed' to describe a change from past to present. Add article 'a' in 'since I was a child'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.