食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "My favourite food is Vietnamese cuisine") then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Correct key vocabulary (e.g. "flavors," "growing up"). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like "my always too goldish a geek."

示例: My favourite food is Vietnamese cuisine because I grew up eating it and its dishes are very fresh and full of flavor. In addition, I also enjoy Korean food since some dishes, such as bibimbap, share similar fresh and spicy notes with Vietnamese cuisine.

建议: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details and linking words. Use correct tense and nouns ("I liked soups," "my favourite dish was noodles"). Avoid vague phrasing like "when I don't have food." Mention times or reasons to be specific.

示例: When I was young, I liked eating soups and noodles because they were warm and comforting in winter. In fact, noodles were my favourite and I could eat them every day. However, as an adult I eat them less often because I know they are not very healthy, so now I only have them occasionally.

建议: Provide a concise topic sentence and two clear contrasting examples with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary ("keep me warm," "refreshing dishes"). Avoid confusing choices ("Korean curry noodles" may not be clearly cold). Be specific about dishes and reasons.

示例: Yes, I do. In winter I usually eat hot soups and stews because they keep me warm and comforting. In summer I prefer cold or light dishes, such as cold noodle salads or fresh Vietnamese spring rolls, because they feel refreshing and help me stay cool.

建议: Answer directly and clearly: state whether it has changed, then give specific reasons and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid hesitations and unclear words. Replace vague or incorrect phrases ("it's not unhealthy day") with clear explanations about health concerns and dietary changes.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I ate a lot of noodles because they tasted great, but now I avoid them because they are oily and can affect my health and skin. Therefore I choose healthier options like grilled fish, vegetables and salads more often.

× I've been growing up eating Vietnamese food every single day because it very fresh and rich in favours.

✓ I grew up eating Vietnamese food every single day because it was very fresh and rich in flavours.

Using 'I've been growing up' with present perfect progressive is awkward here; simple past 'I grew up' fits completed period. Missing 'was' (linking verb) causes sentence fragment; 'favours' is misspelled and should be 'flavours'. Use past tense to match 'grew up' and describe past habitual action.

× On top of that, I also like Korean cuisine because it's very refreshing and has shared a similar taste with Vietnamese flavours.

✓ On top of that, I also like Korean cuisine because it's very refreshing and shares a similar taste with Vietnamese flavours.

'Has shared' is present perfect passive/active and is incorrect here; present simple 'shares' correctly describes a general, current characteristic. Keep tense consistent and use active verb form.

× So my fav. My always too goldish a geek bibimbap or uh sweet and sour.

✓ My favourites are bibimbap, which is often a bit greasy, and sweet and sour dishes.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words ('goldish a geek'). Reconstruct into a grammatical list and replace unclear adjectives with 'greasy' to convey intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'favourites are'.

× Well when I was younger I like shops because they kept me warm during winter.

✓ Well, when I was younger I liked them because they kept me warm during winter.

Mixing past 'was' with present 'like' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'was younger' and 'kept'. Also 'shops' likely refers to 'shops' or 'stalls'; use pronoun 'them' if referring to previously mentioned items.

× My favorite dish what Always noodle.

✓ My favorite dish was always noodles.

'What Always' is incorrect word order and capitalization. Use past tense 'was always' and plural 'noodles' for general dish reference.

× I could eat them every single day without getting tired of them.

✓ I could eat them every single day without getting tired of them.

This sentence is correct; pronoun usage is appropriate and no grammatical correction is needed.

× But now that being said, when I become an adult, I know it's not an healthy dish so I avoid having it too often.

✓ But now that I am an adult, I know it's not a healthy dish, so I avoid having it too often.

'When I become an adult' mixes future with present context; use present 'I am an adult'. 'That being said' should be 'now that'. Use 'a healthy' -> 'a' before consonant sound is fine but 'a healthy' is correct; add commas for clarity.

× But I still have it occasionally when I don't have food.

✓ But I still have it occasionally when I don't have other food available.

'When I don't have food' is awkward and vague. Clarify with 'other food available' to express occasional fallback choice.

× Yes, I eat different foods at different time of the year.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Use plural 'times' because 'different times of the year' refers to multiple occasions; present simple 'eat' is correct for habitual actions.

× In winter I like to have soup because it keep me warm.

✓ In winter I like to have soup because it keeps me warm.

Subject-verb agreement: 'soup' (third person singular) requires 'keeps' not 'keep'.

× Why In summer I prefer cold refreshing dish such that Korean Curry noodles because they help me stay cool in the heat.

✓ In summer I prefer cold, refreshing dishes such as Korean cold noodles because they help me stay cool in the heat.

Remove stray 'Why' and fix word order. Use plural 'dishes' and phrase 'such as' to give example. 'Korean Curry noodles' seems incorrect; likely 'Korean cold noodles' or 'naengmyeon'. Ensure commas and parallel structure.

× When I was a child, I tend to eat a lot of noodles because it's just very yummy and delicious to me back then.

✓ When I was a child, I tended to eat a lot of noodles because they were very yummy and delicious to me back then.

Mixing past 'was' with present 'tend' is incorrect; use past 'tended'. Use plural 'they were' to agree with 'noodles' and past tense 'were' to match timeframe.

× But when I become an adult, I know it's not unhealthy day.

✓ But when I became an adult, I realized it's unhealthy.

Use past 'became' to mark transition and 'realized' instead of 'know' for past perspective. 'It's not unhealthy day' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'it's unhealthy'.

× So and it would uh, lead to, uh, ****** and cause acne on my skin.

✓ So it could lead to weight gain and cause acne on my skin.

Fill in unclear '******' with likely 'weight gain'. Remove filler 'uh' and use 'could' to indicate possibility. Ensure clear, concise phrasing.

× So and so I try not to irritate too many. Often I tend to eat more healthier food.

✓ So I try not to eat it too often. Often I tend to eat healthier food.

'Try not to irritate too many' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'eat it too often'. 'More healthier' is a double comparative; use 'healthier' alone. Reorder for clarity and correct adverb placement.