食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然和简洁，注意时态和主谓一致，减少冗余。开头直接给出主题句，随后用一到两句具体原因或例子支持，使用连接词使逻辑更清楚。例如改正人称与时态错误（we wanted → we want/ we want to celebrate; when we feeling down → when we feel down）。

示例: My favourite food is cheesecake. I have a sweet tooth, and cheesecake is my top choice because it’s creamy and comforting. Whenever we celebrate birthdays or special occasions, we often buy a cheesecake to make everyone happy.

建议: 注意时态一致与句子结构，避免语法错误和词汇使用不当（drunk foods→junk food；don't want me eat→didn't want me to eat）。开头先给出主题句，再用一到两句具体细节支持，例如描述饺子的味道或做法，使用连接词如 because 或 so 来衔接。

示例: When I was a child, I didn’t eat much fast food because my parents preferred home-cooked meals. I often had lunch and dinner at my grandparents’ house, and my favourite dish was my grandma’s dumplings because they were fresh and full of flavour.

建议: 回答要更加准确和有条理，避免停顿词（uh, well）和不恰当的词语（spring roll ≠ fried dumplings）。先给出主题句说明节日饮食变化，再具体描述食物的特点和与家庭分享的情景，使用连接词例如 for example 或 so。

示例: Yes. For example, during Chinese New Year my family eats special dishes. My grandmother makes spring rolls, which are fried and very crispy, and we share them with all the family members as part of the celebration.

建议: 要更清晰地表达变化的原因与未来的预测，注意语法（I changed → it has changed / my tastes have changed；before my getting called getting college → before I went to college），减少重复（I I）。先给出直接回答，然后用一到两句解释原因并给出预测，使用连接词 like because / however。

示例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. Before I went to college I mostly ate home-cooked meals, but now I often choose junk food because it’s convenient. However, I think I will return to healthier homemade food as I get older.

× My favorite food is cheesecake. I have a sweet tooth so cheesecake is definitely my top one. And every time when we wanted to celebrate birthday or something else, we will eat cheesecake 'cause it can make us happy and cheer up when we feeling down.

✓ My favorite food is cheesecake. I have a sweet tooth, so cheesecake is definitely my top choice. Whenever we want to celebrate a birthday or something else, we eat cheesecake because it makes us happy and cheers us up when we feel down.

句子中存在时态与人称的一致性问题： - “every time when we wanted to celebrate” 用过去式“wanted”与上下文一般现在时不一致，应用一般现在时“want”或“whenever we want”。 - “we will eat” 在习惯性动作中更常用一般现在时“we eat”。 - “'cause it can make us happy and cheer up when we feeling down.” 中“cheer up”需要主语“cheers us up”，并且“we feeling down”缺少动词“are”。另外缩略语和口语“'cause”在书面表达中应使用“because”。 改进建议：把描述日常或习惯性行为的动词都用一般现在时，注意主谓一致并补全被省略的主语或助动词。简化并使用正式连接词（例如because）。

× When I was a kid my parents don't want me eat outside and the fast foods and drunk foods so I usually have dinner and lunch in my grandparents home.

✓ When I was a kid my parents didn't want me to eat outside or eat fast food and junk food, so I usually had dinner and lunch at my grandparents' home.

问题在代词与动词形式以及否定时态的使用： - “don't want” 与过去时间状语“when I was a kid”冲突，需用过去式“didn't want”。 - “don't want me eat” 缺少不定式标记“to”，应为“didn't want me to eat”。 - “the fast foods and drunk foods” 中“drunk foods”错误，应该是“junk food”（垃圾食品）。“fast foods” 在不可数环境下用“fast food”。 - “grandparents home” 缺少所有格撇号，应为“grandparents' home”。 改进建议：注意时态与时间状语一致，使用不定式结构“want somebody to do something”，并纠正词汇（junk food）和所有格写法。

× So my favorite food is my grandma made dumpling.

✓ So my favorite food is the dumplings my grandma made.

句子中成分顺序和名词单复数问题： - “my grandma made dumpling” 语序不自然，应将定语从句或后置定语置于名词之后：“the dumplings my grandma made”。 - “dumpling” 在此处指多次/一般情况应使用复数“dumplings”。 改进建议：把修饰性短语放在名词后面（或用定语从句），并注意可数名词单复数形式。

× Yes, uh, well, we're in Chinese New Year. My grandma will make spring roll. It's a fried dumplings and uh, to share to every family members. It's very delicious, crispy and yummy.

✓ Yes, uh, well, it's Chinese New Year. My grandma will make spring rolls. They're fried dumplings to share with every family member. They're very delicious, crispy and tasty.

多处用法不当： - “we're in Chinese New Year” 不自然，应说“it's Chinese New Year”。 - “My grandma will make spring roll.” 应使用复数“spring rolls”。 - “It's a fried dumplings” 主谓和单复数不一致，且不需要不定冠词，改为“They're fried dumplings”。 - “to share to every family members” 介词不当且复数不一致，应为“to share with every family member”或“to share with all family members”。 改进建议：注意固定表达（it's Chinese New Year），名词单复数一致，正确使用介词“share with”。

× Yes, I I changed a lot 'cause I never had junk foods before my getting called getting college. So nowadays I prefer junk food not the healthy homemade foods. But when I get in older I think I would change back.

✓ Yes, I changed a lot because I never had junk food before I went to college. Nowadays I prefer junk food to healthy homemade food. But as I get older I think I will change back.

多个时态与搭配错误： - “never had junk foods before my getting called getting college” 结构混乱，应为“never had junk food before I went to college”。 - “junk foods” 在一般语境用不可数“junk food”。 - “prefer junk food not the healthy homemade foods” 表达不正确，常用结构是“prefer A to B”，并且“homemade food”为不可数或广义名词。改为“prefer junk food to healthy homemade food”。 - “when I get in older” 错误用法，应为“As I get older”或“When I get older”。 - “I think I would change back” 与上下文更自然使用将来时“I think I will change back”。 改进建议：理清时间顺序使用正确的过去时（went to college），注意不可数名词的使用和比较结构“prefer A to B”，并用正确的将来表达。