食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and vary sentence openings; add one specific detail about why sashimi appeals (texture, flavor) and use a linking word for coherence. Avoid repeating 'I like'.

示例: My favourite food at the moment is sashimi because it has a clean, delicate flavor and a silky texture. For example, I enjoy it with a small dab of wasabi and dark soy sauce, which enhances the taste without overpowering the freshness.

建议: Use past tense consistently and reduce redundancy; link past preference to present change with a clear reason. Give one specific example of a favorite childhood treat.

示例: When I was younger I usually preferred sweets, especially milk tea and frappés. However, now I try to control my sugar intake because I'm more health-conscious, so I choose healthier snacks instead.

建议: Avoid unclear phrases like 'what I'm giving' and 'the likes'; use precise language and one linking word to organize seasons. Provide a specific example of seasonal produce or a soup variety.

示例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I prefer tropical fruits like mangoes, while in the rainy season I often choose hot soups such as chicken noodle soup to stay warm.

建议: Combine sentences to show a clear timeline and use consistent tense. Give a brief reason for each shift (taste development, lifestyle) and avoid casual phrasing like 'go for'.

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed over time: as a child I loved candies and other sweets; in my teens I preferred coffee-based drinks and milk tea; now I enjoy Japanese cuisine because I appreciate subtler flavours and fresher ingredients.

× When I was younger I usually go for sweets, I tend to order more milk tea, frap and other desserts.

✓ When I was younger I usually went for sweets; I tended to order more milk tea, frappes and other desserts.

Tense inconsistency: the clause 'When I was younger' sets past time, so verbs should be past tense. Change 'go' to 'went' and 'tend' to 'tended'. Also 'frap' is informal/unclear; use 'frappes'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Maintain past tense for all actions referring to that period and use clearer noun forms.

× But right now since I'm getting older, I try to control the sugar intake and be more mindful of my food choices.

✓ But right now, since I'm getting older, I try to control my sugar intake and be more mindful of my food choices.

Article/pronoun and phrasing: 'the sugar intake' is unnatural here; use 'my sugar intake'. The verbs 'try' and 'be' are fine in present tense because the sentence refers to the present. Add a comma after 'But right now' for clarity. Suggestion: Use possessive with 'intake' (my) and keep present tense for current habits.

× Yes I do, it depends on what I'm giving at the moment.

✓ Yes I do; it depends on what I'm having at the moment.

Verb choice: 'giving' is incorrect in this context. The speaker means what they are eating or having, so use 'having'. Also punctuation: use a semicolon or separate sentences to join related clauses. Suggestion: Use verbs appropriate to eating context (have, eat, choose).

× Or whatever is in season.

✓ Or whatever is in season.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable and requires no change; however, as a standalone reply it is a fragment. In conversational context it is fine. No preposition error present. Suggestion: Keep as is or combine with previous sentence for formality.

× For example during summer I usually go for tropical fruits and during rainy season I usually go for soups, warm food and the likes.

✓ For example, during the summer I usually choose tropical fruits, and during the rainy season I usually choose soups, warm foods and the like.

Articles and number: add 'the' before seasons ('the summer', 'the rainy season') for specificity. 'Go for' is informal; 'choose' fits better. 'Warm food' should be plural 'warm foods' or 'warm dishes'. 'the likes' is incorrect; use 'the like' or 'the likes of that' but 'the like' is preferable. Suggestion: Use definite articles with seasons when referring to specific seasonal patterns and correct idiom to 'the like'.

× Of course it did.

✓ Of course it did.

This short reply is grammatically correct as a response to 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?'. No change needed. Suggestion: No action required.

× When I was a child I used to like candies, anything sweet.

✓ When I was a child I used to like candies and anything sweet.

Punctuation/coordination: use a conjunction to join related ideas. 'Used to like' correctly indicates a past habit. 'Candies' is acceptable; in some varieties 'sweets' is preferred. Suggestion: Connect clauses for smoother flow.

× When I was a teenager or during in high school I usually go for coffee based or milk tea drinks, but now that I'm older I tend to go with Japanese cuisine.

✓ When I was a teenager, or in high school, I usually went for coffee-based or milk tea drinks, but now that I'm older I tend to choose Japanese cuisine.

Tense consistency: the time frame 'When I was a teenager' is past, so 'go' should be 'went'. Also remove extra 'during' before 'in high school'. Use hyphen for 'coffee-based' as a compound adjective. 'Go with' is acceptable but 'choose' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep past tense for past periods, fix redundant preposition, and use compound adjective punctuation.