食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, use correct word choice and sentence structure, and provide specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence (name the dish), then add 1–2 specific supporting details (ingredients, taste, cultural importance) using linking words. Avoid redundancy and large run-on sentences.

示例: My favourite food is manta, a traditional dish from my country. It’s like a small pasta parcel filled with minced meat and usually served with butter and tomato sauce, which gives it a rich, savory taste. In addition, manta is important culturally because families often make it together for celebrations.

建议: Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Mention a brief reason or example about vegetables to make the response specific.

示例: My tastes haven't changed much: I liked manta as a child and I still do. However, I have always disliked green vegetables, such as spinach and broccoli, so my parents often served them in different ways to make me eat a little.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence then provide a concrete example. Use correct vocabulary for seasons and specific foods, and avoid vague placeholders. Link ideas with words like "for example" or "because."

示例: Yes, I do. Some vegetables and fruits are seasonal, so I only eat them at certain times of the year. For example, fresh strawberries are usually available in summer, so I enjoy them then rather than in winter.

建议: Give a brief, clear answer and a specific supporting reason or prediction. Correct future-tense phrasing and avoid unnecessary repetition. One or two sentences are enough.

示例: No, my favourite food has not changed; I loved manta at six and I still love it now. I think I will still enjoy it in the future because it reminds me of family gatherings.

× My favorite food is Mantle due to the fact that it is the combination of like a pasta and inside of a pasta there is a small meatball and on the top floor you need to pour yours and butter with the tomato sauce and it stays awesome and it is the one of the most important traditional food in our country.

✓ My favorite food is manta because it is like a type of pasta with a small meatball inside, topped with yogurt and butter and tomato sauce; it tastes great and is one of the most important traditional foods in our country.

The original sentence uses awkward phrasing and incorrect adjective/adverb choices ('the combination of like a pasta', 'it stays awesome'). Replace 'due to the fact that' with 'because' for conciseness, use 'like a type of pasta' for clear description, change 'on the top floor you need to pour yours and butter' to 'topped with yogurt and butter', and 'it stays awesome' to 'it tastes great'. Also correct 'the one of the most important traditional food' to 'one of the most important traditional foods' to match plural usage.

× I think my eating habit hasn't changed because when I was young also my favorite food was manta and when I was child I don't.

✓ I think my eating habits haven't changed because when I was young my favorite food was manta, and when I was a child I didn't.

Mixed tenses and missing articles cause confusion. Use present perfect 'haven't changed' for an action continuing to now, past simple 'was' for a past state. 'Eating habit' should be plural 'eating habits'. Add the article 'a' before 'child'. Keep 'didn't' but it needs an object (see next suggestion).

× I think my eating habit hasn't changed because when I was young also my favorite food was manta and when I was child I don't.

✓ I think my eating habits haven't changed because when I was young my favorite food was manta, and when I was a child I didn't like green vegetables.

The original sentence ends with 'I don't' which is incomplete and mixes present and past. Replace with past 'I didn't like green vegetables' to match 'when I was a child'. Also use plural 'eating habits' and include the article 'a child'.

× I didn't like eating green vegetables and now still I don't like eating green vegetable, green vegetables.

✓ I didn't like eating green vegetables, and even now I still don't like eating green vegetables.

Inconsistent singular/plural: use 'green vegetables' (plural) consistently. 'Now still I don't' is unnatural word order; use 'even now I still don't' or 'I still don't'.

× Yes, of course, because some vegetables cannot be found in every month.

✓ Yes, of course, because some vegetables cannot be found in every month.

Sentence is grammatical but slightly unnatural: 'in every month' is acceptable but more natural would be 'in every month of the year' or 'all year round'. This is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar error.

× For example, if you want to eat, let's assume view, you cannot find will in every time of the year, so you need to eat this food when it is suitable.

✓ For example, if you want to eat, say, a certain vegetable, you cannot find it at every time of the year, so you need to eat that food when it is in season.

The original sentence has several structure and word choice problems: 'let's assume view' and 'you cannot find will' are unclear. Replace with 'say, a certain vegetable' and use 'it' as the pronoun for the vegetable. Change 'in every time of the year' to 'at every time of the year' or better 'all year round', and 'when it is suitable' to 'when it is in season' for natural phrasing.

× No, my favorite food hasn't changed for a long time as I remember when I was six years old, my favorite food was manta and still my favorite food is manta.

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed for a long time. As I remember, when I was six years old my favorite food was manta, and it still is manta.

Run-on sentence with awkward tense mixing. Split into two sentences for clarity. 'Hasn't changed for a long time' (present perfect) is fine; use past 'was' for age six and present 'it still is' or 'it still is manta' for current state. Add commas for clarity.

× So I am quite consistent in this topic and my favorite food will be Mountain when I will be in 30 years.

✓ So I am quite consistent on this topic, and my favorite food will still be manta when I am 30 years old.

Incorrect future tense formation: English does not use 'will' twice. Use 'will still be' for future prediction and 'when I am 30 years old' (not 'when I will be in 30 years'). Also 'in this topic' is unnatural; use 'on this topic'. 'Mountain' appears to be a mistranscription of 'manta'; use consistent food name 'manta'.