食物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, grammatical, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, and avoid unclear phrases like “very deep motivated.” Add one specific reason and one brief detail using a linking word.

示例: My favourite food is Samya ramen. I often eat it when I want comfort because the hot broth and chewy noodles are soothing. For example, after a long, stressful day at work, a bowl of Samya ramen makes me feel relaxed and warm.

建议: Use correct past tense and clearer vocabulary. Give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like “bigger” or “chew me out.”

示例: When I was young, I liked sweet baked goods such as banana bread and cookies. They were moist and sweet, and whenever I felt sad my mother would give me a slice of banana bread to cheer me up.

建议: Good structure and clear contrast. Improve grammar and remove repetition. Use linking words (for example, while) and be careful with verb forms and articles. Keep it to two to three sentences with specific examples.

示例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in the rainy season I prefer hot soups and porridge to keep warm, while in summer I often drink lemonade and eat cold salads to stay refreshed.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense and pronouns. Start with a clear topic sentence saying yes or no, then briefly explain with specific reasons and linking words (because, now, when). Avoid unrelated words like “shy” and correct forms like “comfort me” to “comforts me.”

示例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I loved sweet treats like banana bread because my mother baked them on weekends, but now I prefer spicy dishes because the strong flavours are more satisfying and comforting to me.

× My favorite food is Samya ramen. It was my comfort food if I feel very deep motivated on that day.

✓ My favorite food is Samya ramen. It is my comfort food when I feel very low or unmotivated.

The second sentence uses past tense 'was' and an incorrect conditional 'if I feel very deep motivated'. The context (general preference) requires present tense 'is' and a correct expression 'when I feel very low or unmotivated'. Use 'when' for habitual or typical situations and choose appropriate adjective 'low' or 'unmotivated' instead of 'deep motivated'.

× When I was young, I like to eat bigger such as banana brick and cookies.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat bigger treats such as banana bread and cookies.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present tense 'like'. Use past tense 'liked'. 'Bigger' is incorrect noun; use 'bigger treats' or simply 'treats'. 'Banana brick' is likely 'banana bread'.

× It is very sweet and moist when I eat it uh, it's always chew me out and umm make my mood come back.

✓ It was very sweet and moist when I ate it; it always cheered me up and made my mood better.

Tense should match past context ('was', 'ate'). 'Chew me out' is incorrect meaning; the correct phrase is 'cheered me up'. Also 'make my mood come back' is unidiomatic; use 'made my mood better'. Ensure verb forms agree with past tense: 'cheered' and 'made'.

× My mother always pick it for me.

✓ My mother always picked it for me.

The time frame is past, so the verb should be past tense 'picked' not present 'pick'. This fixes subject-verb agreement in past narrative context.

× Yes, I do eat different food depending on season.

✓ Yes, I do eat different foods depending on the season.

Use plural 'foods' when referring to different kinds of food. Add the article 'the' before 'season' when speaking about a specific recurring period: 'the season' or better 'the season' -> 'the season' or 'the seasons'.

× For example, during during rainy season I prefer to eat soup and porridge to make me stay warm, while during summer I would love to eat to drink lemonade to keep refreshing.

✓ For example, during the rainy season I prefer to eat soup and porridge to keep warm, while in summer I like to drink lemonade to stay refreshed.

Remove duplicate 'during'. Add article 'the rainy season'. Change 'to make me stay warm' to idiomatic 'to keep warm'. 'During summer' is acceptable but 'in summer' is more natural. 'I would love to eat to drink lemonade' is incorrect; use 'I like to drink lemonade to stay refreshed'. Use consistent verb forms.

× Yes, if it When I was shy I loved to eat something sweet such as banana bread and cookies because my mother used to bake for me in the weekend.

✓ When I was shy, I loved to eat sweet things such as banana bread and cookies because my mother used to bake for me on weekends.

Remove stray 'Yes, if it'. Use 'When I was shy' as the time clause and plural 'sweet things' or 'something sweet' with consistent structure. Use 'on weekends' rather than 'in the weekend' for habitual past actions. 'Used to bake' is correct for past habitual actions.

× Why when I'm an adult I love to eat something spicy because it comfort me.

✓ Now that I'm an adult, I love to eat spicy food because it comforts me.

Change 'Why when I'm an adult' to 'Now that I'm an adult' for correct transition. Use 'spicy food' instead of 'something spicy' for clarity. Verb 'comfort' must be third-person singular 'comforts' to agree with singular subject 'it'.