走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 発音の間やフィラー（uhなど）が多く、文の構造も不完全です。まずはフィラーを減らし、主語＋述語の明確な文を作りましょう。また理由を簡潔に付け加え、文を最大5文以内に収めて自然に話す練習をしてください。具体的には“usually I walk every evening because I walk my dog; my mother asked me to”のように一文で述べ、その後必要なら頻度や所要時間を短く補足してください。

示例: Yes, I usually walk every evening because I take my dog out. My mother asked me to do it, and it takes about 20 minutes each time.

建议: 回答は直接的で内容もあるが、文法（時制、一致）、流暢さ、つなぎ表現に改善の余地があります。フィラーを減らし、文をつなぐ接続語（for example, so, and）を自然に使い、時間表現は正確に述べましょう。文は短くても明確に。

示例: Not really. When I was a child I preferred playing sports with my friends in the park, so we met twice a week and played for about two hours each time.

建议: 話の繰り返しや不要な自己修正が多く、語彙の誤用（working vs walking、them themselves)があります。まず質問に対して一つの明確な理由を述べ、別の理由を接続詞で加える形にしてください。語法に注意し、代名詞の使い方を整理しましょう。

示例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and clear their minds. In addition, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, which makes people feel refreshed.

建议: 良い発想だが最後が切れており、文が未完成です。条件文と理由を明確に結びつけ、結論で締める練習をしてください。また“only ever been there by car”の表現は自然だが、理由の後に結果や感想を付け加えると効果的です。

示例: If I had the chance, I would walk from my house to Tokyo Station because I have only ever been there by car, and walking would let me explore the shops and small streets along the way.

建议: 文法と語彙の誤り（have been to→went to or I have been going to; a lot of natures→a lot of nature/trees）があります。現在完了の使い方を状況に応じて整え、名詞の単複や不可算名詞に注意しましょう。短く自然な表現で理由を述べると良いです。

示例: Recently I went to the park near my house. There is a lot of nature there, so I felt relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, I usually uh, I walk uh, every evening, uh, because I have to walk with dog every day. Uh, it the order from my mother.

✓ Yes, I usually walk every evening because I have to walk the dog every day. It is the order from my mother.

問題点: 'walk uh, every evening' の重複と冗長表現、'walk with dog' は冠詞が欠けており正しくは 'walk the dog' または 'walk with the dog'、'Uh, it the order' は主語と動詞が欠落している。改善方法: 不要な話し言葉の 'uh' を省き、冠詞を入れ、be動詞を補う。より自然な表現は 'I usually walk every evening because I have to walk the dog every day. It is the order from my mother.' Suggestion: 練習時は不要なフィラーを減らし、主語とbe動詞の存在を確認すること。

× Not really. Uh, when I was a child I preferred playing sports with my friends in parks, so we met uh twice a week. Then uh spend around 2 hours.

✓ Not really. When I was a child, I preferred playing sports with my friends in parks, so we met twice a week. Then we spent around two hours.

問題点: 'Then uh spend' は時制が一致しておらず過去形にする必要がある。また '2' は通常文章では綴りで 'two' とする。改善方法: 'spend' を過去形 'spent' に変え、主語 'we' を補う。

× I think people like working in parks because they, uh, because it's helps them relax and clear their minds and uh, I think, uh, I probably think they want to refresh them themselves.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because it helps them relax and clear their minds, and I think they want to refresh themselves.

問題点: 'working in parks' は意味が不適切で 'walking' または 'being' が適切、'it's helps' は主語と動詞の一致エラー（'it helps' が正しい）、'refresh them themselves' は代名詞の重複誤り。改善方法: 動詞を 'walking' に変え、'it helps' とし、目的語は 'themselves' のみを使用する。

× If I had a chance I would walk from my house to the Tokyo station because I have only ever been there by car, so walking would let me notice the shops. I always.

✓ If I had the chance, I would walk from my house to Tokyo Station because I have only ever been there by car, so walking would let me notice the shops.

問題点: 'a chance' は文脈では 'the chance' が自然、'the Tokyo station' は固有名詞の扱いで 'Tokyo Station' が一般的、末尾の 'I always.' は断片で意味が不明のため削除。改善方法: 冗長な短い断片を削除して文を完結させる。

× Uh, recently I have been to the park, uh, near my house. Uh, there are a lot of natures so I could feel relaxed and refreshed.

✓ Recently I went to the park near my house. There is a lot of nature, so I felt relaxed and refreshed.

問題点: 'have been to the park' は 'recently' と合わせて可能だが文脈で単純過去 'went' の方が自然、'a lot of natures' は不可算名詞 'nature' を複数形にしている誤り、'could feel' は過去の経験の記述には 'felt' が適切。改善方法: 名詞の可算/不可算を確認し、時制を一貫させる。