走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear, concise topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid confusing words (e.g. 'work' instead of 'walk') and redundant fillers. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words and correct grammar (e.g. 'because' + clause). Pay attention to word order and verb forms.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk along the river because it helps me stay healthy and makes me feel relaxed after a busy day.

建议: Start with a direct answer, use correct past tense and article usage ('when I was a child'). Give specific examples and complete sentences; avoid trailing off. Use a linking phrase for the example.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked to nearby places. For example, I walked to the park near my home and sometimes to my friend's house because our family didn't have a car.

建议: Answer directly and keep sentences concise. Use accurate vocabulary ('nature' not 'natures') and linking words to connect ideas. Provide two clear reasons and a short explanation for each.

示例: I think people like to walk in parks because they can enjoy nature, such as trees and flowers, which is relaxing. Also, parks offer open space and fresh air, so walking there feels peaceful and healthy.

建议: Give a specific place and a clear reason. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts. Use conditional structure correctly ('If I had the chance, I would...') and explain why it appeals to you with concrete details.

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a coastal trail. I would enjoy the sea views and fresh air, and reaching a scenic viewpoint would make me feel proud and emotionally moved.

建议: Use past tense correctly and avoid unclear pronouns. Give a concise answer with one or two specific details about the walk and what you did. Finish sentences completely and use linking words ('and', 'so').

示例: Lately I went to the park near my house and had a picnic with my friends. We played games and enjoyed the weather, so it was a very relaxing and enjoyable afternoon.

× Yes, I work a lot every day because I think it's it helps me more healthy and walking along the river makes me feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot every day because I think it helps me be healthier, and walking along the river makes me feel relaxed.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect pronoun and verb forms: 'it's it helps me more healthy' is unclear. Use 'it helps me be healthier' to express improvement in health. Also 'work a lot' contradicts the question about walking, so changed to 'walk a lot' to match context. Use 'healthier' (adjective comparative) after 'be'. Use a comma and 'and' to join independent clauses correctly.

× Yes, I often walked a lot when I was child to go somewhere.

✓ Yes, I often walked a lot when I was a child to go somewhere.

Missing article before 'child' — 'a child' is required. Past tense 'walked' is correct but the phrase 'walked a lot' is redundant; kept it to preserve meaning. Ensure proper article use with singular countable nouns.

× For example, I walked to the park near my home and also I walked to some places that.

✓ For example, I walked to the park near my home and I also walked to other nearby places.

The original ends with the incomplete phrase 'places that' and has awkward word order. Replace with 'other nearby places' for completeness and move 'also' to a more natural position: 'I also walked'. Maintain past tense.

× From my perspective, I think there are many natures such as flowers and trees and parks and people enjoy watching them, so they like to walk in park I think.

✓ From my perspective, I think there is a lot of nature, such as flowers and trees, in parks, and people enjoy watching them, so they like to walk in parks.

Use 'there is' for uncountable 'nature' (or 'a lot of nature'). 'Parks' is plural when speaking generally. 'Walk in park' needs the article or plural: 'walk in parks'. Commas improve clause separation and readability. 'People enjoy watching them' refers to nature; ensure correct placement of phrases.

× I want to go to beautiful places by walk for a long distance, because when I reached that place I I will I will moved very much and I think.

✓ I would like to walk to beautiful places over long distances, because when I reach those places I will be very moved.

The sentence had mixed and incorrect future/past forms and repetitions. Use 'would like' for a hypothetical preference. 'Walk to' is more natural than 'by walk'. Use 'over long distances' to express extent. For future hypothetical, use present simple 'reach' in the subordinate clause and 'will be' + adjective 'very moved' for the future emotional reaction. Remove duplicate words and unnecessary 'I think'.

× I went to the park near my house lately and I did picnic in the park with my friends.

✓ I went to the park near my house recently and had a picnic there with my friends.

Use 'recently' instead of 'lately' for completed past actions, though both are possible; 'had a picnic' is the correct collocation rather than 'did picnic'. 'There' avoids repeating 'in the park'. Maintain past simple tense 'went' and 'had' for completed actions.

× He was very exciting and it's so good time for me after my.

✓ We were very excited, and it was a very good time for me afterwards.

'Exciting' describes something that excites others; to describe feelings use 'excited'. Subject mismatch ('He' unclear) changed to 'We' assuming friends included; if speaker meant friend, use 'He was very excited'. 'It's so good time for me after my' is incomplete and ungrammatical; use 'it was a very good time for me afterwards' to indicate the experience that followed. Ensure tense consistency (past simple).