走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article usage, and avoid redundancy (e.g., “household works” → “household chores”).

示例: Not really. I don’t have much free time because I’m studying and I also do household chores, so I usually only manage to walk for about half an hour when I have time.

建议: Use correct past tenses and avoid repetition. Give a brief topic sentence, then add one specific detail (frequency, who, reason) with linking words. Make phrasing natural (e.g., “go for a walk” not “go for walking”).

示例: Yes, definitely. I used to walk every evening with my grandparents for about an hour, and we enjoyed talking and looking at the sunset.

建议: Answer directly and clearly, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Use correct collocations and grammar (e.g., “parks” plural, “cover a large space” → “have plenty of space”). Avoid repeating the word “park.”

示例: People often prefer walking in parks because they have plenty of space and fresh air, and the green surroundings make the walk more relaxing.

建议: Use the conditional properly and be concise. Start with the conditional topic sentence, then give two specific details (location, features) using linking words. Correct collocations and grammar (e.g., “if I had the chance,” “outside my town,” “the environment is peaceful”).

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Sabarimala Garden outside my town, because it’s very beautiful and busy with people exercising, and the peaceful atmosphere would help me relax.

建议: Use simple past for a past event and avoid irrelevant brand names (unless necessary). Give a clear past answer followed by one or two specific details with linking words. Improve sentence structure and articles (e.g., “on the terrace,” “helps me relax”).

示例: Lately, after finishing my household chores in the evening, I walked on the terrace because it helps me relax; I enjoy watching the stars and the night sky while I walk.

× No I'm not walking a lot and I have to do my study and I have household works so I have not enough time to walk but in between if I have a time I walk for 1/2 an hour.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot because I have to study and do household chores, so I don't have enough time to walk; but if I have time, I walk for half an hour.

Errors: incorrect progressive 'I'm not walking' for habitual action, wrong verb forms 'have to do my study', plural/word choice 'household works', wrong negation 'I have not enough time', awkward phrase 'in between if I have a time'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits (I don't walk), use 'study' without 'do' or say 'study' as a verb, use 'household chores' for tasks, use proper negation 'I don't have enough time', and simplify conditional 'if I have time'.

× Yes, definitely. When I was a child I went for walking daily with my grandparents in the evening time.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child I went for walks daily with my grandparents in the evenings.

Errors: 'went for walking' is unidiomatic; use 'went for walks' or 'went walking'. 'In the evening time' should be 'in the evenings' for habitual past. Suggestion: Use 'went for walks' or 'went walking' and pluralize time phrase for repeated actions in the past.

× My grandparents always go for walk in the evening time for an hour so.

✓ My grandparents always went for a walk in the evening for an hour.

Errors: Tense mismatch: speaker refers to past ('When I was a child') so use past tense 'went'. 'Go for walk' needs article 'a walk'. 'Evening time' should be 'in the evening'. Remove trailing 'so'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct article.

× Usually people prefer to walk in park and they can covered large space for walking and they can get fresh air in the park.

✓ Usually people prefer to walk in parks because they can cover a large area for walking and get fresh air there.

Errors: 'walk in park' needs plural or article 'in parks' or 'in the park'. 'can covered' wrong verb form; should be 'can cover'. 'large space' better as 'a large area'. Repetition of 'in the park' replaced with 'there'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and natural nouns (area) and appropriate prepositions.

× If I have chance to walk, I want to go in the garden out of my town.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would like to go to a garden outside my town.

Errors: Conditional type wrong: hypothetical uses past subjunctive 'had' and modal 'would like'. 'have chance' needs article 'the chance'. 'go in the garden out of my town' incorrect prepositions; use 'go to a garden outside my town'. Suggestion: Use correct conditional structure for unreal situations and correct prepositions.

× The name of the garden is Sabarimala Garden, which is very beautiful and most of the people are coming there for walking and exercises.

✓ The garden is called Sabarimala Garden; it is very beautiful and many people go there to walk and exercise.

Errors: 'most of the people are coming there' unnatural tense and article; use 'many people go there'. 'for walking and exercises' should be 'to walk and exercise'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and correct verb forms 'go' and infinitives 'to walk'/'to exercise'.

× The environment is very peace.

✓ The environment is very peaceful.

Errors: 'peace' is a noun; adjective 'peaceful' is required to describe 'environment'. Suggestion: Use 'peaceful' or 'peaceful atmosphere'.

× In the evening time after completing my Ola household chores, I would like to walk in terrace which help me to relax and give me a peaceful environment and I like walking on the terrace by watching stars and sky.

✓ In the evenings, after completing my household chores, I like to walk on the terrace because it helps me relax and gives me a peaceful atmosphere; I enjoy watching the stars and the sky while I walk.

Errors: 'In the evening time' -> 'In the evenings'. 'Ola' unclear and omitted; 'household chores' not 'Ola household chores'. 'I would like to walk in terrace' wrong article/preposition; use 'walk on the terrace'. Verb agreement 'which help' should be 'which helps' or restructure. 'give me a peaceful environment' -> 'gives me a peaceful atmosphere'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions, correct prepositions/articles, and ensure subject-verb agreement.