走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be grammatically accurate and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one supporting reason with a linking word. Use correct verb forms and natural collocations (e.g., 'stay in bed', 'go to class', 'eat in the canteen'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: It depends on the day. On weekends I usually stay in bed and don’t walk much, but from Monday to Friday I walk a lot because I walk between classes and go to the canteen for lunch.

建议: Give a clear direct answer then add one or two specific memories. Avoid filler sounds and repeated 'like'. Use past tense consistently and specific details (who, where, activity). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I think so — I often went out as a child. I remember walking in the park with my granny, playing with our dog and riding a bicycle near our house.

建议: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to structure your reasons (for example, 'First' or 'Because'). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'peaceful', 'relaxing', 'fresh air'). One or two clear reasons with a short explanation is enough.

示例: People walk in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and relaxing. For example, parks offer fresh air and green space where people can exercise or unwind after a busy day.

建议: Use conditional grammar correctly ('I would go to Paris') and avoid unclear verbs ('admire', not 'admiss'). Be specific about what you would do and why. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'to'.

示例: If I could, I would go to Paris and take a long walk along the Seine to see the Eiffel Tower. I would enjoy the music, people-watching and the lively atmosphere.

建议: Answer in the past tense with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail about the location and activity. Remove filler words and repeated 'like'. Use natural phrases ('a market near my home', 'grab some food', 'chat with friends'). Keep it concise.

示例: Lately I walked to a market near my home called Pet Night Plaza. I walked there to grab some food and have a short chat with my friends.

× It depends on the day, like at the weekend I not walk a lot because I just lay in my bed and not have anything to do.

✓ It depends on the day; on weekends I do not walk much because I just lie in bed and do not have anything to do.

Multiple sentence structure and verb errors: 'like at the weekend' is informal and awkward, use 'on weekends' or 'at the weekend'. 'I not walk' is incorrect word order and missing auxiliary; use 'I do not walk'. 'lay in my bed' uses the wrong verb: 'lay' is transitive (requires object); use 'lie' for reclining. 'not have anything to do' needs auxiliary: 'do not have'. Suggest practicing subject-auxiliary order in negatives and correct lie/lay usage. Grammar problem type ID:26

× But in life Monday to Friday I have to walk a lot because I have to learn and like go to another class and eat to the canteen for lunch.

✓ But from Monday to Friday I have to walk a lot because I have to study, go to different classes, and eat in the canteen for lunch.

Tense and word choice: 'in life Monday to Friday' is incorrect; use 'from Monday to Friday'. 'have to learn' should be 'have to study' for clarity. 'like go to another class' is ungrammatical filler and wrong preposition; use 'go to different classes'. 'eat to the canteen' uses wrong preposition; use 'eat in the canteen'. Suggest using clear time phrases and correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× MMM, well, I mean I cannot remember it, but I think I like go out a lot because I used to like, love to walk with my granny in the park, to like play with my dog and like a bicycle.

✓ Well, I cannot remember exactly, but I think I went out a lot because I used to love walking with my granny in the park, playing with my dog, and riding a bicycle.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'I cannot remember it' is acceptable but 'exactly' is clearer. 'I like go out' is wrong; past context requires 'I went out' or 'I used to go out'. 'used to like, love to walk' is redundant and awkward; use 'used to love walking'. 'to like play' should be 'playing' and 'like a bicycle' should be 'riding a bicycle'. Suggest using consistent past forms and gerunds for activities. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I used to like, love to walk with my granny in the park, to like play with my dog and like a bicycle.

✓ I used to love walking with my granny in the park, playing with my dog, and riding a bicycle.

Redundant filler 'like' repeated and awkward parallelism: the list of activities must use parallel gerund forms. Replace repeated 'like' and ensure pronouns/subjects are consistent. Suggest removing filler words and keeping parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I think it's all about the atmosphere because it's had a good, like, peaceful calm and tranquility.

✓ I think it's all about the atmosphere because it has a peaceful, calm tranquility.

Article and verb issues: 'it's had a good' incorrectly uses past participle 'had' with 'it'; use 'it has' or 'it's'. 'a good, like, peaceful calm and tranquility' is redundant and ungrammatical; choose adjectives and nouns correctly and order them: 'a peaceful, calm atmosphere' or 'peace and tranquility'. Suggest simplifying and avoiding filler 'like'. Grammar problem type ID:17

× And like, I think it's chill and the park is made for that's purpose.

✓ I think it's chill and the park is made for that purpose.

Pronoun and demonstrative errors: 'that's purpose' is incorrect contraction and possessive; use 'that purpose' or 'this purpose'. Also avoid filler 'like'. Suggest using correct demonstrative pronouns and removing unnecessary fillers. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Well, if I could I will go to the Paris and take a long walk like seeing the Eiffel Tower and just admiss the atmosphere as miss the music and the people and the crowded Yeah.

✓ Well, if I could, I would go to Paris and take a long walk, see the Eiffel Tower, and enjoy the atmosphere, the music, the people, and the crowds.

Conditional and modal errors: 'if I could I will' mixes conditional forms; for hypothetical use 'I would'. 'the Paris' incorrectly uses definite article before city names; use 'Paris'. 'admiss the atmosphere as miss the music' are incorrect verbs; use 'enjoy the atmosphere, the music' and 'the crowds' instead of 'the crowded'. Suggest using correct conditional structures (if + past -> would) and correct nouns/verbs. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Question uses simple past 'did you go' with 'lately' (a time expression that pairs with present perfect). Use present perfect 'have you gone' to ask about recent activities. Suggest matching time expressions with correct tenses. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Umm, it actually like a market near my home is called Pet at the Night Plaza and yeah, I have to like walk a lot because I just find the food to eat and yeah, it's just a little talk with my friends.

✓ Um, actually there is a market near my home called Pet at the Night Plaza, and I often walk there to find food to eat and have a little talk with my friends.

Multiple structure and grammar issues: missing 'there is' to introduce existence of the market (There be issue), unnecessary 'like' fillers, awkward tense and verb forms 'I have to like walk a lot because I just find the food to eat' should be 'I often walk there to find food to eat'. Also 'it's just a little talk' should be 'have a little talk' or 'chat a bit'. Suggest using 'there is' for introducing places, removing filler 'like', and using natural verbs like 'chat'. Grammar problem type ID:3