走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and add a clear reason with linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect phrases. Start with a topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words and specific examples.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in the park near my house. I usually go there in the morning because the air is fresh and it helps me relax. For example, I walk for about 30 minutes three times a week to clear my mind.

建议: Use past tense consistently and give a clear topic sentence plus a specific detail or short anecdote. Use linking words like 'and' or 'often' to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrases.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. I used to walk around the neighborhood with my friends, and sometimes we would run and play in the park for hours. Those walks were fun because we always found new places to explore.

建议: Give a clear, general reason and support it with specific details. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example', and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'trees', 'fresh air', 'relaxation').

示例: People like to walk in parks because parks provide fresh air and a peaceful environment. For example, parks have trees and flowers that make the area quiet and relaxing, so many people walk there to reduce stress and exercise.

建议: Answer directly with a clear location and give specific reasons why, using correct vocabulary and linking phrases. Keep sentences short and grammatical, and avoid invented words or unclear phrases.

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the small park near my house. It has many trees and flowers and a calm atmosphere, which makes it ideal for a relaxing long walk.

建议: Use correct past tense and give specific details about the visit. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details and one short result or feeling. Avoid repeating words and fix vocabulary (e.g., 'trees', 'lake').

示例: Recently I went to Ben Sakethi Park for a walk. The park is very beautiful, with a nearby lake, many trees and colorful flowers. I even took some photos because the scenery was lovely.

× Yes I do, I very enjoy walking in the park near my house.

✓ Yes I do. I really enjoy walking in the park near my house.

The student used 'very' incorrectly before the verb 'enjoy'. Use the adverb 'really' to modify 'enjoy' or restructure the sentence. Also sentences should be separated with a period. Suggestion: use 'I really enjoy' or 'I enjoy walking a lot.'

× Uh, sometime I walk around neighborhoods because it's tell me.

✓ Sometimes I walk around the neighborhood because it relaxes me.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'. 'Neighborhoods' can be singular 'the neighborhood' if referring to the area near home. 'It's tell me' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'it tells me' (also odd) or better 'it relaxes me' or 'it clears my mind'. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'relaxes' and correct adverb form.

× Yes I did when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child.

This sentence is acceptable but needs a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation. No tense error; minimal punctuation correction.

× I really enjoy walking around my house with my friend.

✓ I really enjoyed walking around my house with my friend.

The question asked about the past (when you were a child), so the verb should be in the past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions.

× Sometime we ran at the park together.

✓ Sometimes we ran in the park together.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'. The preposition should be 'in' the park rather than 'at' for being inside/open space. Keep past tense 'ran' to match context.

× We very enjoy at the moment.

✓ We enjoyed it at the time.

'We very enjoy' is incorrect word order and tense. For past context use 'enjoyed'. 'At the moment' means now; use 'at the time' for past. Also include object 'it'. Suggestion: 'We enjoyed it at the time.'

× To be honest, the park is uh, a lot of tea.

✓ To be honest, the park has a lot of trees.

'A lot of tea' is likely a phonetic error for 'a lot of trees'. Use 'has a lot of trees' to describe quantity; 'has' is the correct verb for possession. Suggestion: 'the park has a lot of trees.'

× The, the, uh, it's have is offer fresh air and no pollution.

✓ It offers fresh air and no pollution.

Remove fillers and extra words. 'It's have' is incorrect; use 'it offers' (third person singular present). 'No pollution' is fine. Suggestion: use concise sentence 'It offers fresh air and little pollution.' if you want nuance.

× People, people walk to in the park because it's tell people.

✓ People walk in the park because it relaxes them.

Reduce repetition 'People, people'. Use 'walk in the park' (not 'to in'). 'It's tell people' is ungrammatical; likely means 'it relaxes them' or 'it clears their minds'. Use correct pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: 'People walk in the park because it relaxes them.'

× Well I prefer work at park near my house.

✓ Well, I would prefer to walk in the park near my house.

The student used 'prefer work' incorrectly. After 'prefer' + verb, use 'to' infinitive ('to walk') or 'prefer walking'. The question asked hypothetical 'if you had the chance' so 'would prefer' fits. Also include articles: 'the park' or 'a park near my house'. Suggestion: 'I would prefer to walk in the park near my house.'

× Call make up speed is a small park and there are perfectly It's a lot of tea and flour.

✓ It's a small park and it's perfect. It has a lot of trees and flowers.

Original is garbled. 'Call make up speed' is unclear; replace with 'It's' or 'The park is'. Use 'perfect' not 'perfectly'. 'It's a lot of tea and flour' should be 'It has a lot of trees and flowers.' Use 'has' for possession and correct nouns. Suggestion: keep sentences simple: 'It's a small, perfect park. It has many trees and flowers.'

× I enjoy atmosphere.

✓ I enjoy the atmosphere.

'Atmosphere' needs an article 'the' when referring to the park's atmosphere. Also 'enjoy' is fine. Suggestion: 'I enjoy the atmosphere.'

× Recently I go to Ben Sakethi park for walk around.

✓ Recently I went to Ben Sakethi Park for a walk.

Use past tense 'went' because 'recently' refers to a completed action. Use article 'a walk' and correct word order 'went to [place] for a walk.' Capitalize proper noun 'Park'. Suggestion: 'I recently went to Ben Sakethi Park for a walk.'

× The park is very beautiful, nearby lake and tea and also flower is very beautiful.

✓ The park is very beautiful; there is a nearby lake, and the trees and flowers are also very beautiful.

Original misses verbs and articles. Use 'there is' to introduce the lake. Use plural nouns 'trees' and 'flowers' and 'are' to agree. Suggestion: break into two clauses and use correct verbs and plurals.

× I snapped the picture.

✓ I snapped a picture.

'The picture' is grammatical but 'a picture' is more natural unless referring to a specific previously mentioned picture. Past tense 'snapped' is correct. Suggestion: use 'I snapped a picture' or 'I took a picture.'