走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は直接的で内容も分かりやすいですが、構成と流暢さを改善できます。トピック文で明確に立場を示し、その後の理由や具体例を結び付けるために接続語（for example, however, although, because）を使ってください。冗長な表現を避け、最大5文に収めて、語彙を少し広げれば自然さが増します。発音や文法（時制、一致）にも注意してください。

示例: I don't walk a lot because I usually go to school by bike and train. However, I do enjoy walking my dog in the evenings because it helps me relax and keeps me fit. For example, we walk for about 20 minutes every day after dinner.

建议: 過去と現在を区別する表現（used to, when I was a child, now）を正確に使う必要があります。また、断片的な文や語順の間違い（"So. I have day I don't go."）を修正して、論理的な流れを作ってください。接続語（but, however, so）を適切に用い、具体的な頻度や理由を付け加えると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, I used to go for walks with my dog almost every day when I was a child. However, during hot summers I preferred staying indoors because it was too hot to walk for long. As a result, I sometimes skipped my walks on very hot days.

建议: アイデアは良いですが表現が不自然で文法的に不正確です（"more nearly nature", "to working"）。理由を整理し、論理的に繋げる接続語を使い、具体例や結果を付け加えてください。語彙を置き換えて自然なフレーズ（enjoy nature, relax, improve fitness）を使うと良いです。

示例: People like walking in parks because it lets them enjoy nature and escape the busy city. In addition, walking in a park is a gentle form of exercise that improves fitness and reduces stress. For example, many people go to parks to breathe fresh air and relax after work.

建议: 願望を述べる構成は良いですが、連結と文法を改善してください。"I think there looks so comfortable"は不自然なので、形容詞や副詞の使い方を整え、理由を明確に述べてください。接続語（because, even if）を正しく用いて、具体的な状況を示すと説得力が上がります。

示例: I'd like to take a long walk along the seaside because the sea breeze feels cool and relaxing. Even in hot summers the coast is often more comfortable than inland areas, so I could walk for hours without getting too tired.

建议: 最近のことと過去の出来事を混同しています。最初に現在の状況を短く述べ（I haven't walked recently.）、次に過去の経験を過去形で詳述してください。また、感想を述べる際の時制や語彙（exhausting, tiring, challenging）を正しく使い、具体的な詳細（どの山、どのくらいの時間）を加えると良いです。

示例: I haven't gone for a walk recently because I've been busy with school. Last year, however, I walked up a nearby mountain; the trail was steep and challenging, and the hike took about four hours, which left me feeling exhausted but proud.

× No, I go to school by bike and train every day so I don't have time to walk.

✓ No, I go to school by bike and by train every day, so I don't have time to walk.

The sentence is mostly correct tense-wise but needs parallel prepositions for clarity and a comma before the coordinating conjunction. Use 'by bike and by train' for parallel structure and add a comma before 'so' when it connects two independent clauses.

× But I like walking with my dog.

✓ But I like walking with my dog.

This sentence is correct: present simple expresses a habitual preference. No tense change is needed.

× It's good for my health too.

✓ It's good for my health too.

Correct present simple; no grammatical tense error.

× Yes, I used to walk around with my dog.

✓ Yes, I used to walk around with my dog.

Correct use of 'used to' for past habitual actions; no change required.

× But in summer, I don't like walking around.

✓ But in summer, I don't like walking around.

Present simple correctly expresses a general habit or preference. No tense correction needed.

× So. I have day I don't go.

✓ So there are days when I don't go.

Fragment and word order problems. 'So.' is a sentence fragment; use a full clause. Correct structure: 'there are days when I don't go' uses 'there are' to indicate existence and 'when' to introduce the time clause.

× I think people feel like more nearly nature through walking in the park.

✓ I think people feel closer to nature by walking in the park.

Wrong prepositions and word forms: 'feel like' is incorrect here, 'more nearly' is unnatural, and 'nature' needs 'to'. Use 'feel closer to nature' and 'by' to indicate method.

× In addition. It's good for our health to working. Eat right, exercise.

✓ In addition, it's good for our health: we should eat right and exercise.

Multiple sentence fragments and wrong verb forms. 'In addition.' is a fragment; combine clauses. 'to working' is incorrect; use 'we should' plus base verbs 'eat' and 'exercise' or 'to work' depending on meaning. Here 'we should eat right and exercise' is natural advice.

× I'd like to walk on the seaside.

✓ I'd like to walk by the seaside.

Preposition choice: 'on the seaside' is nonstandard in this context. Use 'by the seaside' or 'along the seaside' for walking near the coast. The conditional 'I'd like' is appropriate.

× I think. There looks so comfortable and cool.

✓ I think it looks very comfortable and cool there.

Fragment and word order errors. 'I think.' is a fragment; combine with the following clause. 'There looks so comfortable' is ungrammatical; subject 'it' and adverb placement 'very' are needed, and 'there' at end indicates location.

× Even if it's too hot summer.

✓ Even if it's too hot in summer.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'summer' and sentence fragment; add 'in' to indicate time and integrate into a full sentence.

× Actually, I didn't go anywhere recently, but last year I went to the mountain.

✓ Actually, I haven't gone anywhere recently, but last year I went to the mountains.

Use present perfect 'haven't gone' with 'recently' to indicate a period up to now. 'Didn't go' suggests a finished past. Also use plural 'the mountains' or 'a mountain' depending on meaning; 'the mountains' is more natural for hiking.

× It was very hard and it makes me very tired.

✓ It was very hard and it made me very tired.

Tense inconsistency: initial clause is past 'was', so the second clause should also be past 'made' to keep parallel past narration. Use 'made' instead of 'makes'.