走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và dùng từ chính xác. Tránh nói tắt quá nhiều như “Yep” trong bài thi; nói số lượng bước là tốt nhưng cần hoàn chỉnh câu chủ đề và một hoặc hai chi tiết bổ sung bằng liên từ.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. On average I walk about 8,000 to 12,000 steps a day, mainly because I commute on foot and prefer walking for short errands.

建议: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn như “uh”. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể, dùng từ vựng phù hợp (relaxation, exercise) và liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because it helped me relax and get some exercise. For example, I used to walk to the park with my friends after school to play and unwind.

建议: Cần diễn đạt ý chính chính xác và dùng từ phù hợp. Tránh lỗi đại từ và từ sai nghĩa (work → walk, sad stories → socialise). Nên nêu một câu chủ đề rồi liệt kê 2–3 lý do rõ ràng với liên từ.

示例: People like walking in parks because they can socialise with friends and enjoy fresh air. Also, parks offer a peaceful environment and a connection with nature, which helps reduce stress.

建议: Cần câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh lặp và ngắt quãng bằng “uh”. Dùng ngữ pháp điều kiện đúng và miêu tả cụ thể địa điểm (e.g. countryside, coastal path). Tránh từ không đúng nghĩa (“polite pupil”).

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the countryside or a coastal path because those areas have fresh air and peaceful scenery, which would be very relaxing.

建议: Sửa lỗi thì (lately → recently), tránh lặp từ và nói rõ chuỗi hoạt động. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề về thời gian, sau đó nêu nơi chốn và một chi tiết cụ thể (with whom, purpose).

示例: Recently I often go for walks near my home. I usually walk to a nearby café to meet a friend or take a stroll to the subway station to explore the neighborhood.

× In my daily life I often walk about 8000 to 12,000 per day.

✓ In my daily life I often walk about 8,000 to 12,000 steps per day.

The noun 'steps' is required to indicate what the numbers refer to; numbers alone are ambiguous. Use the plural form 'steps' because the count is more than one. Also format numbers consistently (e.g., 8,000). Improve by always naming the unit after a number (e.g., steps, kilometers).

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The verb phrase 'take a walk' is the correct idiomatic expression in English; 'have a walk' is less common. The question uses past simple correctly. Improve by using common collocations: 'take a walk'.

× Yep, very really unusual.

✓ Yes, that was really unusual.

The original mixes present and adverbs incorrectly. The context refers to childhood habits (past), so use past tense 'was'. Replace informal 'Yep' with 'Yes' and use the adverb 'really' correctly. Also 'very really' is redundant; use only 'really' or 'very'.

× You uh, casually, I often go outside to have a work when I was a child for more relaxation, more reduce and uh, releasing car calories and uh, enhancing my health.

✓ When I was a child, I often went outside to take a walk for relaxation, to reduce stress, to burn calories, and to improve my health.

The sentence should be in past tense ('went') to match 'when I was a child'. Use the idiom 'take a walk' and correct collocations: 'reduce stress', 'burn calories', 'improve my health'. Remove filler words and reorder for clarity. Use parallel infinitive phrases ('to relax, to reduce, to burn, to improve').

× I think people always like to work in parks because he can meet together for sad stories, umm, briefing, uh, a fresh atmospheres and uh, associated with uh, nature.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they can meet to chat, relax in the fresh atmosphere, and enjoy nature.

Use present simple 'like' for general truths. 'Work' should be 'walk'. Pronoun 'he' is incorrect for the general 'people'; use 'they'. 'Meet together for sad stories' is unnatural—use 'meet to chat'. 'A fresh atmospheres' has article and plural errors; use 'the fresh atmosphere' or 'a fresh atmosphere'. Use parallel structure when listing reasons.

× I think if I had more chance, I think the place I would like to come to, to work, uh, work is umm, uh, park and uh, suburb like, uh, where has very fresh, uh, fresh air and a polite pupil.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go to a park or the suburbs where there is very fresh air and polite people.

Use conditional 'If I had the chance, I would...' Correct verbs: 'go' instead of 'come to'; 'work' is wrong here. Use 'there is' to describe existence of fresh air. 'a polite pupil' is incorrect—use 'polite people'. Maintain parallel structure and correct word choice.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The question word 'lately' suggests present perfect tense to indicate recent activity with relevance to the present. Use 'have you gone' instead of past simple 'did you go'.

× In a reason days, I often go for a walk in nearby nearby my home, go go for going to a coffee for hang out with my friend and go into a subway for trying subway subway.

✓ Recently, I often go for a walk near my home, go to a café to hang out with my friend, and take the subway to explore.

'In a reason days' is ungrammatical; use 'Recently'. Remove duplicate words and correct prepositions: 'near my home', 'go to a café', 'hang out with my friend'. Use 'take the subway' and 'explore' instead of 'trying subway subway'. Ensure parallel verb forms in the list ('go', 'go', 'take').