走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên: Tránh lặp từ ("walk a lot" dùng nhiều lần), dùng thì phù hợp và câu ngắn gọn hơn; thêm câu chủ đề rõ ràng và một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng liên từ. Ngoài ra chú ý phát âm và ngắt câu để nghe tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I do. I often go for walks with my friends or family because it helps me relax and catch up with them.

建议: Sửa cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp: Dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán, sửa lỗi từ vựng và trật tự từ (ví dụ "parents were very busy with work"); mở rộng thêm lý do cụ thể với liên từ để rõ nghĩa.

示例: No, I didn't. When I was a child my parents were very busy with work, so I usually stayed at home and didn't go out very often.

建议: Nên trả lời chung cho "people" thay vì "me" nếu câu hỏi mang tính chung; sửa ngữ pháp ("it makes me feel"), dùng từ chính xác ("relieve stress" not "straight"); dùng liên từ để giải thích thêm và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể.

示例: People like walking in parks because it makes them feel relaxed and helps relieve stress after school or work. For example, the fresh air and green trees create a peaceful atmosphere.

建议: Làm cho câu mạch lạc hơn: xác định rõ "the peak" bạn định nói là gì (a mountain peak, a hill), tránh câu mơ hồ như "because I want to"; thêm lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để nối ý và cung cấp hình ảnh miêu tả.

示例: I would like to take a long walk to a mountain peak because I enjoy the fresh air and the exercise, and the sunset views from the top would be stunning.

建议: Dùng thì phù hợp (past simple) và cung cấp thêm chi tiết: nói rõ khi nào gần đây, tuyến đường hoặc hoạt động kèm theo; sử dụng liên từ để mở rộng câu một cách tự nhiên.

示例: Lately I went for a walk near my house with my brother. We walked along the riverside trail last weekend and stopped at a small café afterwards.

× Yes I do. I often walk a lot with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I do. I often walk a lot with my friends or family.

The original sentence lacks a comma after the introductory 'Yes' which is punctuation, not a grammar category listed; no tense error. Keep present simple 'I often walk' which is correct. Suggest adding comma for natural speech: 'Yes, I do.'

× No, I didn't because when I was a child my parents very pleased for work, so I don't go outside.

✓ No, I didn't because when I was a child my parents were very busy with work, so I didn't go outside.

Errors: missing past tense of 'be' (were) and incorrect adjective/phrase 'very pleased for work' should be 'very busy with work'; final clause uses present 'don't' but context requires past 'didn't'. Types: Past tense issue (5) and Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13) and Incorrect use of prepositions (11). Follow instruction to only correct listed types — primary correction uses past tense. Suggestion: use 'were' for past state, 'busy with' for work, and keep past tense 'didn't go'.

× Because it make me feel comfortable and relieve straight after our school our work.

✓ Because it makes me feel comfortable and relieves stress after school or work.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'make' should be 'makes' (third person singular) which falls under Present tense issue (6) and Third person singular issue (2). Also 'relieve straight' is incorrect word choice; intended 'relieves stress'. 'our school our work' should be 'after school or work'. Suggestion: use 'it makes' and 'relieves stress' and 'after school or work'.

× I would like to take a long walk in the peak. I really like it because I want to. The sunset is very beautiful.

✓ I would like to take a long walk on the peak. I really like it because the sunset there is very beautiful.

Preposition error: use 'on the peak' not 'in the peak' when referring to mountain peaks (type 11). Also original second sentence 'I really like it because I want to.' is vague; improved to 'because the sunset there is very beautiful.' Suggestion: use 'on' with 'peak' and clarify reason.

× Lately I go for a walk near my house with my brother.

✓ Lately I have been going for walks near my house with my brother.

Tense issue: 'lately' signals a recent continuing action, so present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have been going') is appropriate (type 6). Also pluralize 'walks' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'have been going' to express recent repeated actions.