走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use natural sentence structures. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Reduce repetition ("walk" used too often) and fix grammar (use present simple correctly).

示例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually get up early and walk for about 30 to 60 minutes every morning, which helps me feel energised for the day.

建议: Use past simple consistently and organise into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Avoid long, run-on sentences and correct tense and word order errors.

示例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. For example, my parents would take me and my friends to the park near our homes, where we walked and played together.

建议: Begin with a concise general reason, then give a specific explanation and link ideas with connectors. Correct singular/plural and article use, and choose natural vocabulary (relaxed, peaceful).

示例: People like to walk in parks because they offer fresh air and greenery. As a result, walking there helps people relax and feel peaceful away from noisy streets.

建议: Provide a clear conditional topic sentence and one specific reason. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (use conditional correctly and correct place names). Be concise and mention why you chose the place.

示例: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk on Salher in Maharashtra. It is one of the highest peaks in the local Yadri range, and I would enjoy the scenery and the challenge of the hike.

建议: Answer directly with past simple and give one clear specific detail about location or routine. Fix grammar and word order, and avoid vague phrases like "once more" or "move lately."

示例: Recently I walked along the riverfront near my house. I usually go there after dinner because it is calm and pleasant for an evening stroll.

× Yes, I like to walk because daily I wake up early in the morning for walking.

✓ Yes, I like to walk because I wake up early every morning to go walking.

The original sentence uses an awkward adverb order and an incorrect verb pattern ('for walking'). Use 'every morning' for natural frequency and 'to go walking' (infinitive purpose) to express reason. This fits present simple tense for habitual actions.

× I walk daily half to one hour.

✓ I walk for half an hour to one hour every day.

Word order and article use are incorrect. Use 'for' with durations and 'half an hour' (singular) or 'one hour', and place frequency 'every day' at end for clarity.

× So I like walking.

✓ So I like walking.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses the gerund 'walking' to express a general preference.

× Yes, when I was child that time also I go for a walk with my parents and in my nearby my home me and my friends live together so we are going for walking and playing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to go for walks with my parents, and my friends and I lived near each other, so we would go walking and play together.

Multiple tense and structure errors: missing article 'a' before 'child', inappropriate present tense verbs ('go', 'live', 'are going') for past habitual actions. Use 'used to' or 'would' for past habits and change verbs to past ('lived'). Reorder phrases for clarity.

× So yes I go outside to walk.

✓ So yes, I went outside to walk.

Context asks about past (Did you often go... when you were a child?), so answer should be in past tense. Change 'go' to 'went'.

× I feel people like to walk in a parks because in park gives a clean environment some greenery.

✓ I feel people like to walk in parks because parks provide a clean environment and some greenery.

Incorrect article use: 'a parks' should be plural 'parks' without 'a'. Also 'in park gives' is ungrammatical; use subject 'parks' with verb 'provide' and connect ideas with 'and'.

× This make us feel relaxed and peace so everyone like to go walk in the park.

✓ This makes us feel relaxed and peaceful, so everyone likes to go for a walk in the park.

Subject-verb agreement: 'This' requires 'makes'. 'Peace' should be adjective 'peaceful'. Also 'everyone' is singular, so 'likes'. Use 'go for a walk' as the natural expression.

× If I get chance then I'd like to go for a walk.

✓ If I get the chance, I'd like to take a long walk.

Add article 'the' before 'chance' for idiomatic English. Also use 'take a long walk' to match the question about a long walk.

× My favorite mountain mountain it is Salher which is the located in Maharashtra which is highest mountain of this say Yadri.

✓ My favorite mountain is Salher, which is located in Maharashtra; it is the highest mountain in the Satpuda range called Yadri.

Redundant 'mountain mountain', incorrect articles 'the located', confusing phrase 'this say'. Rearranged to correct relative clause, articles, and provide clearer geographic phrasing. Use present simple to state facts.

× So whenever I get chance I want to go there.

✓ So whenever I get the chance, I want to go there.

Missing article 'the' before 'chance'. Present simple 'want' is acceptable to express desire; comma improves readability.

× Yes, nearby my house once more riverfront is there where I go always after had dinner.

✓ Yes, near my house there is a riverfront where I always go after dinner.

Word order and tense errors: 'nearby my house' should be 'near my house'; 'once more' is incorrect here. Use present tense 'there is' to describe location and 'always go after dinner' for habitual action; 'had dinner' implies past but context asks 'Where did you go for a walk lately?', so present perfect or simple past could be used; natural phrasing is present simple for habitual location.

× So that place I'd like to move lately for walking.

✓ So that is the place I have been going to recently for walks.

Original mixes modal contraction 'I'd' incorrectly and uses 'move lately'. For 'lately' use present perfect 'have been going' to indicate recent activity. Use 'for walks' or 'for walking' as noun phrase.