走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more direct with a clear topic sentence, shorter sentences, correct grammar, and a specific reason. Avoid redundancy like "provides a healthy lifestyle to me" and "barriers toward disease"; say instead that walking helps maintain fitness and prevent illnesses. Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I walk regularly. I usually walk in the morning and evening as part of my exercise routine because it helps me stay fit and reduces the risk of common illnesses. For example, walking for 30 minutes before work improves my energy and mood.

建议: Answer directly with correct tense and a clear reason. Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases like "creates a much anxiety and stress" and "so I don't." Explain what you did instead and use linking words to clarify contrast.

示例: Not really. When I was a child I preferred playing games with my friends rather than going for walks, so I rarely walked for exercise. However, I did enjoy running around at school during break time.

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence and give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural) and avoid repetition of ideas like "peace and calm" without examples. Mention sensory details to be specific.

示例: People enjoy walking in parks because the surroundings are peaceful and cleaner than busy streets. In addition, parks have trees and fresh air, which help reduce stress; for instance, many people walk there in the morning to relax before work.

建议: Give a clear, grammatically correct preference and explain reasons with specific details. Avoid unclear words like "barriers" and "off the place." Say what you like about your city (scenery, architecture, familiarity) and use linking words to support your choice.

示例: I would choose to take a long walk around my city because I know its streets and enjoy its architecture and local shops. For example, walking along the river and through the old neighbourhood would let me appreciate familiar views and stop at cafés along the way.

建议: Answer the question directly with a recent specific place and clear reason. Use past tense correctly and avoid confusing explanations. State when and where you walked and why (e.g., to commute because you were late), in one or two concise sentences.

示例: Recently I walked to the office because I was running late after preparing my lunch. I walked through the main street near my flat, which takes about twenty minutes and is a convenient route to work.

× Yes, I work a lot in my daily life just by doing physical activities such as going gym and walking in the morning as well as in the evening because it provides a healthy lifestyle to me and several barriers toward disease.

✓ Yes, I exercise a lot in my daily life by doing physical activities such as going to the gym and walking in the morning and in the evening because they provide a healthy lifestyle for me and help prevent disease.

Errors: 'going gym' needs the gerund with correct preposition 'going to the gym' (verb + -ing and preposition). 'it provides' doesn't agree with plural activities; use 'they provide' (subject-verb agreement). 'several barriers toward disease' is an incorrect collocation; use 'help prevent disease'. Suggestion: use 'exercise' instead of 'work' for physical activity and ensure verbs agree with plural subjects.

× When I was child I was not much interested in walking because it creates a much anxiety and stress in my life when I was child just by playing with my friends, so I don't.

✓ When I was a child I was not very interested in walking because I experienced a lot of anxiety and stress in my life from playing with my friends, so I did not.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (article error) and awkward structure. 'creates a much anxiety' is incorrect adjective/adverb use and article use; correct is 'experienced a lot of anxiety'. Repeated phrase 'when I was child' is redundant. The final short answer 'so I don't' is wrong tense; should match past 'did not'. Suggestion: add articles, use past tense consistently and use 'a lot of' for intensity.

× People often go for walking in the park because park always have a healthy and quiet environment which provides peace and calm to the peoples in their daily life by walking in the evening and also in the morning.

✓ People often go for walks in the park because the park always has a healthy and quiet environment which provides peace and calm to people in their daily lives when they walk in the evening or in the morning.

Errors: 'go for walking' should be 'go for walks' or 'go walking' (verb+noun or verb+ing structure). Missing article 'the' before 'park'. 'park always have' subject-verb disagreement; use 'has'. 'peoples' incorrect plural noun; use 'people'. 'daily life' should be 'daily lives' to match plural. Suggestion: choose either 'go for walks' or 'go walking', include articles and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× If I get a chance of walking a long period of time, I would prefer to walk around my city because I like most of the barriers of my city and outsider of my city, so I like to walk and off the place on the road.

✓ If I had the chance to walk for a long period of time, I would prefer to walk around my city because I like most parts of my city and its surroundings, so I enjoy walking outdoors on the roads.

Errors: 'get a chance of walking a long period of time' is awkward; use conditional 'If I had the chance to walk for a long period of time'. 'barriers' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'areas' or 'parts'. 'outsider of my city' incorrect noun; use 'surroundings'. 'walk and off the place' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use conditional form 'If I had...', correct word choices, and appropriate prepositions ('for', 'around', 'outdoors').

× This situation only occurs in my job time when I used to go for a job and because of my food preparation I get late. So sometime the problem creates in my job life by walking around the cities for achieving the office.

✓ This only happens when I am going to work and, because I prepare my food, I am late. Sometimes this causes problems at work when I have to walk around the city to get to the office.

Errors: 'job time' and 'go for a job' are awkward; use 'going to work'. Tense inconsistency: 'used to' implies past habit but speaker refers to current habit; use present simple or present continuous as appropriate. 'because of my food preparation I get late' should be 'because I prepare my food, I am late'. 'the problem creates in my job life by walking around the cities for achieving the office' is ungrammatical; use 'causes problems at work when I have to walk around the city to get to the office'. Suggestion: simplify phrasing, fix tense consistency, and use correct collocations like 'going to work' and 'get to the office'.